Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, um). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words for coherence (for example, 'also' or 'in addition'). Mention specific locations or examples to make the answer more vivid.

Example: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there are two large shopping malls and several residential towers of around 15 to 20 floors. In addition, these buildings contain many apartments and shops, so the area feels quite urban.

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., 'architects are designing'). Give one clear reason and one specific example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect ideas. Avoid long, disjointed sentences.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially at sunset because the light makes them look dramatic. For example, I recently photographed a newly designed office block with curved glass that reflects the sky, which I found very striking.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, correct factual phrasing (CN Tower is in Canada and is a tall tower rather than the tallest building in Canada), and add a reason and a brief plan. Avoid filler words and aim for one or two supporting details connected by linking words.

Example: Yes, I'd like to visit the CN Tower in Toronto because it offers panoramic views of the city. Although the entrance fee is expensive, I'm planning to go next summer when I can save enough money.

Suggestion: Be specific and avoid unclear phrases ('once in a life', 'top of the world'). Provide one clear reason and one concrete detail about what appeals to you (view, amenities, convenience). Use linking words like 'also' and finish the sentence fully.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a high-rise apartment at least once because I enjoy having a wide view over the city. Also, tall buildings often have useful amenities such as gyms and rooftop terraces, which I would like to try.

× Yes, there are multiple tall buildings where I'm currently living uh, there are uh, malls, shopping malls, they are quite tall.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near where I'm currently living; there are malls and shopping centers, and they are quite tall.

The original uses 'where I'm currently living' awkwardly and repeats 'malls, shopping malls'. Use 'several' for count and 'shopping centers' for clarity; 'near where I'm currently living' is the correct phrasing to indicate location.

× Other than that, uh, the very big buildings, they have almost uh 15 to 20 floors and they contain the apartments.

✓ Other than that, the very big buildings have almost 15 to 20 floors and contain apartments.

Remove the unnecessary pronoun 'they' after a noun phrase to avoid redundancy; use 'almost 15 to 20 floors' is acceptable but better 'have about 15 to 20 floors'. Also drop the definite article before 'apartments' when speaking generally.

× Yes, uh, usually when it's the time to sunset, I love to take the photos of tall buildings and, uh, the view is always really good and attractive.

✓ Yes, usually at sunset I love to take photos of tall buildings because the view is always very good and attractive.

Use 'at sunset' instead of 'when it's the time to sunset'. Omit 'the' before 'photos' when speaking generally. Use 'very' instead of 'really' for formality; restructuring improves flow.

× And nowadays architectural are designing, uh, some fascinating and attractive designs of the buildings, which makes them, which makes me to take the photos of building.

✓ Nowadays architects are designing some fascinating and attractive building designs, which makes me want to take photos of buildings.

'Architectural' is an adjective; the correct noun is 'architects'. Use 'want to take photos' rather than 'makes me to take'. Make 'buildings' plural and remove redundant phrases for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to visit CN Tower. It is very tall and it's the number one tallest building in the Canada and it uh, that entrance ticket is quite expensive.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the CN Tower. It is very tall and is the tallest building in Canada, and the entrance ticket is quite expensive.

Use the definite article 'the' before 'CN Tower'. Do not use 'the' before country names like 'Canada'. 'Number one tallest' is redundant; use 'the tallest'. Remove extra words for fluency.

× So I'm planning to uh, visit it soon.

✓ So I'm planning to visit it soon.

Remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary comma; the gerund structure is fine but keep concise.

× Yes, I would like to live in a very tall building once in a life because I want to enjoy and I want to see how it looks like from the top of uh, when you are at the top of the world.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a very tall building once in my life because I want to enjoy it and see how it looks from the top, as if you are on top of the world.

Use 'once in my life' not 'once in a life'. 'Enjoy it' clarifies the object. Use 'see how it looks' not 'see how it looks like'. 'On top of the world' is the correct idiom.

× And other than that, I want to live in the building which have apartments on the.

✓ Also, I want to live in a building that has apartments in it.

Use 'that' or 'which' appropriately and ensure subject-verb agreement: 'building' (singular) requires 'has' not 'have'. 'On the' is incomplete; use 'in it' to indicate location inside the building.