Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and overly casual phrases, and add one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Also check grammar (use contractions appropriately and correct word order).

Example: Not really. I usually prefer relaxing at home and watching YouTube or Netflix because I find it the easiest way to unwind after a busy day. However, I try to walk more at weekends for light exercise.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and organize supporting details with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'an outgoing person', 'we had fun'). Keep it within three sentences and give specific examples or memories to make the answer vivid.

Example: Yes, I did. I was quite outgoing and often went for walks with my dad; he taught me to ride a bike and play badminton, which I still remember fondly. Those outings were my favorite childhood memories because we always spent quality time together.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons linked with words like 'for example' or 'also'. Correct grammar and collocations (e.g., 'relieve stress', 'create good memories', 'by walking').

Example: People often walk in parks to relieve stress and enjoy nature. For example, in spring or autumn the pleasant weather and scenery make it ideal for spending time with friends or family and creating lasting memories.

Suggestion: Give a concise topic sentence and then add specific details in one or two supporting sentences. Fix grammar and phrasing (e.g., 'my university has the largest lake in Seoul'). Avoid trailing off. Mention why this walk matters to you.

Example: I'd like to take a long walk around my university campus. It has the largest lake in Seoul, so walking there would be peaceful and nostalgic, especially since I missed the chance earlier because I was so busy.

Suggestion: Open with a brief direct answer about the recent walk, then add one specific detail and a linking word. Avoid repeating negatives and correct tense and phrasing (e.g., 'while I was shopping with my mom').

Example: Recently I walked around my neighborhood when I was shopping with my mom. It was a short walk but nice to get some fresh air and carry the shopping bags together.

× I don't walk a lot because basically I don't want to move and I really love just staying in my bed and watching YouTube and Netflix to relax.

✓ I don't walk a lot because basically I don't want to move and I really love just staying in my bed and watching YouTube and Netflix to relax.

No correction needed for tense, but sentence is wordy and 'staying in my bed' could be styled as 'staying in bed'. This is a style suggestion, not a grammar error.

× Yes, when I was a child I was outgoing person and I really loved going out with my dad to walk and we had a fun and he taught me how to ride a bike and play badminton so I really liked the time.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I was an outgoing person and I really loved going out with my dad to walk; we had fun, and he taught me how to ride a bike and play badminton, so I really enjoyed that time.

Missing article before 'outgoing person' (needs 'an') and awkward phrasing 'we had a fun' should be 'we had fun'. Run-on sentence needs punctuation and clearer connectors. Improve by adding the article, replacing 'liked the time' with 'enjoyed that time', and splitting clauses with commas or semicolon.

× Because they want to release their stress and make a great time with their friends or family.

✓ Because they want to relieve their stress and have a great time with their friends or family.

Incorrect verb choice and collocation: 'release their stress' is unnatural; use 'relieve their stress'. Also use 'have a great time' rather than 'make a great time'. This is a verb and collocation/word choice issue under verb+ -ing category as the structure after 'want to' requires base verb forms.

× And especially in spring or autumn, the weather is really good, so people tend to make a good memories by walk.

✓ And especially in spring or autumn, the weather is really good, so people tend to make good memories by walking.

'Make a good memories' has article and plural mismatch; correct is 'make good memories'. Also after 'by' use gerund 'walking' not base verb. This fits verb+-ing and article/number issues.

× I'd like to take a walk in my university, the campus, because actually my university is famous for a huge lake and where the university that have the biggest lake in Seoul, but I haven't walked in my university because I was busy so.

✓ I'd like to take a walk on my university campus because my university is actually famous for a huge lake—the university has the biggest lake in Seoul—but I haven't walked around the campus because I have been busy.

Problems: preposition and noun phrase ('in my university' -> 'on my university campus' or 'around the campus'), redundant and incorrect relative clause 'where the university that have...' should be simplified to 'the university has'. Tense consistency: use present perfect 'I have been busy' to explain recent lack of walks. Also use 'walk around the campus' rather than 'walk in my university'.

× Actually I'm not that outgoing person and I don't like to move much so I rarely walk usually.

✓ Actually I'm not that outgoing a person and I don't like to move much, so I rarely walk.

Article missing: 'that outgoing person' should be 'that outgoing a person' or better 'that outgoing person' with 'a'. Word order 'rarely walk usually' is contradictory and redundant; choose one adverb 'rarely' and place it before the verb. Remove 'usually' to avoid redundancy.

× But lately I walked around my neighborhood while I go shopping with my mom.

✓ But lately I have walked around my neighborhood while I was shopping with my mom.

Tense mismatch: 'lately' requires present perfect 'have walked' to show recent action; 'while I go shopping' should be past progressive 'while I was shopping' to match the time of walking. Use consistent past context or present perfect plus past continuous as appropriate.