Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp nhưng có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, phát âm và dùng từ không phù hợp (ví dụ 'working' thay vì 'walking'). Câu quá dài, lặp từ 'like'. Hãy sửa lỗi từ vựng, chia câu ngắn gọn hơn, dùng linking words đơn giản và chính xác hơn.

Example: No, I don't walk a lot. I usually take a short stroll around my neighborhood in the morning to get some exercise and prepare for the day.

Suggestion: Câu thiếu trôi chảy, nhiều ngập ngừng và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ 'has helps me', 'in my childhood' không tự nhiên). Tránh lặp 'like' và dùng thì quá khứ chính xác. Nên nêu rõ tần suất và một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể.

Example: Yes, I often went for walks with my parents when I was a child because they enjoyed morning exercise. We usually walked in the local park for about 30 minutes most weekends.

Suggestion: Trả lời có ý nhưng nhiều lỗi từ vựng ('working' thay vì 'walking'), cấu trúc lặp và dùng từ không chính xác ('animal atmosphere'). Cần dùng từ chính xác, rút gọn câu và thêm linking words để mạch lạc hơn.

Example: People like walking in parks because the scenery is pleasant and the air is fresh. For example, they can enjoy trees, birdsong and nice views of the sunrise or sunset, which makes walking relaxing.

Suggestion: Câu ý rõ nhưng có nhiều lỗi nhỏ: dùng mạo từ ('a opportunity' -> 'an opportunity'), lặp 'like', ngữ pháp cần được chỉnh. Hãy cấu trúc câu ngắn gọn, dùng từ miêu tả phong phú hơn.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk on the beach because I love watching the sunrise and feeling the warm sand under my feet; it feels very peaceful.

Suggestion: Câu chứa lỗi từ 'work' thay vì 'walk', cấu trúc câu cuối sai ('had me relaxed'). Nên dùng thì quá khứ đơn chính xác, mô tả ngắn gọn cảm nhận và thời lượng nếu có.

Example: Lately I walked home from the bus stop, which is about one kilometre from my house. The walk was pleasant and helped me relax after the journey.

× So absolutely not, I don't really like working, I just usually take a stroll around my neighborhood to like exercise a little bit in the morning to get myself ready for the whole day.

✓ So absolutely not, I don't really like walking; I usually just take a stroll around my neighborhood to exercise a little in the morning to get myself ready for the whole day.

The student used 'working' instead of 'walking', which is a wrong word choice (sentence structure and vocabulary). Also 'to like exercise' contains unnecessary filler 'like' and the adverb order is awkward. Suggest removing filler 'like', use 'walking', and place 'just' before 'take' for natural emphasis. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× So I used to like go outside to have a walk in my childhood, but absolutely with my parents 'cause they are like they are really into exercising, especially in the morning. So they also like helps me to get that kind of exercise.

✓ I used to go outside for walks in my childhood, always with my parents because they were really into exercising, especially in the morning. They also helped me to get that kind of exercise.

Multiple issues: 'used to like go' mixes 'used to' with 'like' incorrectly; 'to have a walk' is unnatural — use 'for walks'; 'absolutely with my parents' is awkward; tense inconsistency: parents' habit in the past should use past tense 'were' and 'helped' (subject-verb agreement: 'they also helps' is incorrect). Suggestions: remove extra 'like' filler, use 'used to go' or 'used to take walks', use past tense for past habitual actions. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× In my opinion, working in the parks are like a really beautiful place to take a stroll around. Like you can see the sunset, the sunrise and also the trees around. And especially like there are a lot of trees in the park. So the animal atmosphere, the atmosphere there is really fresh.

✓ In my opinion, parks are really beautiful places to take a stroll. You can see the sunrise and sunset and the trees around. Especially, there are a lot of trees in the park, so the atmosphere there is really fresh.

Errors: 'working in the parks are' is incorrect — wrong word 'working' should be 'parks' and plural agreement 'are' must match noun 'parks' (sentence structure issues). 'A really beautiful place' should be plural 'places' if referring to 'parks'. Redundant and unclear phrase 'animal atmosphere' is odd; use 'atmosphere' alone. Remove filler 'like'. Suggestions: use direct noun 'parks', ensure plural/singular agreement, and avoid unnecessary fillers. Grammar problem type ID: 27},{