Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your favourite food, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word order errors.

Example: My favourite food is our national cuisine. In particular, I love dishes like X and Y because they are halal and made at home, which makes them healthier and more flavorful. In addition, these dishes remind me of family traditions and home cooking.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and tense accuracy; provide a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details with linking words. Correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'right soup' unclear) and avoid repetition.

Example: I was quite picky as a child, but I always loved my mother’s soup. For example, after first grade I would eat it every day because it was warm and comforting, and it reminded me of my mother’s care.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitation and awkward phrasing, use clear linking words (for example, in contrast, in winter) and correct word choice (e.g., 'frosted vegetables' likely wrong). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and give specific examples.

Example: Yes. For example, in summer I eat light salads and fruits such as watermelon to stay cool. In contrast, in winter I prefer hot soups and roasted vegetables because they help me feel warm and comfortable.

Suggestion: Answer directly (use 'Yes, it has'), avoid pronoun errors and tighten sentences. Give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because' and 'since') and correct collocation ('cook them properly').

Example: Yes, it has. As a child I disliked vegetables such as pumpkin, carrots and bell peppers, but now I eat them every day because I learned how to cook them properly and they make me feel healthier.

× I liked every nation's food, but our national dishes are my always favorite ones because they are halal first of all.

✓ I liked every nation's food, but our national dishes are always my favorite because they are halal, first of all.

Incorrect article placement and word order: 'my always favorite ones' is unnatural; 'always my favorite' is correct. Also 'favorite ones' is unnecessary; 'favorite' suffices. Add a comma before 'first of all' for clarity. Improve word order and remove redundant article usage.

× Then there are they are homemade and very tasty.

✓ They are homemade and very tasty.

Redundant and ungrammatical structure: 'Then there are they are' repeats the subject and verb. Remove 'there are' and 'then' if unnecessary; keep a simple clause 'They are homemade and very tasty.' to be grammatical and clear.

× When I was a child, I would be quite picky about food, but there was 1 exception.

✓ When I was a child, I was quite picky about food, but there was one exception.

Tense and modality: 'would be' is used for habitual past but sounds odd here; simple past 'was' is clearer. Also use 'one' instead of numeral '1' in formal writing. This matches the past-time context.

× My mother's right soup.

✓ My mother's soup was right.

Missing verb and unclear adjective use: The original lacks a verb. If intention is to say the soup was correct or good, 'My mother's soup was right' is grammatical, though 'right' is awkward—'My mother's soup was just right' or 'My mother's soup was perfect' would be better. This fixes sentence structure and article placement.

× I ate it when I came back home from school in my first grade because of because it was warm, comforting and remind me of my mother's care.

✓ I ate it when I came home from school in first grade because it was warm, comforting, and reminded me of my mother's care.

Multiple issues: remove duplicate 'because of because'. Use 'came home' not 'came back home' (can use either but 'came home' is concise). Use 'in first grade' (no 'my') and past tense 'reminded' to match 'ate' and 'was'. Add commas and correct parallel structure in the list of adjectives.

× Yes I do. For example, in summer I prefer light salads, but uh, fruits are like watermelon to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer frosted vegetables for warming drinks in order to keep my temperature up because certain dishes feel more comforting in different times of the year.

✓ Yes, I do. For example, in summer I prefer light salads and fruits like watermelon to stay cool, whereas in winter I prefer roasted vegetables and warming drinks to keep my body temperature up because certain dishes feel more comforting at different times of the year.

Preposition and word choice issues: add comma after 'Yes'. Combine clauses for clarity. 'Fruits are like watermelon' is incorrect; use 'fruits like watermelon'. 'Frosted vegetables' is wrong word; likely 'roasted' or 'steamed'. Use 'warming drinks' not 'for warming drinks'. Use 'to keep my body temperature up' for purpose. Use preposition 'at different times of the year' instead of 'in' or 'different times of the year' for natural phrasing.

× He has, absolutely.

✓ He has, absolutely.

This sentence appears in the transcript but is likely a slip: 'He has' is incorrect subject referring to the student's experience. It should be 'It has, absolutely.' or 'Yes, it has, absolutely.' However since instruction only corrects listed types, note subject-verb mismatch: 'He' doesn't match antecedent. Use 'It has' to refer to 'favourite food'.

× As a child I disliked many vegetables like pumpkin, carrots and bell Peppers, but now I cannot imagine my daily routine without them.

✓ As a child, I disliked many vegetables like pumpkin, carrots, and bell peppers, but now I cannot imagine my daily routine without them.

Capitalization and punctuation: 'bell Peppers' should be 'bell peppers' lowercase. Add comma after introductory phrase 'As a child'. No verb error but corrected punctuation and capitalization to follow norms.

× Maybe I learned how to cook them in a properly way and I feel healthier when I include them in my meals.

✓ Maybe I learned how to cook them in a proper way, and I feel healthier when I include them in my meals.

Incorrect adjective/adverb form: 'properly' (adverb) used where adjective 'proper' is needed after 'a'. Use 'in a proper way' or better 'properly' without 'a'. Also add comma before 'and' to connect clauses. Maintain present tense 'feel' which is correct.