Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons using correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Avoid filler sounds (umm) and unclear words like "real relentless." Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

Example: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home because I live in an industrial area. Instead of offices and skyscrapers, the neighbourhood has many factories and warehouses, so the skyline is quite low.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct statement, then give specific examples and use appropriate vocabulary. Avoid repetition ("do love enjoy") and filler words. Use linking words like "especially" or "for example" to connect ideas and clarify what kind of buildings you photograph.

Example: Yes, I sometimes photograph buildings, especially when I travel. For example, I enjoy taking pictures of historic architecture and buildings related to local culture because they show a place’s history and character.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then give clear, specific reasons. Use plural articles correctly ("the pyramids"), avoid fillers, and complete your reason (e.g., "how they were built" or "their history"). Use linking words like "because" and provide one concrete detail to support your interest.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit the pyramids in Egypt and Mexico because I have read many articles about them. I am especially curious about how ancient people built such large structures and about the rituals and history associated with them.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and specific reason. Correct vocabulary and grammar: say "I wouldn't" or "I wouldn't want to," and use "earthquakes" not "earthquake pool." Avoid trailing unfinished sentences. Use linking words like "because" and add one brief consequence or example of risk.

Example: No, I wouldn’t want to live in a tall building because I live on an island that experiences frequent earthquakes. For that reason, tall buildings feel more dangerous to me, so I prefer low-rise houses that seem safer.

× Actually no, because I live in a industry area so there are many factories and real relentless so umm.

✓ Actually no, because I live in an industrial area, so there are many factories and it is really relentless.

This sentence contains incorrect adjective forms and word choice. 'a industry area' should be 'an industrial area' (use adjective form 'industrial' and 'an' before vowel sound). 'real relentless' is incorrect because 'relentless' is an adjective that needs an adverb 'really' and a clear subject: change to 'it is really relentless' to describe the area. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and proper articles, and ensure adjectives modifying nouns are placed correctly. Example improvement: 'I live in an industrial area, so there are many factories and it is really relentless.'

× Yes, I sometimes do that, especially when I go traveling and I do love enjoy umm, some interesting building like a tea culture or historic.

✓ Yes, I sometimes do that, especially when I travel, and I really enjoy some interesting buildings, like those related to tea culture or historical sites.

Multiple errors: 'go traveling' is acceptable but 'when I travel' is more natural (verb form). 'I do love enjoy' mixes two verbs; choose one and use appropriate adverb: 'I really enjoy'. 'some interesting building' should be plural 'buildings'. 'tea culture or historic' are noun/adjective mismatches; clarify as 'tea culture' or 'historical sites'. Suggestion: avoid stacking auxiliary verbs unnecessarily and ensure noun-adjective agreement and plurality. Example improvement: 'especially when I travel, and I really enjoy interesting buildings, such as those related to tea culture or historical sites.'

× Yes, I do like to visit pyramid in Egypt and some pyramids in Mexico, because I had so some umm documents about that and I want to know how.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the pyramids in Egypt and some pyramids in Mexico, because I have seen some documents about them and I want to learn how they were built.

Errors: 'visit pyramid' needs an article and usually 'the pyramids' (definite article for famous monuments). 'I had so some umm documents' should be 'I have seen some documents' (tense and word order). 'about that and I want to know how' is vague; specify 'how they were built' using past passive ('were built') to match meaning. Suggestion: use correct articles with well-known landmarks, correct tense for current experiences, and clarify the object of 'know'. Example improvement: 'I would like to visit the pyramids in Egypt... and I want to learn how they were built.'

× No, I won't really do that because I live in a an island which has a lot of earthquake pool. So umm, living in a high building is more dangerous. I will.

✓ No, I wouldn't really do that because I live on an island that has frequent earthquakes. So, living in a tall building is more dangerous.

Multiple issues: 'I won't really do that' is awkward; 'I wouldn't' expresses preference better. 'I live in a an island' should be 'I live on an island' and remove duplicate article. 'which has a lot of earthquake pool' is incorrect vocabulary; use 'frequent earthquakes' or 'a high risk of earthquakes'. Final 'I will.' is incomplete and unnecessary. Suggestion: use conditional/modal 'would' for hypothetical preferences, correct preposition 'on' for islands, and use correct noun phrases for seismic activity. Example improvement: 'No, I wouldn't really do that because I live on an island that has frequent earthquakes, so living in a tall building is more dangerous.'