Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example and a brief reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar issues (e.g., "it reminds me that I live in a big city"). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. I live in Shanghai, so I can see many tall buildings from my window. For example, the skyline near my apartment includes several skyscrapers that remind me I live in a large, busy city.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then explain with a clear reason and one specific example. Fix grammar ("I'm not a big fan of architecture; I prefer taking photos of nature") and use linking words like "because" or "so" to show cause. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: No, I don't usually. I'm not very interested in architecture; I prefer photographing nature because landscapes like mountains and forests help me feel relaxed.

Suggestion: Answer directly then expand with a specific, coherent reason. Avoid vague phrases like "I don't know" and repetition. Use linking phrases ("however", "instead") to contrast ideas. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and provide one clear example if possible.

Example: No, I don't have a particular building I want to visit because I'm not interested in architecture. Instead, I enjoy visiting lively public spaces to observe local people and street life, such as a busy market or riverside promenade.

Suggestion: Give a clear reason and a single concrete detail to support your preference. Correct tense and phrasing ("it makes me feel like I'm in a small cage"). Use a linking word like "because" and keep it concise.

Example: No, I don't. I prefer living in lower, more spread-out houses because tall buildings make me feel confined, almost like I'm living in a small cage.

× For example, every time I look outside from my window, it would remind me remind me that I I will live in a big city.

✓ For example, every time I look out of my window, it reminds me that I will live in a big city.

The original uses 'would remind' which is incorrect for a habitual present action; use present simple 'reminds' for repeated actions. Also remove duplicated words 'remind me' and 'I'. Use 'look out of' or 'look out' instead of 'look outside from'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions and proofread to remove repetitions.

× I'm not a big fan of architecture compared with the buildings.

✓ I'm not a big fan of architecture or buildings.

The phrase 'compared with the buildings' is awkward and not the intended contrast. Use coordinating conjunctions or prepositions correctly. Here 'or' clarifies that the speaker dislikes architecture and buildings. If intending comparison, use 'compared with' correctly: 'Compared with buildings, I'm not interested in architecture.'

× I'd rather than take photos of natures.

✓ I'd rather take photos of nature.

'I'd rather than' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'I'd rather' followed by the base verb. 'Natures' is uncountable here, so use 'nature'. Suggestion: use 'I'd rather' + base verb and singular/uncountable forms as needed.

× I love mountains and the trees that ma that would make me feel relaxed.

✓ I love mountains and trees because they make me feel relaxed.

Original contains fragments and repetitions ('ma that') and incorrect relative clause. Use 'because they make me feel relaxed' to show cause, and 'trees' without 'the' for general preference. Remove filler sounds and fix sentence structure.

× No, like I said, I'm not a big fan of architecture, so I don't have a specific building that I really want to go.

✓ No, like I said, I'm not a big fan of architecture, so I don't have a specific building that I really want to visit.

The verb 'go' needs a preposition or a more specific verb; use 'visit' for buildings. Sentence structure otherwise okay.

× But there was some place I want to see for, I don't know, see the people there, maybe see the people.

✓ But there are some places I want to see, to meet the people there or just observe them.

Tense and number are inconsistent: 'was some place I want' mixes past and present; use present 'are some places I want to see' for current desire. Clarify purpose with an infinitive phrase: 'to meet' or 'to observe'. Avoid repetition.

× That's more what I can.

✓ That's more what I mean.

'That's more what I can' is ungrammatical. The intended meaning is likely 'That's more what I mean.' Use 'mean' to clarify intention.

× I prefer to live in a building that's more separated and scattered.

✓ I prefer to live in buildings that are more separate and spread out.

'More separated and scattered' is awkward for describing buildings; use 'separate' and 'spread out' or 'detached' to describe spacing. Also match plurality: 'a building that's' vs 'buildings that are' depending on intent. Here 'buildings that are more separate and spread out' is clearer.

× That made me feel like a small cage.

✓ That would make me feel like I'm in a small cage.

Tense and structure: 'That made me feel' indicates past; speaker is describing a general feeling, so use conditional or present: 'would make me feel' or 'makes me feel', and use 'like I'm in a small cage' to express being inside a cage metaphorically.

× That's not a good feeling.

✓ That's an unpleasant feeling.

'Not a good feeling' is acceptable but weak; suggest stronger adjective 'unpleasant'. If keeping original, it's grammatical. This suggestion refines word choice rather than fixes grammar.