Food— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more grammatically accurate, concise, and use clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, and avoid vague phrases like “any other thing.” Add one brief reason and an example. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: My favourite foods are dishes that combine vegetables, fruit and lean protein, such as salads with grilled chicken. I prefer these because they keep me full and are lower in carbohydrates, which helps me stay healthy.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and give one clear example with a short reason. Replace vague phrases with specific foods and correct grammar. Limit to two or three sentences.

Example: When I was a child I liked trying many different foods and did not worry about nutrition. For example, I often ate instant noodles (Indomie) and fried snacks because they tasted good and were easy to get.

Suggestion: Improve sentence accuracy and cohesion. Use correct relative clauses and link ideas with a clear reason for seasonal choices. Provide one concise example and a linking word to show contrast between seasons.

Example: Yes. Because Indonesia has two main seasons, I choose different foods depending on the weather. For example, in the dry season I often eat fried dishes like fried chicken, but during the rainy season I prefer hot soups to warm up.

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary (use 'low-carb' rather than 'low carbon') and correct idioms. Give a direct topic sentence, a reason, and one clear comparison. Keep language natural and avoid mixed idioms.

Example: Yes, my preferences have changed. I now follow a low-carb diet, so I prefer grilled fish and salads rather than pasta and sweets because lower-carb meals help me maintain my fitness.

× My favorite food are any dishes that contains vegetable, fruit and protein such as salad, grilled chicken breast, or any other thing that less carbohydrate.

✓ My favorite food is any dish that contains vegetables, fruit, and protein, such as salad, grilled chicken breast, or any other thing with less carbohydrate.

Subjects and verbs must agree in number: 'food' (singular) needs 'is' not 'are'. 'Dishes' should be singular 'dish' to match 'any'. Use plural 'vegetables' for countable items. 'Contains' correctly agrees with singular 'dish'. Use 'with less carbohydrate' to show possession/characteristic. Use commas to separate items in a list.

× When I was a kid I prefer to try all the different food without concern in the healthy nutrition such as indo mie that high in carbohydrate and fried food.

✓ When I was a kid I preferred to try all kinds of different foods without concern for healthy nutrition, such as Indomie, which is high in carbohydrates, and fried food.

The time marker 'When I was a kid' sets the sentence in past, so the verb should be past tense 'preferred' not 'prefer'. Use 'kinds of different foods' for natural plurality. Preposition should be 'concern for' not 'in'. 'Indomie' is a specific brand and should be capitalized; add a relative clause 'which is high in carbohydrates' and pluralize 'carbohydrates'.

× Since I live in Indonesia that have two season, I eat different food each season.

✓ Since I live in Indonesia, which has two seasons, I eat different foods each season.

Use a non-defining relative clause 'which has' to describe Indonesia; 'Indonesia' (singular) requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Season' should be plural 'seasons'. Use 'foods' for different types of food. Also add commas around the non-defining clause.

× For example, in the summer I often eat dry food like fried chicken and in rainy season I eat soup.

✓ For example, in the summer I often eat dry foods like fried chicken, and in the rainy season I eat soup.

Use plural 'foods' when referring to types of food. Add the definite article 'the' before 'rainy season'. Use a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' joining two independent clauses.

× Yes, I've changed my food recently. Now I follow a low carbon diet so I prefer grilled fish and salad instead of pasta and sweet that high in carbohydrate because I won't stay fit as a fiddle.

✓ Yes, I've changed my diet recently. Now I follow a low-carbohydrate diet, so I prefer grilled fish and salad instead of pasta and sweets that are high in carbohydrates because I won't stay as fit as a fiddle.

Use 'diet' rather than 'food' for the general eating pattern. Use the adjective 'low-carbohydrate' with a hyphen. 'Sweets' (plural) is more natural. Relative clause needs a verb 'that are high in carbohydrates'. The idiom is 'as fit as a fiddle'; include 'as' before 'fit'. Also add commas to separate clauses for clarity.