Walking— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on accuracy, clarity and concision. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, avoid repeating words (work vs walk), reduce filler (umm) and correct prepositions and articles (stand behind the desk). Keep to 2–4 sentences and include one brief supporting detail about your routine.

Example: No, I don't walk much. As a school teacher I usually stand at my desk to teach and then return to my office to sit and mark papers, so I rarely go for walks outside of work.

Suggestion: Use past simple consistently and choose precise verbs (played, spent time). Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add specific activities and a linking word. Avoid tense mixing and vague phrases like 'work outside the house.'

Example: Yes, I often played outside when I was a child because we had a lot of free time. For example, my friends and I would play hide-and-seek and tag in the neighborhood park almost every afternoon.

Suggestion: Answer directly and organize reasons with linking words (firstly, secondly). Correct vocabulary (walk not work) and use clear phrases (fresh air, cool breeze). Keep sentences complete and avoid trailing off. Provide two concise reasons with examples.

Example: People like walking in parks because the fresh air and greenery help them relax. Also, in the morning the sunlight is pleasant and in the evening a cool breeze makes walking comfortable.

Suggestion: Use conditional correctly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear conditional sentence ('If I had the chance, I would...'), then give two specific reasons. Correct collocations (take a walk at the beach, the sound of the waves, a stroll with my family). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk along the beach to enjoy the ocean breeze and peaceful atmosphere. I would also like listening to the sound of the waves and strolling with my family.

Suggestion: Use past simple and correct collocations (a bushwalk on the hill / up the nearby hill). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition. Provide one specific sensory detail and one result (felt refreshed, sense of achievement).

Example: Recently I went on a bushwalk up the hill near my house. It was refreshing because I enjoyed the beautiful scenery along the way, and reaching the top gave me a real sense of achievement.

× No, I don't consider myself work a lot because umm, I'm a school teacher, so usually when I enter the classroom I'll just stand at behind the table to deliver the lessons and then go back to my office.

✓ No, I don't consider myself working a lot because, umm, I'm a school teacher, so usually when I enter the classroom I'll just stand behind the table to deliver the lessons and then go back to my office.

The phrase 'consider myself work' is incorrect because 'consider' is followed by a reflexive pronoun plus a gerund (verb + -ing). Use 'consider myself working'. Also 'stand at behind the table' has an extra preposition 'at'; correct preposition is 'behind'. Remove the redundant word and add a comma for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'consider myself' + present participle for ongoing characteristics (e.g., 'consider myself working hard').

× After that I'll sit down and start marking.

✓ After that I sit down and start marking.

The context is describing habitual actions as a teacher in the present, so present simple is appropriate rather than future 'I'll'. Replace 'I'll' with 'I' to form present simple 'I sit down and start marking'. Suggestion: Use present simple for routines (I sit, I start).

× So I don't work a lot, and I do.

✓ So I don't work a lot.

The phrase 'and I do' is unnecessary and creates confusion in tense and meaning. The student likely intended to confirm the negative statement; simply ending the sentence 'So I don't work a lot.' is correct. Suggestion: Avoid adding redundant tags that contradict the main clause; use clear confirmation like 'That's right' if needed.

× Yes, when I was a child, I usually work outside the house because we had much free time then and I usually played around with my neighbors.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I usually worked outside the house because we had a lot of free time then and I usually played with my neighbors.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so verbs should be in past simple: 'worked' instead of 'work'. 'Had much free time' is unnatural; use 'had a lot of free time'. 'Played around with' is acceptable but 'played with' is more natural here. Suggestion: For past habits use past simple (I worked, I played). Use 'a lot of' with uncountable nouns in spoken/written English.

× Uh, at our neighborhood we will play some hide and seek and catch so that all these activity required us.

✓ Uh, in our neighborhood we would play games like hide-and-seek and catch, and all these activities required us to be outside.

Several issues: use 'in our neighborhood' (preposition), and for past habitual actions 'would' or past simple is appropriate; 'would play' is natural. 'Hide and seek' should be hyphenated as 'hide-and-seek' when used as a noun phrase. 'Catch' is better described as 'catch' or 'tag' depending on intended game; 'games like' clarifies. 'All these activity required us' has subject-verb agreement and structure problems: 'activities' (plural) and 'required us to be outside' completes the idea. Suggestion: Use 'would' for repeated past actions and ensure plural agreement ('activities').

× I think people like to work at parks because it they are refreshing if people work at night or evening, the night breeze, uh, is converting and also if they work in the morning, the sunshine, they can enjoy the sunshine and have a.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because they are refreshing: in the evening the night breeze is cool, and in the morning people can enjoy the sunshine.

Multiple errors: 'work at parks' should be 'walk in parks' per context. Use 'in parks' not 'at parks'. The pronoun 'it they' is incorrect; use 'they'. 'Work at night or evening' should be 'in the evening' or 'at night' but walking is typically 'in the evening'. 'Converting' is wrong word; likely meant 'cool' or 'refreshing'. The sentence ended abruptly 'have a.' Remove fragment and rearrange for clarity. Suggestion: Choose correct verb ('walk') and prepositions ('in parks', 'in the morning/evening') and avoid fragments.

× If I were given a chance I would have, I would like to have a work at the beach because I wanted to enjoy the ocean breeze and the serenity, the serenity of the beach.

✓ If I were given a chance, I would like to go to the beach because I want to enjoy the ocean breeze and the serenity of the beach.

Mixed conditional and incorrect verb choices: 'I would have, I would like to have a work at the beach' is ungrammatical. For a hypothetical preference use 'I would like to go to the beach'. Also maintain consistent tense: use 'want' (present) or 'would like' without switching to past 'wanted'. 'Have a work' is incorrect; use 'go to' or 'have a walk' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use 'would like to' + base verb for hypothetical preferences and keep verbs consistent.

× I also enjoy, uh, the sound of the wave and uh, having a straw with my family.

✓ I also enjoy the sound of the waves and spending time with my family on the beach.

'Sound of the wave' should be plural 'waves' for general reference. 'Having a straw with my family' is unclear and likely incorrect; perhaps the speaker meant 'having a stroll' or 'spending time'. 'Stroll' not 'straw'. Replace with clear expression 'spending time with my family on the beach' or 'having a stroll with my family'. Suggestion: Check for similar-sounding words ('straw' vs 'stroll') and use plural nouns for general statements.

× I had a bushwalk at the hill nearby my house.

✓ I went for a bushwalk on the hill near my house.

Use 'went for a bushwalk' or 'had a bushwalk' is less natural in English. 'At the hill nearby my house' is awkward; use 'on the hill near my house'. Use past simple 'went' to describe a completed action. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('go for a walk/bushwalk') and correct prepositions ('on the hill', 'near my house').

× I think it was refreshing because I get to I got to enjoy the beautiful sceneries along the way and when I reached the top, it gave me sense of achievement.

✓ I think it was refreshing because I got to enjoy the beautiful scenery along the way, and when I reached the top, it gave me a sense of achievement.

Mixing present 'I get to' and past 'I got to' is incorrect; since the event is past, use 'I got to'. 'Sceneries' is incorrect; use 'scenery' (uncountable). Add the article 'a' before 'sense of achievement'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense for past events, use uncountable 'scenery', and include necessary articles.