Part 1
Examiner
What is your favourite food?
Candidate
My favorite food is chocolate and I still remember the first time I have chocolate and I fell in love with it very quickly. And every time I eat desserts like cake and cookies, I will buy chocolate cakes and cookies.
Examiner
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
Candidate
I prefer sweet food like most other young children and I like to eat candies, cakes, cookies but my parents don't allow me to eat too too much sweets they think is bad for my teeth and house so I eat a little of them.
Examiner
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
Candidate
Yes, I eat different kind of food at different times. For example in summer I prefer to eat ice cream and it can makes me feel cool and in winter I prefer to eat hot pots and hot hot soup which can make me warm.
Examiner
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
Candidate
No, my favorite food is still chocolate now and every time I have snacks I prefer to choose chocolate and when I made made cakes by myself I will add a lot of chocolate in it.
What is your favourite food?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: 回答要更直接并控制句子长度,同时注意时态和语法错误。开头用一句主题句直接回答问题,然后用一两句具体细节或例子支撑。避免冗长重复,比如“cake and cookies”重复出现。可以用连词(e.g. “because”, “so”)串联句子,使表达更连贯。
Example: My favourite food is chocolate. I fell in love with it the first time I tried it when I was a child, because its rich, sweet taste always cheers me up. For that reason I usually choose chocolate-flavoured desserts, such as chocolate cake or cookies, when I buy sweets.
What kind of food did you like when you were young?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: 注意时态一致(过去时),并把信息分成短句以提高清晰度。减少口语填充词(如重复的 “too”),用连接词(because, so, but)使逻辑更顺畅。补充具体例子或感受会更好。
Example: When I was young, I preferred sweet foods such as candies, cakes and cookies. However, my parents worried about my teeth, so they limited how many sweets I could have. As a result, I learned to enjoy sweets only occasionally.
Do you eat different foods at different times of the year?
Score: 75.0Suggestion: 回答较清晰但注意语法(例如 ‘different kinds’, 动词形式),避免词语重复(如 “hot hot”)。使用连接词(for example, because, so)并给出更具体的细节或比较会让答案更有说服力。
Example: Yes, I do eat different foods depending on the season. For example, in summer I often choose cold treats like ice cream because they help me feel cool, while in winter I prefer hot meals such as hot pot or spicy soup to keep warm.
Has your favourite food changed since you were a child?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: 回答直接但注意语法(现在完成时或现在时的使用),避免重复(如 “made made”)。可以简短说明原因或举例支持观点,使回答更完整且自然。
Example: No, my favourite food is still chocolate. I usually choose chocolate snacks and when I bake cakes at home I often add lots of chocolate because I enjoy the flavour.
× My favorite food is chocolate and I still remember the first time I have chocolate and I fell in love with it very quickly.
✓ My favorite food is chocolate and I still remember the first time I had chocolate; I fell in love with it very quickly.
问题类型 ID:5(Past tense issue)。句子中“the first time I have chocolate”使用了现在完成时/一般现在时,描述过去发生的第一次体验应使用过去时,因此改为“had”。建议:描述过去具体时间点或经历时使用一般过去时,如“had”。
× And every time I eat desserts like cake and cookies, I will buy chocolate cakes and cookies.
✓ And every time I eat desserts like cake and cookies, I buy chocolate cakes and cookies.
问题类型 ID:4(Modal verb usage)和 ID:22(Article errors)混合。原句使用“will”表将来,然而说习惯性动作应使用一般现在时,因此改为“buy”。此外“desserts like cake and cookies”可接受但更自然保持原样。建议:表示习惯或常态用一般现在时。
× I prefer sweet food like most other young children and I like to eat candies, cakes, cookies but my parents don't allow me to eat too too much sweets they think is bad for my teeth and house so I eat a little of them.
✓ I preferred sweet food like most other children when I was young, and I liked to eat candies, cakes and cookies, but my parents didn't allow me to eat too many sweets because they thought it was bad for my teeth and health, so I ate only a little.
问题类型 ID:6(Present tense issue)和 ID:5(Past tense issue)。问的是“when you were young”,应使用过去时。把现在时动词改为过去时;“too too much sweets”为不恰当用法,量词和修饰重复错误,改为“too many sweets”;“house”语义错误,推测为“health”。建议:回顾时态一致性原则,数量词与可数名词搭配用“many”。
× Yes, I eat different kind of food at different times.
✓ Yes, I eat different kinds of food at different times.
问题类型 ID:1(Singular and plural issue)和 ID:22(Article errors)。“different kind of food”应为复数“different kinds of food”或“a different kind of food”。建议:当泛指多种时用复数“kinds”。
× For example in summer I prefer to eat ice cream and it can makes me feel cool and in winter I prefer to eat hot pots and hot hot soup which can make me warm.
✓ For example, in summer I prefer to eat ice cream because it makes me feel cool, and in winter I prefer to eat hot pot and hot soup which make me feel warm.
问题类型 ID:27(Subject-verb agreement errors)和 ID:4(Modal verb usage)。“it can makes”动词形式错误,应为“it makes”或“it can make”;“hot pots”一般用单数或不可数“hot pot”作菜名;“which can make me warm”统一为“which make me feel warm”。建议:注意主语与动词单复数一致,避免多余的情态助动词与动词-s同时出现。
× No, my favorite food is still chocolate now and every time I have snacks I prefer to choose chocolate and when I made made cakes by myself I will add a lot of chocolate in it.
✓ No, my favorite food is still chocolate. Whenever I have snacks, I prefer to choose chocolate, and when I make cakes by myself, I add a lot of chocolate to them.
问题类型 ID:6(Present tense issue)和 ID:5(Past tense issue)。“when I made made cakes”重复且时态错误,说明习惯动作应使用一般现在时“make”;不宜用“will”表示习惯,改为一般现在时“add”;“add a lot of chocolate in it”应为“add a lot of chocolate to them”以保持代词与复数名词一致。建议:去掉重复词,保持时态一致,代词与先行词数一致并用正确介词短语(add to)。