Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unnatural phrasing.

Example: Not really. I hardly walk because my daily schedule is very busy, with work and studying. However, I try to walk short distances when I run errands or go to the shop.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and combine short fragmented sentences. Provide one clear example and connect ideas with linking words.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child I often went outside with my parents and friends; for example, we usually visited the local park to play games and have picnics.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words to list reasons and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'walk' not 'work'). Keep to two or three concise reasons with brief explanations.

Example: People like walking in parks for several reasons: firstly, parks offer a peaceful environment for relaxation; secondly, there are green spaces and walking paths that make exercise enjoyable; finally, parks are often pleasant places to meet friends.

Suggestion: Use a clear conditional structure and correct noun phrases. Limit to one main reason plus one supporting detail and use linking words to connect them.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a large city park because its peaceful atmosphere and fresh air help me reduce stress and prepare mentally for a busy day.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and more natural expressions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details about where and with whom you walk, using linking words.

Example: Recently I have been walking on the footpaths near my house. I often go there with friends, and we usually chat while we walk for about thirty minutes.

× Hardly ever. Instead I stay quite busy with my hectic routines, so that is why I walk a bit.

✓ Hardly ever. Instead, I stay quite busy with my hectic routine, so I walk only a little.

Problems: adverb placement and redundancy. 'Instead' should be followed by a comma. 'Hectic routines' is plural but context prefers 'routine' (singular) or keep plural—here 'routine' sounds natural. 'So that is why' is redundant; use 'so' or 'that is why'. 'Walk a bit' is informal; 'walk only a little' is clearer. Suggestion: place adverbs and commas correctly and avoid redundant phrases. Suggested grammar problem type ID:20 and 26 (adverb placement and sentence structure).

× Of course, when I was a child, I often go to the outside with my parents.

✓ Of course, when I was a child, I often went outside with my parents.

Use past tense 'went' to match 'when I was a child' (past time reference). Also 'go to the outside' is unnatural — use 'went outside'. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions and use natural prepositions (see ID 5 and 11).

× Or friends.

✓ Or with friends.

Fragment lacks verb and preposition. Add 'with' to indicate accompaniment: 'Or with friends.' Alternatively, combine with the previous sentence. Suggestion: ensure phrases are complete and include necessary prepositions (IDs 8 and 11).

× For instance, I often go to the park and playing with my parents and friends.

✓ For instance, I often went to the park and played with my parents and friends.

Mixed verb forms: 'go' (base/present) and 'playing' (-ing) create mismatch. In past context, use past simple for both actions: 'went' and 'played'. Suggestion: keep parallel verb forms and match tense (IDs 5 and 8).

× Plenty of factors can be mentioned among these.

✓ Many factors can be mentioned.

'Plenty of' is colloquial and 'among these' is unnecessary here. 'Many factors can be mentioned' is concise and grammatically correct. Suggestion: use appropriate quantifiers and concise phrasing (IDs 14 and 26).

× Uh, there is a peaceful environment in the park, which is why people like to work in the parks.

✓ There is a peaceful environment in the park, which is why people like to walk in parks.

Original says 'work in the parks' which contradicts context (should be 'walk'). Also plural consistency: 'in the park' vs 'in parks' — choose consistent form. Suggestion: ensure 'there is/are' matches what follows and vocabulary fits context (ID 3 and 27).

× Apart from that, there are plenty of uh grounds and gardens are also here.

✓ Apart from that, there are plenty of grounds and gardens here.

Redundant 'are' after conjunction and awkward 'uh'. Remove repetition: 'there are plenty of grounds and gardens here.' Also consider 'grounds' may be unusual; 'open spaces' or 'green areas' could be better. Suggestion: avoid filler words and redundant verbs (IDs 26 and 22).

× If I had the chance to walk for a long, I would like to go to the park because there is a place where I find peaceful environment along with fresh atmosphere which reduce my stress and anxiety enter the busy day.

✓ If I had the chance to walk for a long time, I would like to go to the park because it is a place where I find a peaceful environment and fresh air, which reduce my stress and anxiety before a busy day.

Errors: missing noun 'time' after 'a long'; awkward relative clause 'there is a place where I find peaceful environment' should be 'it is a place where I find a peaceful environment'. 'Fresh atmosphere' is unnatural — use 'fresh air'. 'Which reduce' should be 'which reduces' to agree with singular noun 'air' or 'which reduce' if referring to plural 'environment and air' but sentence rephrased to keep singular. 'enter the busy day' should be 'before a busy day'. Suggestion: correct noun phrases, subject-verb agreement, and collocations (IDs 7, 13, 27, 11).

× I usually go for a walk lately in the road paths which is situated near my house and I often go to there with my friends and sometimes we gossip for a long time there.

✓ Lately, I usually go for a walk on the road paths situated near my house; I often go there with my friends, and sometimes we gossip there for a long time.

Tense/adverb conflicts: 'lately' pairs with present perfect but can be used with 'usually'—better place adverb at start. Use 'on the road paths' or better 'on the paths near my house'; 'which is situated' should be 'situated' (paths plural require 'are situated'), or rephrase. 'Go to there' is incorrect — use 'go there'. Run-on sentence fixed with punctuation. Suggestion: place adverbs correctly, use correct relative clause agreement and prepositions, and avoid 'go to there' (IDs 6,11,20,27).