Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No and frequency), then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it under 5 sentences and avoid unclear words (e.g. “pantaloon”).

Example: Yes, I walk almost every day because I try to reach a daily step goal. For example, even when I don't go to the gym, I take a short walk outside to stay active. This helps me maintain my fitness and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then provide specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, especially, because) and avoid hesitations and repetition.

Example: Yes, I often went outside as a child. For example, I usually rode my bicycle with friends and we explored different neighborhoods, which helped me feel independent and curious about the city.

Suggestion: Structure your response: start with a clear reason, then give one or two specific supporting points using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure vocabulary fits the idea (e.g. “affect your authority” is unclear).

Example: People like walking in parks because it is relaxing and accessible. In addition, parks offer fresh air and sunshine, and walking there is a cheap way to exercise with friends or family, which makes it more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give specific details about why you chose the place and what you would do there. Use clear linking words and avoid vague fragments.

Example: I'd like to take a long walk in Central Park because it is very large and scenic. For example, I could walk for an hour along the lake, see different landmarks, and enjoy the variety of paths and greenery.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and clearer nouns. Start with a direct statement about when and where, then give a short reason or specific detail (e.g. step goal). Avoid invented or unclear place names.

Example: Today I walked around the gardens near my dorm. I walked through all the paths to reach my daily goal of 10,000 steps because I try to keep to my fitness plan.

× I can't see my day-to-day is pantaloon steps on a day so I think my not to lose my trip and keep walking every day.

✓ I don't keep a regular step count every day, so I try not to miss my walks and keep walking every day.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear (Grammar problem Type 26). It mixes fragments and incorrect vocabulary ('pantaloon steps') and wrong verb forms. I corrected the sentence to a clear subject-verb structure: 'I don't keep a regular step count every day' and linked the ideas with 'so'. Suggestion: express one idea at a time, use common vocabulary ('step count', 'miss my walks') and ensure verbs agree with the subject.

× Even if I don't go to the gym I go to the outside and move.

✓ Even if I don't go to the gym, I go outside and move.

The original has awkward phrasing 'go to the outside' and missing comma before the subordinate clause (Type 26). Use 'go outside' (no 'the') and include a comma after the introductory clause. Suggestion: use natural prepositional phrases ('go outside') and punctuate clauses for clarity.

× Yes, I was there was uh, cleansing my friends and running around especially almost every time I ride my bicycle and I was going everywhere to explore this city so.

✓ Yes, I was always with my friends, running around, and almost every time I rode my bicycle I explored the city.

This sentence has multiple structure and tense issues (Type 26 and Type 5). 'Was there was uh, cleansing my friends' is meaningless; likely intended 'was always with my friends'. Tenses should be past ('rode' not 'ride') when describing childhood. Combine clauses into a coherent sequence. Suggestion: state past habits using past simple and simple connectors ('and', 'almost every time').

× Because it's too easy and the cheaper thing you can do and basically keep your healthy and to do that your friends or family affect your authority to who would not and like the sunshine.

✓ Because it's easy and cheap to do, it helps you stay healthy, and your friends or family can encourage you; people also enjoy the sunshine.

The original contains adjective/adverb misuse and unclear phrasing (Type 13). 'Too easy' and 'the cheaper thing' are incorrect; 'keep your healthy' should be 'help you stay healthy'. 'Affect your authority' is incorrect collocation. I rewrote to natural expressions: 'easy and cheap', 'help you stay healthy', 'encourage you', 'enjoy the sunshine'. Suggestion: use common collocations and simple clause structures to express reasons. },{