Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar, fluency and sentence structure. Remove hesitations (Uh), correct collocations and verb forms, and make answer more concise with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details using linking words.

Example: Yes, I do walk a lot. I usually walk with my parents in the park near our home after lunch or dinner, and during these walks we talk about our day and family plans.

Suggestion: Correct past tense and word choice, avoid confusion (e.g., 'work with my friends' is wrong). Give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 specific details with linking words.

Example: Yes, I often walked outside when I was a child. For example, I used to walk to school and sometimes hung out with friends in the neighborhood after classes.

Suggestion: Improve grammar (subject-verb agreement), word choice, and clarity. Use linking words correctly and provide specific reasons with brief explanation/examples. Avoid vague phrases like 'silent atmosphere.'

Example: People like walking in parks for several reasons. Firstly, the air in parks is fresher, which is healthier than busy streets; secondly, parks are quieter and more relaxing, so people can unwind or exercise peacefully.

Suggestion: Combine sentences for cohesion, fix article and preposition use, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence and add a linked reason with a brief example or consequence.

Example: I would choose to take a long walk in a mountain forest because I love nature; walking there would help me relax and feel peaceful after stressful days.

Suggestion: Use correct verb tense and avoid unnecessary repetition. Remove 'about' after 'discussed' and add a linking phrase to give context. Keep it concise with one main detail.

Example: Recently I walked in the park in my hometown with my parents, and we discussed my plans to study abroad as a visiting student.

× Yes, I pretty like walking.

✓ Yes, I pretty much like walking.

The adverb 'pretty' is informal and usually used with another adverb like 'much' to modify verbs. Use 'pretty much' to mean 'quite' or simply use 'I really like walking.' Suggestion: say 'I really like walking' for clearer, more natural speech.

× I always walk with my parents in the park near my home after lunch or dinner together.

✓ I always walk with my parents in the park near my home after lunch or dinner.

The word 'together' is redundant because 'walk with my parents' already implies togetherness. Also, 'after lunch or dinner' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: remove redundant words to improve clarity.

× Uh, during the walk we always talk a lot of things about ourselves.

✓ During the walk we always talk a lot about ourselves.

English uses 'talk about things' or 'talk a lot' but not 'talk a lot of things about'. The correct structure is 'talk a lot about something' or 'talk about a lot of things'. Suggestion: use 'talk a lot about ourselves' or 'talk about a lot of things' depending on intended meaning.

× Yes, when I was a child I always get out of my home and work with my friends, sometimes hanging out on the streets and sometimes go to the school on foot.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I always got out of my home and played with my friends, sometimes hanging out on the streets and sometimes going to school on foot.

The sentence refers to past habits, so verbs must be in the past tense: 'get' -> 'got', 'work' is incorrect contextually; 'played' fits. Also use parallel gerunds: 'hanging out' and 'going to school'. Drop 'the' before 'school' for general attendance. Suggestion: use consistent past tense and correct verb choices for activities.

× I think there might be several reasons.

✓ I think there are several reasons.

'Might be' expresses possibility but is unnecessary here; simple present 'are' is more natural when giving reasons. 'There might be' is not grammatically wrong but less direct. Suggestion: use 'there are' for stronger, clearer statements when listing reasons.

× First, the air in the park are really good.

✓ First, the air in the park is really good.

The subject 'air' is singular, so the verb must be singular 'is' not 'are'. Also, 'good' describes air but 'fresh' or 'clean' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'The air in the park is really fresh' for natural phrasing.

× It's better for you to work in the park than working outside the streets.

✓ It's better for you to walk in the park than to walk on the street.

The verb 'work' seems incorrect in context; context is walking. Maintain parallel infinitives: 'to walk... than to walk...'. Use 'on the street' or 'outside on the streets' instead of 'outside the streets'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and correct prepositions.

× And 2nd, parks are always full of the silent atmosphere.

✓ Second, parks always have a peaceful atmosphere.

'Full of the silent atmosphere' is awkward; use 'have a peaceful atmosphere' or 'are always peaceful'. Also write ordinal words ('Second') in words. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'peaceful atmosphere'.

× Maybe I would choose a forest, country or a mountain.

✓ Maybe I would choose a forest, the countryside, or a mountain.

'Country' used alone is ambiguous; the correct noun for rural area is 'countryside' and include article 'a' or 'the' as needed. 'Would choose' is acceptable in hypothetical context. Suggestion: use precise nouns: 'the countryside'.

× I would like to walk a long distance in the nature.

✓ I would like to walk a long distance in nature.

Do not use the article 'the' with 'nature' when speaking generally. The phrase 'in nature' is correct. Suggestion: drop 'the' for general statements about nature.

× I went for a walk in the park in my hometown.

✓ I went for a walk in the park in my hometown.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. Explanation: Past tense 'went' correctly indicates a completed action; prepositional phrase 'in my hometown' is correct.

× I went walking with my parents and we just discussed about my plans about being a visiting student.

✓ I went walking with my parents and we just discussed my plans to be a visiting student.

The verb 'discuss' should not be followed by 'about'; use direct object: 'discussed my plans'. Also use 'to be a visiting student' or 'about me being a visiting student'. Remove the extra 'about'. Suggestion: use 'discuss' + object or 'talk about' + noun.