Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy (e.g., 'some' repeated) and minor grammar issues ('I am living' → 'I live'). Use a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: No. I live in a small city, so there are no tall buildings nearby; instead, there are fields and low houses with a few local shops.

Suggestion: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear reason and one specific example. Correct awkward phrasing (e.g., 'not very vividly', 'designed by the architect', 'I am Pei'). Reduce hesitations and maintain natural word choice.

Example: Not often. I usually don't photograph buildings because I find them less lively, but I do take pictures of striking modern buildings, for example the Suzhou History Museum designed by I.M. Pei because its form and details are very impressive.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid adding unrelated or incorrect names (e.g., 'PATH Museum'). Use precise vocabulary and limit hesitation. Provide one or two specific reasons with a linking word.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit the Palace Museum in central Beijing because it is a symbol of Chinese cultural heritage and I am fascinated by its grandeur and traditional architecture.

Suggestion: Give a direct statement then support it with a clear, concise reason and a brief example. Use consistent tense (e.g., 'is very beautiful' or 'looks beautiful') and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

Example: Yes. I would like to live in a high‑rise apartment because the night view of the city is beautiful; for example, when I visited a friend's high‑rise last weekend I was amazed by the illuminated skyline.

× No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I am living in a small city, so they're just some fields and some crops nearby and moreover there are some short houses and shops nearby.

✓ No, there aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city, so there are just some fields and crops nearby; moreover, there are some low houses and shops.

Use simple present (live) for habitual or permanent situations instead of present continuous (am living). Replace 'they're just some fields and some crops nearby' with 'there are just some fields and crops nearby' because 'there' is the correct existential construction. 'Short houses' is better phrased as 'low houses' or 'low-rise houses.' Combine clauses and add punctuation for clarity.

× Well, I rarely take photos of buildings because I think buildings are not very vividly, uh.

✓ Well, I rarely take photos of buildings because I think buildings are not very vivid.

Use the adjective 'vivid' to describe 'buildings,' not the adverb 'vividly.' The verb 'are' requires an adjective complement. Remove filler and use clear adjective form.

× However, I will take some photos of the modern buildings, such as the Suzhou History Museum, which was designed by the architect. I am Pei, that was so fancy.

✓ However, I will take photos of modern buildings, such as the Suzhou History Museum, which was designed by the architect I.M. Pei; that building is so fancy.

Remove unnecessary article before 'modern buildings' and use 'photos of' not 'take some photos of the modern buildings.' Specify architect name correctly (I.M. Pei) and link clauses properly. 'I am Pei' is incorrect — likely meant the architect's name; rephrase to 'the architect I.M. Pei.' Replace 'that was so fancy' with 'that building is so fancy' to refer clearly to the museum.

× Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum, which is located in the center of Beijing, and the PATH Museum is a symbol of our Chinese culture heritage, and I think I will.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Palace Museum, which is located in the center of Beijing, and the PATH Museum, which is a symbol of our Chinese cultural heritage; I think I will.

Use 'cultural heritage' as the correct noun phrase. Add a relative clause 'which is' for the PATH Museum to parallel the structure. Use punctuation to separate ideas and avoid the awkward 'and I think I will' by placing it after a semicolon.

× I am fascinated by its, uh, grandeur and its beautiful architecture.

✓ I am fascinated by its grandeur and beautiful architecture.

Remove filler 'uh' and the redundant second possessive 'its' is unnecessary before 'beautiful architecture.' Use concise phrasing.

× Yes, I want to live in a high rise apartment because I think the view of the house was very beautiful at night.

✓ Yes, I want to live in a high-rise apartment because I think the view from the apartment is very beautiful at night.

Maintain present tense for general opinions: use 'is' not 'was.' Use 'from the apartment' rather than 'of the house' to match context. Hyphenate 'high-rise.'

× Last weekend I went to my friend's home which is a high rise apartment, and I was amazed by its night view of the whole city.

✓ Last weekend I went to my friend's home, which is a high-rise apartment, and I was amazed by its night view of the whole city.

Add commas around the nonrestrictive relative clause 'which is a high-rise apartment.' Hyphenate 'high-rise.' The structure and tense are otherwise acceptable; the insertion of commas clarifies the sentence.