Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify and correct small errors, be concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers clearly (Yes/No), avoid word choice mistakes (e.g., 'work' → 'walk'), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add one specific detail using a linking word for coherence.

Example: Yes, I walk quite a lot when I have free time. For example, I often walk around my neighborhood for 45 minutes to get exercise and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and sentence structure, and avoid run-on sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes), then add 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words and correct verbs and plurality.

Example: Yes, I went outside almost every day after school. For instance, my friends and I would play in the park, walk around the neighborhood, and sometimes run races.

Suggestion: Good idea but make language more natural and precise. Use linking words to add a second reason or example, and avoid awkward phrasing like 'their nature' (use 'nature' or 'the natural environment').

Example: People like walking in parks because the air is cleaner and the surroundings are more peaceful. In addition, parks offer greenery and paths where people can exercise or relax away from traffic.

Suggestion: Be specific and coherent: choose one clear location and explain why. Fix tense and phrasing errors, avoid repetition, and use linking words to connect ideas. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I would like to take a long walk through a lively city center with many shops and cafés. That way I could explore interesting stores and stop for coffee when I see something attractive.

Suggestion: Use correct grammar and concise structure. Begin with a clear past-tense statement about a recent walk, then add one specific detail using linking words. Correct phrases like 'the around' and 'buy some grocery' to 'around my neighborhood' and 'buy groceries.'

Example: Recently I walked around my neighborhood in the evenings. For example, after work I often walk to the nearby grocery store to buy groceries and then return home.

× If I have time, I do enjoy work quite a lot and I am able to walk a relatively long distance just around the neighborhood.

✓ If I have time, I enjoy walking quite a lot and I can walk a relatively long distance around the neighborhood.

Using 'do enjoy work' is incorrect: 'work' is not intended and the emphatic 'do' is unnecessary. Use simple present 'enjoy' for habitual actions. Also use the gerund 'walking' after 'enjoy' and 'can' is a more natural modal for ability. Remove 'just' before 'around' for clarity.

× Yes, when I was a child, basically I live outside every day after class me and my friends will play outside and we not only walk, we often run sometime.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I basically lived outside every day after class. My friends and I would play outside; we not only walked, we often ran sometimes.

The time frame is past so verbs must be past tense: 'live' -> 'lived'. Sentence run-on: separate into two sentences and correct word order 'My friends and I'. Use 'would' or 'would play' for habitual past and plural verbs 'walked' and 'ran'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'.

× The air in the park is normally better and it gives people an opportunity to be closer to their nature.

✓ The air in parks is usually better, and it gives people an opportunity to be closer to nature.

Use plural or general reference 'parks' for general statement. 'Normally' -> 'usually' is more natural. 'Their nature' is incorrect collocation; use 'nature' without 'their'.

× Just around the neighborhood, like on a business trip where lots of shops are open and I just walk on the street and if I found something interest I was just walking to see.

✓ I would go just around the neighborhood, for example on a business trip where lots of shops are open; I would walk along the street, and if I found something interesting, I would stop to look.

Mixed tenses and unclear structure. Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical 'if I had the chance'. Keep consistent modal verbs. 'Found' should be 'found' in conditional clauses but better to use 'if I found' with consistent 'would'. 'Something interest' -> 'something interesting'. 'Walk on the street' -> 'walk along the street'.

× Lately just the around my neighborhood, like I go for walk and after work I would visit the grocery store, buy some grocery and then go back home.

✓ Lately, just around my neighborhood: I go for a walk, and after work I visit the grocery store, buy some groceries, and then go back home.

Remove extra 'the' and wrong word order 'the around my neighborhood' -> 'around my neighborhood'. 'Go for walk' needs an article: 'go for a walk'. Use simple present 'I go' for habitual recent actions; 'would' is unnecessary. 'Grocery' as noun plural 'groceries'. Add commas for clarity.