Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., "building" repeated) and correct subject-verb agreement and article use.

Example: Yes. I live in a big city, so there are many tall buildings near my home, including high-rise apartments and office towers. For example, there is a large shopping mall inside one of the taller buildings, which makes the area quite busy.

Suggestion: Use correct phrases and simplify. Give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct collocations (e.g., 'I'm not interested in' and 'I'm more fond of').

Example: Not really. I'm more fond of photographing people and natural scenery because I enjoy capturing emotions and green landscapes when I travel. For instance, I often take mountain photos and share them on social media.

Suggestion: Clear answer and personal reason—good. Improve fluency by removing fillers and repetition, and add one specific detail about why it appeals to you (history, view, architecture). Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I'd love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it's iconic and I've seen it in films. I think it would feel very romantic to see the city view from the top, especially if I go with my husband.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Start with a clear statement about current situation, then give two concise, specific advantages using linking words. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'high-rise apartment', 'security').

Example: Yes. I currently live in a high-rise apartment and I enjoy the fascinating views, especially at night when the city lights are visible. Also, the building offers good security and convenient facilities, which makes living there comfortable.

× There are lots of high rise apartment and some office buildings and also there are there is a shopping mall which is in a building which is in a high building.

✓ There are lots of high-rise apartments and some office buildings, and there is also a shopping mall in a tall building.

The noun 'apartment' should be plural to agree with 'lots of'. Also 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective. The original contained a redundant phrase 'there are there is' and an awkward repetition 'which is in a building which is in a high building'; simplify to 'in a tall building'. Suggestion: make nouns agree with quantifiers and remove redundancies.

× So I think that this make the city busy.

✓ So I think that this makes the city busy.

The subject 'this' is singular, so the verb must be 'makes' (third person singular). Use correct subject-verb agreement in present tense. Suggestion: for singular subjects in present simple add -s to the verb.

× Actually, I'm not interested in taking photos for building.

✓ Actually, I'm not interested in taking photos of buildings.

The correct preposition with 'photos' is 'of' not 'for'; also 'building' should be plural here to refer generally to buildings. Use 'photos of buildings'.

× I am more fun of taking photos of people and nature, especially from mountains for greens and when I travel, mostly I take photos and I share it on social media.

✓ I prefer taking photos of people and nature, especially green mountain scenery, and when I travel I usually take photos and share them on social media.

'More fun of' is incorrect; use 'prefer' or 'I'm more fond of'. 'From mountains for greens' is awkward; 'green mountain scenery' is clearer. 'Mostly' placed OK but combine clauses and use correct pronoun 'them' for 'photos'. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs ('prefer') and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× But for building I think that it doesn't attract me.

✓ But buildings don't really attract me.

'For building' is incorrect; use plural 'buildings' as the subject. Also English prefers 'don't attract me' or 'don't really attract me' rather than 'it doesn't attract me' when referring generally. Suggestion: use plural subject and simple negative form.

× For sure I want to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris, which is a very famous place and I I have seen it in movies.

✓ For sure I want to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris, which is very famous, and I have seen it in movies.

Redundant 'a' before 'very famous place' can be omitted; 'the Eiffel Tower' correctly takes the definite article. Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: avoid article redundancy and typos.

× I think that it will be very romantic if I can see it in person, especially with my husband.

✓ I think it would be very romantic to see it in person, especially with my husband.

This is a hypothetical future condition; use 'would' (conditional) instead of 'will' and 'to see' rather than 'if I can see'. Use conditional structure for imagined situations. Suggestion: use 'would + base verb' for hypothetical statements.

× I think that the view from from the high from the high building is very fascinating, especially at night when all the city lights, but you know that the buildings have a good security and even some more.

✓ I think the view from the tall building is very fascinating, especially at night when all the city lights are on, and the buildings have good security and more facilities.

Remove duplicated words 'from from the high from the high'. Use 'tall building' or 'high-rise building'. 'All the city lights' needs a verb: 'are on'. 'A good security' is incorrect: use 'good security' (uncountable) and clarify 'even some more' to 'and more facilities'. Also maintain third person singular agreement where needed. Suggestion: eliminate repetitions, ensure verbs are present, and use uncountable nouns properly.