Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct minor grammatical issues. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers like “umm,” and combine related ideas into one or two sentences. Add a specific example or detail (e.g., how many storeys or a nearby landmark) to enrich the answer.

Example: Yes — in fact I live in a tall apartment building in Thane, a city near Mumbai. High-rise buildings are common there; for example, the skyscraper opposite my building has over 30 storeys and houses offices and shops.

Suggestion: Good enthusiasm and a clear topic sentence. Improve grammar (use “architecture” not “architect”) and add a supporting detail using a linking word to explain why or give an example of a favourite building you photographed.

Example: Yes, I love photographing buildings, especially those with unique architecture. For example, last month I photographed an Art Deco theatre nearby because its facade and ornate details were very striking.

Suggestion: Combine and correct the sentence for clarity (say “the Burj Khalifa in Dubai”). Add a reason and a linking word to make it more specific (e.g., about its height, views, or design).

Example: Yes — I would love to visit the Burj Khalifa in Dubai because, as the tallest building in the world, it offers incredible panoramic views and impressive engineering that I’d like to see in person.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence and briefly expand with a reason. Avoid referring to having already answered; instead, state whether you’re satisfied living there and give one or two specific advantages or disadvantages.

Example: Yes, I already live in a tall building, and I like it because it offers good views and security. However, sometimes I find elevators crowded during peak hours, which can be inconvenient.

× I absolutely love taking pictures of buildings, particularly of those which have a unique architect or design to it.

✓ I absolutely love taking pictures of buildings, particularly those that have a unique architecture or design.

The original uses 'architect' (a noun for a person) instead of 'architecture' (the correct noun for building style) and ends with the redundant phrase 'to it.' Also, 'which' is acceptable but 'that' is more natural in restrictive clauses. Suggestion: use 'architecture' and remove 'to it' to make the sentence concise and correct.

× Yes, there is one. It is Burj Khalifa and Dubai, which has been on my travel list for a very long time.

✓ Yes, there is one. It is the Burj Khalifa in Dubai, which has been on my travel list for a very long time.

Use the definite article 'the' before famous buildings like 'Burj Khalifa' and the preposition 'in' to indicate location ('in Dubai'). The original used 'and' incorrectly, which created a sentence fragment. Suggestion: replace 'and' with 'in' and add 'the' before the building name.

× I think I have already answered this question because I already live in one so that has been checked off my list.

✓ I think I've already answered this question because I already live in one, so that's been checked off my list.

The original is wordy and slightly awkward. Use the contraction 'I've' for natural speech and 'that's' to refer back to the fact; add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. The phrase 'so that has been' is clumsy; 'so that's been' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify and use common spoken contractions for fluency.