Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar errors, and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one brief reason and a short contrast using a linking word (e.g., however). Use correct verb forms and remove redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I walk to my campus quite often, especially on sunny days because the weather makes walking pleasant and healthy. However, I usually drive when it rains because it's more comfortable and quicker.

Suggestion: Answer directly with correct past tense and give a clear reason. Avoid confusing negatives and awkward phrasing. Use one or two supporting details and a linking word (e.g., because).

Example: No, I didn't walk much as a child. Because our neighborhood had few sidewalks and it wasn't safe, my family usually drove to places instead.

Suggestion: This answer is generally good but has grammar and word-choice issues. Use singular/plural agreement, more precise vocabulary, and a linking word to contrast. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: People prefer walking in parks because they offer safer paths and a pleasant environment. Moreover, on sunny days parks provide fresh air and natural light, which can be energizing and healthier than walking on busy streets.

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition (e.g., 'because' multiple times). Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details about the park's features. Correct article use ('a park' vs 'the park').

Example: I would take a long walk in a large public park because it is safe and tranquil. The shaded paths and quiet lakeside areas would make it comfortable to walk for hours.

Suggestion: Use past tense for 'lately' if describing recent activity, and avoid repeating 'exercise' and 'walk'. Provide one clear reason and a linking phrase. Keep to two sentences max.

Example: Lately I have been walking to my campus almost every day. I prefer this because it lets me combine my commute with light exercise and saves time.

× I frequently walk to my campus, especially on sunny days where the weather is nice and walking is just an easy option to choose.

✓ I frequently walk to my campus, especially on sunny days when the weather is nice and walking is just an easy option.

Use 'when' instead of 'where' for time/conditions; remove redundant 'to choose'. This keeps the present tense and improves natural phrasing.

× But when it is raining, I don't walk and I take the car because it car provides so much comfort rather than walking if it's raining.

✓ But when it is raining, I don't walk and I take the car because it provides much more comfort than walking when it's raining.

Remove duplicate 'car' and fix agreement/word order: 'provides' agrees with singular subject 'it' (referring to the car). Use 'much more comfort than' for correct comparison and 'when' for time clause.

× No, actually when I was a child I frequently go to places with the car 'cause my walking condition in my house is not just not good, so walking is just a not an option.

✓ No, actually when I was a child I frequently went to places by car because the walking conditions near my house were not good, so walking was not an option.

The main clause refers to the past, so use past tense 'went' and 'were' and 'was'. Use 'by car' not 'with the car'. Simplify 'not just not good' to 'not good'.

× I think people like to walk in parks because it's a very safe walking conditions, especially in a sunny day where the sun is just providing that much needed vitamin D.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because the walking conditions are very safe, especially on a sunny day when the sun provides much-needed vitamin D.

Change 'in parks' phrase structure and correct article/agreement: 'conditions are' (plural). Use 'on a sunny day' for time, 'when' for clause, and hyphenate 'much-needed'.

× While walking in the street can be quite dangerous, a park is a better option to get exercise.

✓ While walking in the street can be quite dangerous, a park is a better option for getting exercise.

Use 'for getting exercise' (gerund phrase) which is more natural and keeps present general statement.

× If I had the chance for a long walk, I would go walking at a park because park is very safe and it's a very nice place to walk because there the atmosphere and the ambience are just really suitable for walking and exercising for for a long time.

✓ If I had the chance for a long walk, I would go for a walk in a park because the park is very safe and a very nice place to walk; the atmosphere and ambience there are suitable for walking and exercising for a long time.

Use 'a park' and 'the park' appropriately. Replace 'go walking at a park' with 'go for a walk in a park'. Remove duplicate 'for'. Use 'there are' to agree with plural 'atmosphere and ambience' and improve sentence flow.

× I go to my campus almost every day and I walk to go there because going to campus walking means exercising so that I can exercise while commuting to campus, and I think that's a really nice option.

✓ I go to my campus almost every day and I walk there because walking to campus counts as exercise, so I can exercise while commuting, and I think that's a really nice option.

Simplify phrasing to natural present tense: 'walk there' and 'walking to campus counts as exercise'. Remove redundancy 'walk to go there' and 'commuting to campus' repeated.