Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Give a clear, direct topic sentence that answers the question, then add 1–2 specific supporting details. Use correct sentence structure and simple linking words (e.g., however, because). Avoid unrelated or unclear phrases.

Example: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. I live in a suburban area with mostly low-rise houses and small apartment blocks, so the skyline is quite low. However, there are some newer three-storey apartment buildings near the main road.

Suggestion: Start with a clear statement and give specific reasons and examples. Keep sentences complete and use linking words like because or for example to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings because I’m an engineer and I’m interested in design and structure. For example, when I travel I photograph interesting façades and bridges to study their details later.

Suggestion: Answer directly naming the building, then give two specific reasons with linking words (because, so, and). Use natural phrases and correct grammar for clarity.

Example: I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it’s an iconic piece of architecture and offers great views of the city. If I go, I would take photos of the tower at sunset and walk around the Champ de Mars to experience the surroundings.

Suggestion: Give a direct yes/no, then balance pros and cons clearly using linking phrases (although, because, but). Keep to two or three sentences and be specific about what you like or worry about.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building although I have some safety concerns. I enjoy apartments on high floors because they offer great views and more privacy, but I would want good safety measures and easy emergency access.

× No they are not.

✓ No, there aren't any.

The student attempted to answer 'Are there tall buildings near your home?' Using 'No they are not' is incorrect because 'there' is required for existence questions and 'aren't any' correctly negates presence. Use 'there are'/'there aren't any' for existence. Suggestion: Respond with 'No, there aren't any.' or 'No, there aren't.' to indicate absence.

× I live in.

✓ I live in a small town.

The fragment 'I live in.' lacks an object/place after the preposition 'in', so it's an incomplete sentence. Add a noun phrase that specifies where you live to complete the thought. Suggestion: Provide the full location: 'I live in a small town.' or 'I live in the suburbs.'

× The prices were family like so there are so many apartment or.

✓ The prices were affordable, so there are many apartments.

Original has multiple issues: wrong word choice 'family like' and incorrect quantifier 'so many apartment or'. Use 'affordable' to mean reasonable prices and plural 'apartments' with 'many'. Ensure logical connector 'so' links cause and result. Suggestion: Say 'The prices were affordable, so there are many apartments.'

× Yes, and you can see terrible things near my hometown.

✓ Yes, and you can see some unpleasant things near my hometown.

'Terrible things' is grammatically possible but sounds odd; 'some unpleasant things' is more natural. The sentence is otherwise structurally acceptable but likely needs clearer vocabulary. Suggestion: Use 'some unpleasant things' or specify what you mean (e.g. 'pollution' or 'old buildings').

× Yes, I do, because I'm an engineer, I think developed technology and.

✓ Yes, I do, because I'm an engineer and I appreciate developed technology.

The phrase 'I think developed technology and.' is ungrammatical. It appears the student wanted to say they value or are interested in developed technology. Use a verb phrase like 'I appreciate developed technology' or 'I like modern technology.' Also connect clauses with 'and' properly. Suggestion: 'Yes, I do, because I'm an engineer and I like modern technology.'

× It's.

✓ It's interesting.

'It's.' is a sentence fragment lacking a complement. Add an adjective or clause to complete the sentence. Suggestion: Complete the thought: 'It's beautiful.' or 'It's interesting.'

× Home is beautiful and I often take photos of tours.

✓ My hometown is beautiful, and I often take photos when I go on tours.

'Home is beautiful' is missing a determiner ('my home' or 'my hometown'). 'Take photos of tours' is awkward; you take photos on tours or of buildings. Clarify what you photograph. Suggestion: 'My hometown is beautiful, and I often take photos when I go on tours.'

× I would like to visit Eiffel Tower in Paris because the tower is very beautiful I think, and if I go there I'd like to take photos of it and I want to see environment.

✓ I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because the tower is very beautiful, and if I go there I'd like to take photos of it and see the surroundings.

Need definite article 'the' before 'Eiffel Tower'. Run-on sentence: add commas and conjunctions. 'See environment' is unidiomatic; use 'see the surroundings' or 'see the area'. Suggestion: 'I would like to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is very beautiful, and if I go there I'd like to take photos and see the surroundings.'

× Yes, I do all those there are dangerous to live in tall buildings, but I like the rooms with great scenery, so I would like to live in tall building and a higher place.

✓ Yes, I do. Some of those are dangerous to live in, but I like rooms with great views, so I would like to live in a tall building in a high place.

Sentence has multiple problems: missing punctuation, 'all those there are dangerous' should be 'some of those are dangerous', 'rooms with great scenery' is better as 'rooms with great views', 'live in tall building' needs an article 'a tall building', and 'a higher place' is better as 'a high place'. Suggestion: Split into two sentences: 'Yes, I do. Some tall buildings are dangerous to live in, but I like rooms with great views, so I would like to live in a tall building in a high place.'