Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition, use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to make it coherent. Also correct minor grammar (e.g., 'any high buildings' and 'low-rise houses').

Example: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a quiet residential area of Brampton, about 20 minutes from the commercial district, so the neighbourhood mainly has low-rise houses and small shops.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, avoid filler sounds, and focus on one or two clear reasons. Use better vocabulary (e.g., 'I don't usually photograph buildings' and 'I mainly use my phone for music and social media').

Example: No, I don't usually photograph buildings. I mostly use my phone to listen to music or check social media, so taking photos of architecture isn't something I often do.

Suggestion: Be specific and correct place names (Montreal, not Monterey). Start with a clear topic sentence and give supporting reasons why you want to visit, using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example').

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Montreal. I have heard from a friend that Montreal has beautiful historic architecture and charming old streets, so I want to see the churches and museums there.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion and concise reasons. Avoid repeating phrases and filler. Use linking words (e.g., 'however', 'but') and give one or two specific points (privacy, views, convenience).

Example: I haven't seriously considered living in a tall building because I've always lived in a house. However, I would like to try it once to enjoy the views and the convenience of being close to city facilities.

× there are not, uh, any high building near my house

✓ there are not, uh, any high buildings near my house

The noun 'building' should be plural after 'any' with a plural verb 'are' because it refers to multiple possible items in the area. Use 'high buildings' to match the plural context.

× when there are more, uh, low rise houses and there are no high rise, uh, buildings near

✓ when there are more, uh, low-rise houses and there are no high-rise, uh, buildings nearby

Use plural 'buildings' to match 'low-rise houses' and add hyphens for the compound adjectives 'low-rise' and 'high-rise'. Use 'nearby' as a single adverb to indicate proximity.

× Actually I don't take photos of building as I don't love to do so

✓ Actually I don't take photos of buildings as I don't like to do so

Use plural 'buildings' after 'photos of' because photos are usually taken of multiple buildings or the general category. Also 'love to' is unnatural here; 'like to' is more appropriate for habitual preferences.

× Uh, I'm like in my phone? I only listen to music and sometimes do work later tasks or scroll through the reels

✓ Uh, I am usually on my phone; I only listen to music, sometimes do later tasks, or scroll through reels

Original sentence is colloquial and ungrammatical. 'I am usually on my phone' expresses the state. 'Sometimes do later tasks' clarifies timing; remove the article 'the' before 'reels' when speaking generally. Note: this correction addresses sentence structure and word choice to make the meaning clear.

× Otherwise I don't mind. Don't use my phone to take photos

✓ Otherwise I don't mind; I just don't use my phone to take photos

The second fragment 'Don't use my phone to take photos' lacks a subject and correct tense. Adding 'I just' provides the subject and connects the thought, forming a complete sentence.

× For this moment, I can't think of such, any such building

✓ At the moment, I can't think of any such building

Use 'At the moment' for current time and 'any such building' is the correct word order. Remove redundant commas and repeated expressions to improve clarity.

× I have heard from one of my friends that, you know, Monterey is a beautiful city with ancient buildings

✓ I have heard from one of my friends that, you know, Montreal is a beautiful city with historic buildings

The student likely meant 'Montreal' not 'Monterey' given earlier mention of Montreal. Also 'ancient buildings' is awkward for an urban context; 'historic buildings' is more appropriate. This improves accuracy and word choice.

× I would love to visit there

✓ I would love to visit it

Use 'visit it' to refer to the city as a singular place. 'Visit there' is nonstandard; 'visit it' or 'go there' are correct alternatives.

× I have never planned to live in at such place, place like high buildings

✓ I have never planned to live in such a place, like a high-rise building

Remove the extra preposition 'at' and duplicate 'place'. Use 'such a place' and 'like a high-rise building' for correct noun phrases and clearer meaning.

× But you know, I would definitely, definitely want to experience such things and but preferably I would

✓ But you know, I would definitely like to experience that, although preferably I would not live there

The original is repetitive and contradictory. Clarify intent: express willingness to try the experience but preference not to live in a tall building. Replace 'such things' with 'that' for a specific idea and fix conjunction use.