Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and correct word choice errors (e.g., 'walk to school' not 'work to build'). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word.

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. Typically I walk between five and ten kilometres a day because I commute to my language school on foot. For example, I usually walk about 30 minutes each way, which helps me stay fit.

Suggestion: Open with a clear statement, avoid repeating phrases, and add a specific detail about time/place or activity using a linking word to make it coherent.

Example: Yes, I did. When I was in primary and middle school I often walked outside, usually in the park near my house. For example, I would take my dog for a short walk every afternoon after school.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, remove hesitations and correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'shade' not 'trade'), and give two specific reasons connected by a linking word.

Example: People like walking in parks because the paths are safe and the environment is peaceful. In addition, the trees provide shade and fresh air, which makes walking more pleasant and relaxing.

Suggestion: Use a conditional clearly, avoid fillers, and give specific reasons or examples. Name places correctly and use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: If I had the chance, I would love to walk the South Island of New Zealand because it has breathtaking scenery. For example, I would like to hike near Mount Cook and visit Milford Sound for its dramatic fjords.

Suggestion: Answer directly in past tense, remove repetition, and provide a clear sequence of events with linking words. Include one specific detail (time, route, or feeling) to enrich the response.

Example: I went for a walk in Devonport last weekend. I started at 7:00 in the morning and walked up Victoria Hill, enjoying the sea views and fresh air along the way.

× I walk around around, uh, from 5 kilometers to 10 kilometers a day.

✓ I walk around five to ten kilometers a day.

The original repeats 'around' and mixes numeric format; not a present participle problem but fits 'Verb in the present participle form' only if treating 'walking' usage—however to follow the list, correct sentence uses simple present 'walk' to describe habitual action and removes redundancy. Use words for numbers below ten for clearer spoken style. Replace 'around around' with a single 'around'.

× For example, when I go to language school, I work to build every day.

✓ For example, when I go to language school, I walk to school every day.

The verb 'work to build' is incorrect in this context. The intended meaning is walking to school, so use 'walk to school'. This fixes sentence structure and verb choice.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

The question is already correct in past tense; no change needed. Included to show it's correct.

× My memory goes back to primary school and middle school.

✓ My memories go back to primary and middle school.

Use plural 'memories' to match 'go back' meaning multiple recollections. 'Primary school and middle school' can be shortened to 'primary and middle school' for naturalness.

× I used to go out. I used to go outside to go for a walk with my pet.

✓ I used to go out. I used to go for walks with my pet.

Combine and simplify repeated phrasing. 'Used to' correctly indicates past habit; 'go for walks' is the natural collocation and plural 'walks' fits repeated past activity.

× It seems that in the park there are safe paths and then there are many big trees and trees.

✓ It seems that parks have safe paths and many large trees.

Remove repetition 'and trees' and use 'large' instead of 'big' for a more natural adjective. Rephrase to a concise subject-verb order: 'parks have'.

× Trees provide some trade and fresh air School.

✓ Trees provide shade and fresh air.

'Trade' is incorrect; likely intended 'shade'. Remove stray word 'School'. 'Shade and fresh air' are correct collocations.

× If I have uh, some chance, I would love to walk uh S island of New Zealand because I have heard uh there are breathtaking scenery such as Kung Malin Ku and Milford Sound.

✓ If I had the chance, I would love to walk on the South Island of New Zealand because I have heard there is breathtaking scenery such as Queenstown and Milford Sound.

Use the correct second conditional form: 'If I had the chance, I would...'. Use 'walk on the South Island' (preposition 'on'). 'Breathtaking scenery' is uncountable so use 'there is' or 'there are areas of'; replace incorrect place name 'Kung Malin Ku' with likely 'Queenstown'. Ensure proper nouns are correct.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is more common with present perfect; with simple past use 'recently'. Change 'lately' to 'recently' to match the past tense question.

× I went to Devonport to go for walk, go for walk.

✓ I went to Devonport to go for a walk.

Remove repetition and add the article 'a' before 'walk'. The corrected sentence is concise and grammatically correct.

× I go for work around at 7:00 and I went up the Victoria Hills so I could so I could.

✓ I went for a walk around 7:00 and I went up Victoria Hill.

Use consistent past tense 'went' to match 'I went to Devonport'. Remove 'for work' if meaning 'for a walk'; use 'around 7:00' (no 'at' after 'around'). Fix place name to singular 'Victoria Hill' and remove repetition 'so I could'.