Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and repetition, give a clear direct topic sentence, and add one or two concise supporting details linked logically. Use correct verb forms and concise phrasing.

Example: I used to walk a lot when I was younger, but now I hardly walk because I am very busy. However, I still enjoy walking because it helps me relax and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer then provide specific details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repeat words. Mention who, where and what you did to make it concrete.

Example: Yes, I often walked outside as a child. For example, I used to walk with friends around my school and neighborhood every afternoon, and we would chat and explore nearby streets, which I really enjoyed.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and at least one specific reason with correct vocabulary and linking words. Avoid short clipped phrases and correct pronunciation errors (e.g., 'parks' not 'Bart').

Example: People like walking in parks because they are usually less crowded and quieter, so walkers can relax and enjoy fresh air. In addition, parks often have greenery and paths that make walking more pleasant.

Suggestion: Good idea—make the answer smoother by combining sentences and adding one specific detail or reason. Remove fillers and duplicate words.

Example: I would like to take a long walk along the beach because it is peaceful and usually less crowded; walking by the sea would help me relax and forget everyday stress.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide a clear sequence: where, what you did, and why. Use correct prepositions and reduce hesitation. Mention one or two concrete details to illustrate your experience.

Example: The last time I went for a walk was at City Stars Mall. I walked along the long corridors with my headphones on, listening to music and watching people from different cultures, which I found interesting.

× Yes, when I was young I used to walk a lot, but nowadays I'm so busy. I, I, I, I'm not talk, I don't walk. Uh, but actually I love walking and something relaxed and interested for me.

✓ Yes, when I was young I used to walk a lot, but nowadays I'm so busy. I don't walk. Actually, I love walking; it is relaxing and interesting for me.

The phrase 'I'm not talk' is ungrammatical because 'talk' requires an auxiliary form (I am not talking) or simple present negation (I do not talk). Here the intended meaning is habitual action in the present, so 'I don't walk' is appropriate and already used. 'Something relaxed and interested for me' is incorrect word choice and structure. Use adjectives 'relaxing' and 'interesting' to describe 'walking' and connect them with proper grammar: 'it is relaxing and interesting for me.' Suggestions: use correct verb forms with auxiliaries for negation and use present participles as adjectives (relaxing, interesting).

× Yes, when I was young, I was, I used to walk with my uh, uh, colleagues or friends around my school, around my home, uh, and my neighborhoods also, I used to walk with them. Uh, I really love walking, uh, to, to chat, enjoy my time.

✓ Yes, when I was young I used to walk with my colleagues or friends around my school and my neighborhood. I really loved walking to chat and enjoy my time.

Redundant filler words removed. 'I used to walk' is correct for past habitual action, but mixing 'I really love walking' with past context is inconsistent. Change to past 'I really loved walking' to match the time frame. 'Neighborhoods' should be singular if referring to the area near home; use 'neighborhood' or 'neighborhoods' consistently. Suggestions: maintain consistent tense when describing past habits, and use concise phrasing without fillers.

× I think Bart's not crowd Place, uh, it's empty. So, uh, they gonna be relaxed and grateful while walking, uh, on it. Uh, uh, that's it.

✓ I think parks are not crowded; they are quiet. So people can relax and feel grateful while walking in them.

Original has incorrect adjectives and noun forms: 'Bart's not crowd Place' is unintelligible; intended 'parks are not crowded' uses plural 'parks' and adjective 'crowded'. 'Gonna' is informal and improper in this register; use 'can' or 'will'. 'Grateful' is unusual for this context; 'relaxed' fits better and 'feel grateful' is acceptable but 'relaxed' is primary. Preposition 'on it' is wrong for parks; use 'in them'. Suggestions: use standard forms (parks, not crowded), replace colloquialisms, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× I want to take a long walk along the beach. Actually. I think beach is so peaceful and less crowded so it's easier to to relax and uh, forget my stress. Uh, that's it.

✓ I want to take a long walk along the beach. Actually, I think the beach is so peaceful and less crowded, so it's easier to relax and forget my stress.

Use of article 'the' is required before a specific noun 'beach' here: 'the beach'. 'To to relax' is a duplication error. 'Forget my stress' is acceptable colloquially, but 'relieve my stress' or 'forget my stress' works; keep 'relax' as base form after 'easier to'. Suggestions: include proper articles, avoid duplicated words, and use base verb after 'easier to'.

× And the last time I walked, uh, at City Stars Mall, uh, I love to walk, uh, uh, with the places, which is long, uh, putting my headphone, listening to music, uh, enjoy looking at people with different culture, with different clothes.

✓ The last time I went for a walk was at City Stars Mall. I love walking in long corridors there, putting on my headphones, listening to music, and enjoying watching people from different cultures wearing different clothes.

Mixing past and present tenses: 'the last time I walked' requires past description ('The last time I went for a walk was...'). 'I love to walk' (present) can remain but better to reframe. 'With the places, which is long' is ungrammatical; specify 'in long corridors' or 'in long areas'. Use 'putting on my headphones' (phrasal verb 'put on'), and parallel gerund forms 'putting on..., listening..., enjoying watching...' for clarity. 'Different culture' should be plural 'different cultures'. Suggestions: keep tense consistency, use correct phrasal verbs, and keep parallel structure in lists.