Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like 'to be honest' twice, correct article and plural usage, and add a brief reason. Use linking word for clarity.

Example: My favourite foods are sweets, especially chocolate bars and bubble gum, because they cheer me up and are easy to buy when I’m busy.

Suggestion: Make the response direct and relevant. Begin with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, avoid unclear phrases ('keep your house to sustain it'), and give a concise reason for change using a linking word.

Example: When I was young I liked salty snacks such as cheese and chips, but later I changed because I realised they were unhealthy, so now I track what I eat to stay fit.

Suggestion: Be clearer and avoid hesitations. Give one clear answer, explain briefly with a specific seasonal example if possible, use linking words and correct phrasing ('I tend to eat the same food' instead of 'lost stability'). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

Example: No, I usually eat the same foods year-round because I prefer simple meals like eggs and vegetables. However, in summer I sometimes add fresh fruits like berries or tomatoes.

Suggestion: Structure your answer: give a clear yes/no, then explain change with specific details. Avoid repetition ('I try to be I try to be') and use appropriate collocations ('eat more fibre with protein' or 'combine fibre and protein'). Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

Example: Yes. I used to eat a lot of chips and chocolate when I was younger, but now I prefer healthier choices, such as combining fibre-rich foods like oats or vegetables with protein, because it keeps me full longer.

× To be honest, I am that person that is obsessed with this sweets, particularly chocolate bars or bubble gums.

✓ To be honest, I am the kind of person who is obsessed with these sweets, particularly chocolate bars or bubble gum.

Article and noun number: 'this sweets' mixes singular demonstrative 'this' with plural 'sweets'; use 'these' for plural. 'that person' is awkward; use 'the kind of person who' for natural phrasing. 'bubble gums' is usually uncountable when referring to the product type, so use 'bubble gum'. Suggestion: use 'these' for plural demonstratives and 'the kind of person who' for describing habit or trait. English (Kazakhstan)

× I used to like salty food like cheese or chips, but to be honest it's not a good way if you want to keep your house to sustain it.

✓ I used to like salty foods like cheese or chips, but to be honest it's not a good way to keep your body healthy.

Preposition and word choice: 'keep your house to sustain it' is incorrect and unclear; likely meant 'keep your body healthy' or 'maintain your health'. Also 'salty food' should be plural 'salty foods' when listing examples. Suggestion: replace incorrect phrase with 'keep your body healthy' or 'maintain your health' and use plural for general categories. English (Kazakhstan)

× So now I try to keep a record and track all the products that I eat.

✓ So now I try to keep a record and track all the products I eat.

Redundant relative clause: 'that I eat' is grammatically acceptable, but 'I eat' is more natural and concise after 'products'. No -ing issue here beyond style; kept correction minimal per instructions. Suggestion: omit 'that' for natural spoken English. English (Kazakhstan)

× I wouldn't say so, mainly because my go to option always is some eggs with vegetables and uh, I'm the person that lost stability.

✓ I wouldn't say so, mainly because my go-to option is always eggs with vegetables, and, uh, I'm the kind of person who lacks stability.

Form and word choice: 'go to' should be hyphenated 'go-to' as a compound adjective; 'some eggs' is unnecessary 'some' before a general habitual food. 'the person that lost stability' is incorrect tense and structure—use present 'who lacks stability' to show ongoing trait. Suggestion: use 'the kind of person who' and present simple 'lacks' for current state. English (Kazakhstan)

× That is why it's not a big problem for me to eat the same food every day. So I would say no. Maybe just uh, I can change the.

✓ That is why it's not a big problem for me to eat the same food every day, so I would say no. Maybe I can change it sometimes.

Sentence fragments and missing object: 'I can change the.' is incomplete; an object is missing. Combine sentences to improve flow and add 'it' and 'sometimes' to complete the thought. Suggestion: ensure each clause has a subject and object when needed. English (Kazakhstan)

× Yes of course, mainly because I used to eat more unhealthy food like chips and chocolate bars.

✓ Yes, of course, mainly because I used to eat unhealthier foods like chips and chocolate bars.

Comparative and noun number: 'more unhealthy' is wordy; use comparative 'unhealthier'. Also use plural 'foods' when giving examples. Suggestion: prefer 'unhealthier foods' or 'more unhealthy foods' corrected to 'unhealthier foods'. English (Kazakhstan)

× But now I try to be I try to be more healthy and to keep a record of all my nutrients and my go to option would be to eat fiber with the protein.

✓ But now I try to be healthier and to keep a record of my nutrients, and my go-to option is to eat fiber with protein.

Adjective/adverb and article use: 'more healthy' is better as comparative adjective 'healthier'. Remove duplicated phrase 'I try to be'. 'a record of all my nutrients' is awkward—use 'a record of my nutrients'. 'go to' should be 'go-to'. 'the protein' is unnecessary; use 'protein' in general. Suggestion: avoid repetition, use 'healthier', and drop definite article when speaking generally about nutrients/protein. English (Kazakhstan)