Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문법과 표현의 자연스러움을 개선하세요. 예를 들어 비교 표현에서는 'prefer walking to using public transportation'처럼 전치사와 형태를 정확히 써야 하고, 불필요한 말버릇(uh, kind of)과 중복을 줄이세요. 또한 문장 연결을 위해 간단한 연결어를 사용하고 문장 수는 3~4문장으로 유지하세요.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. I prefer walking to using public transportation because it lets me see more of the city and enjoy my surroundings. Also, walking feels refreshing and gives me time to think.

Suggestion: 답변은 좋지만 말버릇(uh)과 시제·동사 형태를 더 정확히 하세요. 예: 'I often walked' 또는 'I used to walk'를 쓰고, 나열할 때 연결어(for example, and, also)를 활용해 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요. 구체적인 예시(몇 살 때, 어떤 친구인지)를 더하면 점수 향상에 도움이 됩니다.

Example: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. For example, I used to go to the playground and the park next to my school, where I enjoyed nature, fed stray cats, and sometimes met friends to play with.

Suggestion: 의견 제시가 모호하고 어휘 사용에 오류가 있습니다('ambivalent'는 부적절). 문장을 간결히 하고 정확한 단어(ambience, atmosphere, stress)와 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 사용하세요. 또한 한두 가지 구체적 이유( fresh air, quiet, greenery)를 제시하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Example: People like walking in parks because it helps them relax and reduce stress. For example, the fresh air, greenery, and calm atmosphere make it easier to unwind and focus on walking rather than daily worries.

Suggestion: 응답이 반복적이고 문장 구조가 부정확합니다('go to a walk' 잘못된 표현). 특정 장소를 말할 때 이유와 구체적 묘사를 함께 제시하세요. 또한 문장 흐름을 위해 연결어와 간결한 문장 구성을 사용하세요.

Example: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk in St James's Park in London. My friends say it has beautiful lakes and many birds, and I think the peaceful scenery would be perfect for a long relaxing stroll.

Suggestion: 전반적으로 괜찮지만 어색한 표현('the most recent walk I've had')과 중복을 줄이세요. 장소에 대해 더 구체적인 세부사항(어떤 전통 유물이 있는지, 얼마나 자주 가는지)을 추가하면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 또한 'simultaneously' 같은 불필요한 복잡한 단어는 피하세요.

Example: My most recent walk was in Sun Jung Rung, a small park near Sunlen station. Although it's not large, it has some traditional artifacts and a peaceful atmosphere, so I often go there to relax and listen to music while walking.

× Yes, I do walk a lot.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present tense statements. Use the simple present 'I walk' for habitual actions. Suggestion: remove 'do' unless forming a question or adding emphasis.

× I prefer walking than using public transportation, such as the taking the subway or taking the bus.

✓ I prefer walking to using public transportation, such as taking the subway or the bus.

After 'prefer' the correct preposition is 'to', not 'than'. Also 'the taking' is incorrect; use the gerund 'taking' without 'the'. Suggestion: use 'prefer X to Y' and 'taking the subway'.

× I think it's because I like to kind of see what's going around in the city and also I like to move there by my own 2 feet.

✓ I think it's because I like to kind of see what's going on around the city and also I like to move around by my own two feet.

Use 'going on' for events happening and 'around' after 'move' fits movement within a place. 'By my own 2 feet' is informal and uses a digit; write 'two' and include 'my' with 'own' as 'my own', also 'move around' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'going on', 'around', and write numbers as words in formal speech.

× To me it feels like a very refreshing experience.

✓ To me, it feels like a very refreshing experience.

This sentence is grammatically correct but benefits from a comma after introductory phrase. No change to singular/plural required; included for clarity. Suggestion: add a comma after introductory elements.

× Yes, I did, uh, frequently walk around as a child especially.

✓ Yes, I did, uh, frequently walk around as a child, especially.

