Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 만들고 불필요한 중복과 주저(uh, um, 반복어)를 줄이세요. 주제문으로 바로 답한 뒤 구체적 세부정보(예: 건물의 용도, 위치, 높이)를 덧붙이고 문법 오류(예: 관사·복수 형태)를 수정하세요.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, a large apartment building with 17 floors is right next to my house, and there are also a few office towers along the main road.

Suggestion: 응답을 더 간결하고 정확하게 하세요. 시간 표현과 빈도부사 위치를 올바르게 사용하고, 중복 표현을 제거하며 이유와 한두 가지 구체적 상황(예: 어떤 각도, 어떤 장치로 찍는지)을 추가하세요.

Example: Sometimes I take photos of buildings when I return home at around 6:00 PM because the sunset creates a nice background. I usually photograph the high-rise apartments from the street to capture their silhouette.

Suggestion: 응답은 비교적 명확하지만 건물 이름과 이유를 더 정확히 연결하고 표현을 자연스럽게 다듬으세요. 'As far as I know' 대신 확신도의 표현을 적절히 사용하고 방문 계획이나 기대하는 활동(예: 어느 층, 어떤 전망)을 구체적으로 말하면 더 좋습니다.

Example: I would like to visit a building in Busan called Signal, because it reportedly offers excellent panoramic views of the city. I plan to go near sunset, enjoy the skyline from the observation deck, and have coffee at the café inside.

Suggestion: 과거 경험을 말할 때 시제 일관성을 유지하고 불필요한 반복을 제거하세요. 이유를 간결히 제시하고 감정 표현이나 결과를 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

Example: No, I don't. When I was a child I lived on the 17th floor, and the elevator often broke down, so I had to use the stairs frequently. That was inconvenient and tiring, so I prefer lower floors now.

× Actually, I I live in the city so there are many tall buildings nearby.

✓ Actually, I live in the city, so there are many tall buildings nearby.

Duplicate word 'I' is a repetition error and missing comma before 'so' creates a run-on sentence. Remove the extra 'I' and add a comma to join independent clauses correctly.

× Uh, For example, the uh, the a large apartment buildings with 17 floors is right next to my house I feel like.

✓ For example, a large apartment building with 17 floors is right next to my house, I feel.

Incorrect articles and plural/singular mismatch: 'the a' is wrong and 'buildings' should be singular to match 'a'. Also verb agreement: 'is' matches singular 'building'. Added comma and smoothed phrase 'I feel'.

× Sometimes when I when I go back to home, it is 6:00 PM uh, it, it is sunset time, so I some usually take a photo of uh, high rise apartment with sunset.

✓ Sometimes when I go back home at 6:00 PM, it is sunset, so I usually take a photo of a high-rise apartment with the sunset.

Repetition 'when I when I' and incorrect preposition 'to home' should be 'home'. Word order and extra words: 'some usually' is incorrect. Need article 'a' before 'high-rise apartment' and hyphenate 'high-rise'. Added 'the' before 'sunset' for clarity and corrected placement of time phrase.

× As far as I know, the largest building is in Busan named Signal.

✓ As far as I know, the largest building in Busan is called Signal.

Use 'called' (past participle/adjectival use) or 'is called' to state a name: 'is in Busan named' is awkward. 'Is called Signal' is the natural phrasing.

× I want to visit it because I heard it has great panoramic views of the city and also has Starbucks in the building.

✓ I want to visit it because I heard it has great panoramic views of the city and also a Starbucks in the building.

Not a major grammatical error, but parallelism and article use: 'has Starbucks' should be 'has a Starbucks' to refer to one cafe. Keeping parallel noun phrases improves clarity.

× So I'd like to see the skyline and take some coffee.

✓ So I'd like to see the skyline and have some coffee.

Verb choice: 'take some coffee' is non-native. Use 'have some coffee' or 'grab some coffee'.

× The when I was a child I live in on live on the 17th floor of the apartment building and the elevator often broke down.

✓ When I was a child, I lived on the 17th floor of the apartment building and the elevator often broke down.

Tense and person agreement: 'I live' should be past 'I lived' to match 'When I was a child'. Remove extra 'The' and duplicate 'live on'.

× Because of that I was required to use the stairs many time, which was inconvenient and sometimes quite tiring.

✓ Because of that, I had to use the stairs many times, which was inconvenient and sometimes quite tiring.

'Was required to' is formal but acceptable; 'had to' is more natural. 'Many time' is incorrect; use plural 'many times'. Added comma after introductory phrase.