Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và tính tự nhiên: sửa các lỗi về từ vựng (ví dụ “home sale” sai thành “hometown” hoặc “small house”), thì động từ (ví dụ “I really seen” → “I don’t really see” hoặc “I haven’t seen”), và cấu trúc câu để trả lời trực tiếp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Hạn chế dùng từ quá trang trọng như “edifice” nếu không phù hợp.

Example: I don’t live near any tall buildings; I live in a small house in a quiet neighbourhood. In the past, my hometown had more multi-storey buildings, but most places around me are low-rise now.

Suggestion: Chỉnh ngữ pháp và rõ ràng hơn: dùng thì đúng (e.g., “it depends”), số nhiều/số ít chính xác (“photos”, “buildings”), và hoàn thiện ý cuối bị bỏ dở. Bổ sung một liên từ để liên kết ý (e.g., “however” hoặc “otherwise”) và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về lúc bạn chụp để câu tự nhiên hơn.

Example: It depends on my mood. If I’m happy, I often take photos of tall buildings because I like their architecture. Otherwise, I usually take photos of my family or everyday scenes.

Suggestion: Sửa cấu trúc câu và dùng từ vựng chính xác: bắt đầu trực tiếp (“I would like to visit Landmark 81”), sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (“I’ve heard from a friend that it’s one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam”), và thay “a lot of stuff” bằng cụm từ cụ thể hơn (ví dụ “restaurants, shops and an observation deck”). Thêm lý do cụ thể để tăng tính thuyết phục.

Example: I would like to visit Landmark 81. I’ve heard from a friend that it’s one of the tallest buildings in Vietnam, and it has shops, restaurants and an observation deck with great views.

Suggestion: Làm rõ ý và tránh những phát ngôn mơ hồ: trả lời trực tiếp, đưa lý do thực tế (ví dụ view tốt, an ninh, tiện nghi). Sửa lỗi từ vựng/ ngữ pháp (“build all my city on the top” không rõ nghĩa—nên nói “be high above the street” hoặc “have a rooftop garden”). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và giới hạn 2–3 câu.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it would offer better views and fresher air. I also like the idea of having a rooftop garden where I could grow some plants and relax.

× Well actually I live in a small home sale, therefore I really seen any high rise building in my place.

✓ Well, actually I live in a small housing estate; therefore I haven't really seen any high-rise buildings in my area.

The original sentence mixes present and past forms incorrectly and uses wrong verb forms. 'Seen' is a past participle and needs an auxiliary (have/has) for present perfect: 'haven't seen'. 'Home sale' is incorrect word choice; 'housing estate' or 'small house' fits. Use plural 'high-rise buildings' and 'in my area' instead of 'in my place'. Improve by using present perfect for experience up to now and correct nouns and plurals. Suggestion: Use 'haven't seen' for negative present perfect and pluralize countable nouns.

× However, in the past there used to be a lot of edifice in my hometown.

✓ However, in the past there used to be a lot of large buildings in my hometown.

'Edifice' is unusual and often singular; 'buildings' or 'large buildings' is more natural. The structure 'there used to be' is correct for past habitual existence; only the noun choice needed correction. Use common vocabulary for clarity. Suggestion: Replace rare word 'edifice' with 'large buildings' or 'edifices' if formal.

× Um, it's actually depend on which mood I'm in.

✓ Um, it actually depends on which mood I'm in.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'it' requires third person singular verb 'depends'. The original used base form 'depend'. Fix by adding -s for present simple third person. Suggestion: Remember to add -s for he/she/it in present simple.

× If I'm happy, I will take a lot of photo of high rise building.

✓ If I'm happy, I take a lot of photos of high-rise buildings.

In conditional real present, both 'if' clause can use present simple and main clause can use present simple for habitual actions. Also pluralize 'photos' and 'high-rise buildings' and add hyphen in 'high-rise'. The original used future 'will' which is possible but less natural for habitual behavior. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions: 'If I am happy, I take...' and plural nouns for countables.

× On the other hand I will take the picture of my.

✓ On the other hand, I will take pictures of my family.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear: 'picture of my' lacks an object. Add a clear object like 'family' or 'friends' and pluralize 'pictures' if multiple. Also include comma after introductory phrase. Suggestion: Complete the sentence by specifying who or what: 'pictures of my family'.

× For me, Landmark 81 is the building that I really want to visit in the future because I have heard from my friend that is a one of the highest building in Vietnam and there are a lot of stuff out there.

✓ For me, Landmark 81 is the building I really want to visit in the future because I have heard from my friend that it is one of the highest buildings in Vietnam and there is a lot to see there.

Multiple errors: missing subject 'it' before 'is'; use 'one of the highest buildings' (remove 'a' before 'one of' and pluralize 'buildings'); 'stuff' is informal and vague—use 'things' or 'attractions' or 'a lot to see'; use 'there is' for uncountable or general existence. Also remove unnecessary 'that' after 'building'. Suggestion: Use 'it is one of the highest buildings' and choose more specific nouns than 'stuff'.

× Yes, obviously I prefer living in a tall building rather than a short one.

✓ Yes, obviously I prefer living in a tall building rather than in a short one.

This sentence is mostly correct but clearer if you include 'in' before 'a short one' for parallel structure. Keep present tense 'prefer' for general preference. Suggestion: Maintain parallel prepositional phrases: 'living in a tall building rather than in a short one.'

× It's simply because I want to build all my city on the top and enjoy the fresh air.

✓ It's simply because I want to build my whole life in the city on top and enjoy the fresh air.

The original 'build all my city on the top' is awkward and unclear. Likely intended meaning: live in the city high up or build my life in a city on top. Adjust to clearer phrasing. 'All my city' is wrong; 'my whole life' or 'my city' with clearer structure needed. Suggestion: Clarify intended meaning: 'live my whole life in a city on top' or 'have my whole city on top' depending on intent.

× Moreover, I can grow some trees on the top of my house maybe.

✓ Moreover, I could maybe grow some trees on the top of my house.

Word order and modal choice: 'maybe' is better before or after modal verb 'could/might'. 'Can' is acceptable but 'could/might' sounds more tentative. 'On the top of my house' is acceptable but 'on the roof of my house' is more natural. Use 'grow some trees on the roof of my house.' Suggestion: Reorder adverb 'maybe' and consider 'could' for possibility; use 'roof' for clarity.