The past tense 'did walk' is acceptable for emphasis, but word order is awkward. Moving 'especially' to the end and adding a comma clarifies meaning. Suggestion: place adverbial modifiers at the end or near the verb for natural flow.

× I remember going to the playground or uh, the park next to my school when I was a kid.

✓ I remember going to the playground or the park next to my school when I was a kid.

Remove the filler comma after 'or uh,' and ensure 'the park next to my school' is fine. The sentence is correct; clean punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: avoid extra fillers and punctuation.

× I would enjoy the presence of nature around me and get to see the stray cats, get to feed them as well, and say hi to a friend if I meet them along the way.

✓ I would enjoy the presence of nature around me, get to see the stray cats, feed them as well, and say hi to a friend if I met them along the way.

Maintain consistent tense: 'would' pairs with past subjunctive 'if I met' for hypothetical or habitual past. Repeating 'get to' is unnecessary; use parallel verbs 'see', 'feed', 'say'. Suggestion: keep verb forms parallel and maintain consistent conditional tense.

× I think it's mainly because it makes you relax and also, uh, makes you release the stress of the modern societies pressures to concentrate on on walking and enjoying the ambivalent.

✓ I think it's mainly because it helps you relax and also relieves the pressures of modern society so you can concentrate on walking and enjoying the ambience.

Multiple issues: 'makes you relax' is better as 'helps you relax'; 'release the stress' should be 'relieve the pressures'; 'modern societies pressures' needs singular possessive 'modern society's pressures' or 'pressures of modern society'; double 'on on' is erroneous; 'ambivalent' is wrong word — use 'ambience'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs ('help', 'relieve'), use possessive or 'of' structure, remove duplicate words, and use the correct noun 'ambience'.

× The ambience of the your surroundings is very therapeutic.

✓ The ambience of your surroundings is very therapeutic.

Do not use both 'the' and 'your' together; drop 'the'. Suggestion: use either 'the ambience of the surroundings' or 'the ambience of your surroundings' — here 'your' suffices.

× If I were to take a walk in any possible park that exists in the world, I think I would probably go to a walk.

✓ If I were to take a walk in any park in the world, I think I would probably go for a walk

Phrase 'go to a walk' is incorrect; correct collocation is 'go for a walk'. 'Any possible park that exists in the world' is wordy — use 'any park in the world'. Suggestion: use natural collocations and simplify redundant phrases.

× Take a walk in the park of the UK, particularly Saint James Park.

✓ Take a walk in a park in the UK, particularly St. James's Park.

Use 'a park in the UK' rather than 'the park of the UK'. Name of park is 'St. James's Park' or 'St James's Park'. Suggestion: use correct proper noun form and an article 'a'.

× I've never been there but my friends told me it was lovely and they have lots of lakes and horses you can see.

✓ I've never been there, but my friends told me it's lovely and that you can see lots of lakes and horses there.

Maintain tense consistency: 'I've never been' + 'they told me it's lovely' (present) or 'it was lovely' (past). Also 'they have lots of lakes and horses you can see' is awkward; rephrase 'you can see lots of lakes and horses there.' Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use clearer clause structure.

× The most recent walk I've had was probably around Sun Jung Rung.

✓ The most recent walk I had was probably around Sun Jung Rung.

When using 'the most recent walk', simple past 'I had' is more natural than present perfect 'I've had' with explicit past time. Suggestion: use simple past when specifying a particular past time.

× It's a small park near the Sunlen station.

✓ It's a small park near Sunlen station.

Do not use 'the' before proper station names in this context. Suggestion: omit 'the' unless the station name requires it.

× It's not a very big park, but it includes some traditional artifacts and it's a very quiet place to focus and maybe listen to some good music on your walk simultaneously.

✓ It's not a very big park, but it includes some traditional artifacts and is a very quiet place to focus and maybe listen to some good music while you walk.

Avoid repeating 'it's' unnecessarily; use parallel structure. 'On your walk simultaneously' is awkward — 'while you walk' is natural. Suggestion: keep clauses parallel and use natural temporal conjunctions.