Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid fillers and repetition (e.g., 'uh', repeated 'walking'). Use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'prefer', 'beneficial', 'stress-relieving').

Example: Yes, I walk a lot. I prefer walking to cycling or running because it is low-impact and helps me burn calories. Moreover, walking is very calming and helps me relieve stress after a busy day.

Suggestion: Complete your answer with a clear reason and avoid leaving sentences unfinished. Use past tense consistently and add a specific detail or memory. Link sentences with words like 'often' or 'for example.'

Example: Yes, I did. I often went on walks with my family, and sometimes we hiked to the nearby mountains. Those outings are memorable because we used to picnic at the summit and watch the sunset together.

Suggestion: Be clearer and more accurate with vocabulary; replace unclear words ('coming') and reduce hesitations. Structure: give a topic sentence, then two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'firstly', 'also').

Example: People enjoy walking in parks because the atmosphere is peaceful and relaxing. Firstly, parks have fresh air and greenery, which feels refreshing. Also, seeing other people there makes it more social and enjoyable.

Suggestion: Answer directly and support with specific reasons. Use more formal vocabulary (e.g., 'serene atmosphere', 'listen to music to relax') and avoid vague phrases like 'creates more vibe'. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

Example: I would choose a large city park for a long walk because it offers a serene atmosphere that helps me relax. I also enjoy listening to music while walking, as it improves my mood and makes the walk more pleasant.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and finish your thought. Replace 'work' with 'walk' and correct grammar ('buy vegetables'). Be specific about time and feelings. Remove repetitions and hesitations.

Example: Recently I went for a walk to the market early in the morning to buy vegetables. I chose that time because the sun hadn't risen yet and the air was cool and very refreshing, which made the walk pleasant.

× I do, I love walking.

✓ I do; I love walking.

Punctuation and sentence connection: while not a strict tense error, the original run-on lacks proper connection. Use a semicolon or conjunction to join two independent clauses. Suggestion: use 'I do; I love walking.' or 'I do, because I love walking.'

× I would rather choose walking than cycling or running.

✓ I would rather walk than cycle or run.

After 'would rather' use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. Change 'choose walking' to 'walk' and parallelize the verbs 'cycle' and 'run.'

× Also it is fat burning so it's better for my health and what I really like about walking is it's calming and relaxing.

✓ Also, it is fat-burning, so it's better for my health, and what I really like about walking is that it's calming and relaxing.

Compound adjectives before nouns require a hyphen: 'fat-burning.' Add missing comma after introductory 'Also' and before coordinating conjunctions. Insert 'that' to introduce the noun clause 'what I really like...'. These changes improve grammar and clarity.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child? -> I did. I usually go on a walk with my family.

✓ I did. I usually went on walks with my family.

Question uses past tense 'Did you... when you were a child?' so answers must use past tense. 'Usually go' should be 'usually went' and 'on a walk' pluralized to 'on walks' for habitual action.

× There are times that we'd hike to the mountains near our home.

✓ There were times when we'd hike to the mountains near our home.

Consistency of tense: since describing past childhood events, use past tense 'were' not 'are.' Also 'that' is better replaced by 'when' to refer to times. 'We'd' (we would) is acceptable for habitual past but ensure surrounding verbs are past.

× It was a very memorable time for me as a child because.

✓ It was a very memorable time for me as a child.

The sentence ends with 'because' but lacks a dependent clause explaining the reason. Remove 'because' to complete the sentence or add the reason. Here removing 'because' fixes the sentence structure.

× I think this is because, uh, the parks atmosphere is coming, it's relaxing as well.

✓ I think this is because, uh, the park's atmosphere is calming; it's relaxing as well.

'parks atmosphere' needs possessive form 'park's.' 'Coming' is incorrect here; 'calming' fits meaning. Use punctuation to separate clauses.

× Umm, you can, you can smell fresh air uh, and also there's a lot of people walking nearby, so it's engaging as you walk.

✓ Umm, you can smell fresh air, and there are also a lot of people walking nearby, so it's engaging as you walk.

'There's a lot of people' is informal and ungrammatical; with plural 'people' use 'there are.' Remove redundant repeated phrase 'you can.' Adjust comma placement for clarity.

× I'd like to go to the park to walk, I like the feeling of being calm and I also like to listen to music whenever I'm walking because it creates more vibe sometimes.

✓ I'd like to go to the park to walk. I like the feeling of calm, and I also like to listen to music when I'm walking because it sometimes creates more of a vibe.

Split run-on sentence into two sentences. 'Being calm' changed to 'feeling of calm' for natural phrasing. 'Whenever I'm walking' can be 'when I'm walking.' Add 'of a' before 'vibe' and move 'sometimes' to a natural position.

× Where did you go for a walk lately? -> My recent work was when I went to the market to buy vegetable, it was early in the morning.

✓ My most recent walk was when I went to the market to buy vegetables; it was early in the morning.

Question asks about recent past. 'Recent work' is incorrect word choice; use 'most recent walk.' 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables.' Replace comma splice with semicolon.

× I did that because the sun is not up yet.

✓ I did that because the sun was not up yet.

Referring to a past event ('I did that'), so subordinate clause should use past tense 'was not up yet' for tense consistency.

× So it's the air is very fresh and cold and I like it that way because it's it's more refreshing and.

✓ So the air was very fresh and cold, and I liked it that way because it was more refreshing.

Maintain past tense consistency: change 'is' to 'was' and 'I like' to 'I liked.' Remove duplicated 'it's' and the trailing incomplete conjunction. Use commas to separate clauses.