Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence naming the favorite food, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (articles, word order) and avoid redundancy. For example, say why you like that chocolate (texture, flavor combinations) and give a short example of when you enjoy it.

Example: My favourite food is chocolate. I especially like dark chocolate combined with berries because the sweet bitterness of the chocolate and the tartness of the berries balance well. For instance, I often have a piece of dark chocolate with frozen raspberries as an afternoon treat.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details and use linking words. Fix contradictions and vocabulary mistakes (“unhappy” seems wrong) and describe why you liked it (flavor, texture, appearance). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and remove unrelated words.

Example: When I was young, my favourite food was ice cream. I loved it because it was cold and sweet, and I enjoyed varieties with strawberries and biscuit toppings. For example, I remember choosing colorful scoops with sprinkles at birthday parties.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you change your diet seasonally, then provide specific examples with linking words (e.g., “in summer… whereas in winter…”). Avoid fillers and correct grammar (comparatives, word order). Finish the second clause to complete the idea.

Example: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. In spring and summer I prefer cold foods like ice cream and chilled fruits, whereas in autumn and winter I choose warm dishes such as soups and stews to feel cosy.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer (yes/no) and then explain briefly with specific reasons. Avoid vague or incorrect phrases and unnecessary words. Use linking words like “because” and give a concrete example (a flavour or situation) to support your view.

Example: No, my favourite food has not really changed because I still enjoy ice cream. I especially like gelato now because it has richer flavours and a smoother texture, so I often choose pistachio gelato when I go out.

× I can think a lot of things but the most is the chocolate.

✓ I can think of a lot of things, but my favorite is chocolate.

The original sentence omits needed preposition 'of' after 'think' and uses the definite article 'the' incorrectly before an uncountable noun 'chocolate'. Use 'my favorite is chocolate' or 'the chocolate' only with a specific chocolate. Also add a comma for clarity.

× I am really into the flavor of the both sweet and the a little bit of sour especially the berries one.

✓ I really like flavors that are both sweet and a little sour, especially berry flavors.

The phrase 'the both sweet' is incorrect; use 'both sweet and a little sour'. 'The a little bit of sour' is ungrammatical. 'Berries one' should be 'berry flavors'. Reorder for natural adjective use and parallelism.

× This was really make me.

✓ This really affects me.

The original mixes past tense 'was' with base verb 'make' and omits an object. Use present simple 'affects me' or 'really moves me' to express emotional impact; ensure subject-verb agreement and correct verb form.

× When I was a child the ice cream was my go to option, what made me feel really icy and unhappy.

✓ When I was a child, ice cream was my go-to option; it made me feel very refreshed and happy.

Comma needed after introductory clause. 'Go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to' when used as an adjective. 'What made me' is incorrect relative clause; use 'it made me'. 'Icy and unhappy' contradicts likely meaning; 'refreshed and happy' fits better. Also maintain past tense consistently.

× Also delighted is such kind of food with a lot of decorations, strawberries and biscuits.

✓ I was also delighted by foods with a lot of decorations, like ones with strawberries and biscuits.

Word order and structure are incorrect. Use 'delighted by' to show reaction, and rephrase 'such kind of food' to 'foods' or 'foods like ...'. Provide clear examples with 'like' or 'such as'.

× Of course, uh, during the summer and spring I prefer to eat something much more colder, such like the ice cream or the fruits that would eat the refrigerate refrigerators.

✓ Of course. During spring and summer I prefer to eat much colder things, such as ice cream or fruit stored in the refrigerator.

Don't use comparative 'more colder' (double comparative); use 'colder'. 'Such like' is incorrect; use 'such as'. 'Fruits' as plural can be 'fruit', and 'that would eat the refrigerate refrigerators' is ungrammatical—use 'stored in the refrigerator'.

× But since it turned cold, I prefer to eat something either umm.

✓ But since it gets cold, I prefer to eat warmer foods.

The original ends abruptly and mixes past 'turned cold' with present 'prefer'. For habitual preference use present simple: 'since it gets cold' or 'now that it's cold' and complete the sentence with a noun phrase 'warmer foods'.

× I thought that it didn't change because I still love eating ice cream now.

✓ I don't think it has changed because I still love eating ice cream now.

Tense mismatch: 'I thought that it didn't change' suggests past belief about past change. To express a continuing state, use present perfect 'has changed' or present 'hasn't changed'. Use 'I don't think it has changed' or 'It hasn't changed'.

× What made me think so is the very beautiful flavor that gave to me and I will feel that the sense of the pommy would come even more the Gelato then appeared in these days.

✓ What makes me say that is the very pleasant flavor it gives me, and I feel that the taste of gelato has become even more popular these days.

Tense and word choice issues: use present 'makes' for a general statement. 'Beautiful flavor that gave to me' should be 'flavor it gives me'. 'Pommy' is unclear—likely 'creamy' or 'pummy' is wrong; replaced with 'taste of gelato'. 'Would come even more the Gelato then appeared in these days' is ungrammatical—rephrase to 'has become even more popular these days' and use present perfect for recent change.