Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 연결어 사용이 부족합니다. 지명이나 건물 종류를 더 정확하게 말하고, 중복 표현(예: 'so' 반복)은 피하세요. 주제 문장으로 바로 답한 뒤, 예시와 위치 설명을 덧붙이고, 문장 구조를 간결하게 만드세요.

Example: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. I live close to Haeundae Beach in Busan, which is a major district with high-rise hotels and luxury apartment complexes. For example, several signature hotels and new apartment towers line the shoreline, making the area feel very urban.

Suggestion: 문법 실수가 많고 응답이 반복적입니다. 조건문을 간결하게 만들고, 이유를 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 대조(하지만)를 분명히 하고, 단어 선택을 정확히 하세요 ('building','landmark').

Example: I usually take photos of famous buildings when I travel abroad. If a building is a well-known landmark, I'll photograph it with my friends as a memory. However, in my hometown Busan, I rarely take photos of buildings because I'm used to them and they don't feel special to me.

Suggestion: 답변이 중복되고 어색한 단어 사용이 있습니다. 방문 이유를 더 구체적으로 말하고, 건물의 특징을 논리적으로 정리하세요. 불필요한 'uh'를 줄이고 한두 문장으로 명확히 표현하세요.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit a building in Yongdu that houses a large café and an art gallery. It also has a spacious garden and is famous for its excellent coffee, so I think it would be a relaxing place to spend an afternoon.

Suggestion: 시제와 문법 사용이 불안정합니다. 과거 욕구와 현재 선호를 명확히 구분해 말하세요. 구체적인 이유(예: 정원, 개인 공간)를 덧붙이면 설득력이 높아집니다. 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요.

Example: When I was younger, I wanted to live in a high-rise luxury apartment in Busan. However, now I prefer a detached house with a large garden because I enjoy outdoor space and more privacy.

× My home is near the Hyundai beach and the Hyundai is the big town in Busan so there are so many tall buildings such as signal hotels and other premium apartment.

✓ My home is near Hyundai Beach and Hyundai is a big town in Busan, so there are many tall buildings such as signal hotels and other premium apartments.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used with proper names and common nouns here. 'Hyundai Beach' is a proper noun and should not take 'the'. Use 'a' before 'big town' because it is a nonspecific singular countable noun. 'So many' is fine, but 'other premium apartment' needs plural 'apartments' to match 'many'. Make sure proper nouns are capitalized and articles match noun count.

× So they're tall buildings near my home.

✓ So there are tall buildings near my home.

The contraction 'they're' (they are) replaces a previously mentioned plural noun, but here the existential construction 'there are' is required to state existence. Using 'they're' is incorrect and changes meaning. Use 'there are' for 'there is/there are' sentences.

× If I go to other countries and then if the buildings, uh, is the landmark in country, then I will take a photo with my friends.

✓ If I go to other countries and the building is a landmark in that country, then I will take a photo with my friends.

The sentence had unnecessary 'then' and incorrect subject-verb agreement 'buildings... is'. Also 'in country' is missing 'that' or 'the' and 'a landmark' needs the indefinite article. Use singular 'building' with 'is' or plural 'buildings are'. Keep conditional structure concise.

× But in my hometown or in my, in the Busan, no, I don't like, I don't prefer the take a photo in the build.

✓ But in my hometown, in Busan, no, I don't like taking photos of buildings.

Multiple issues: unnecessary 'my' before 'Busan' and incorrect article 'the Busan'. 'I don't prefer the take a photo in the build' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'taking photos' for preference and 'of buildings' as the correct preposition. Simplify to 'I don't like taking photos of buildings.'

× Uh, I would like to visit. The building is in the Yongdu, uh, there is a big cafe and the, uh, the gallery with gallery and so there's big, uh, garden and then delicious coffee.

✓ I would like to visit a building in Yongdu; there is a big cafe, a gallery, a large garden, and delicious coffee.

Use 'a' for 'a building' because it is nonspecific. 'The building is in the Yongdu' incorrectly uses 'the' and 'the Yongdu' is unnecessary. 'Gallery with gallery' is repetitive; use 'a gallery'. Use 'a large garden' for correct article and adjective order. Simplify and remove filler words for clarity.

× So I'd like to visit.

✓ So I'd like to visit it.

While 'So I'd like to visit.' is understandable, adding the object 'it' clarifies the target ('the building'). Use 'visit it' to complete the verb's object and improve coherence.

× When I was a young uh, I want to live in tall building, like a luxury apartment like Signals or, uh, in Busan I park.

✓ When I was young, I wanted to live in a tall building, like a luxury apartment such as Signals or, in Busan, Ipark.

Time reference 'When I was young' requires past tense 'wanted' not 'want'. 'A tall building' needs the article 'a'. 'Signals' and 'Ipark' are proper nouns (assumed) and should be capitalized; 'such as' is preferable to 'like' for examples. Ensure tense consistency with past time expressions.

× But now I want to live in uh, house with the big garden, Yes and big just house.

✓ But now I want to live in a house with a big garden, yes, just a big house.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'house' and 'a big garden'. Word order 'just a big house' is more natural than 'big just house'. Keep consistent present tense 'want'. Include punctuation to separate clauses for clarity.