Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cümlenizi daha akıcı ve doğru hale getirmek için gramer düzeltmeleri ve daha kısa, net bir yapı kullanın. "I am" hatası ve "in my near" gibi yanlış ifadeler düzeltilmeli. Ayrıca soruya doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, sonra gerekirse bir ayırma cümlesiyle detay verin. Örnek olarak: "No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village, so most houses are low-rise and compact."

Example: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. I live in a small village, so most houses are low-rise and compact.

Suggestion: İfade tarzınızı doğal hale getirmek için basit ve doğru zaman kullanın; ayrıca tekil/çoğul uyumuna dikkat edin ("the building" yerine "buildings"). Destekleyici bir neden veriyorsanız bağlaçlarla akışı sağlayın. Örnek yapıyı kısa tutun: konu cümlesi + bir neden + bir örnek.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing buildings because many of them have beautiful and striking designs. For example, I like capturing old churches and modern glass facades in different lighting.

Suggestion: Cümlenizi daha mantıklı bölün ve gereksiz tekrarlardan kaçının. "player and check who" gibi anlamsız parçalar yerine net sebepler verin. Bağlaç kullanarak ilgili nedeni ve bir detay ekleyin. Örnek: konu cümlesi -> neden (TV şovu bağlantısı) -> bir görsel/duygu detayı.

Example: I would like to visit the Empire State Building because it's an iconic landmark. I also enjoy seeing places featured in TV shows like Gossip Girl, so visiting would be exciting and give me a chance to admire the views and architecture.

Suggestion: Daha doğal bir anlatım için birkaç küçük düzeltme yapın: "teams" yerine muhtemelen "cafes" veya "gyms" gibi doğru kelimeyi kullanın ve avantajları net maddelerle belirtin. Konu cümlesi sonrası bağlaçla iki kısa destekleyici detay verin.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because they often offer better security and convenient facilities. For instance, many high-rises have gyms, shops, and reception services that make daily life easier.

× No, because I am. I live in village which is small city and generally there are very tiny buildings in my near.

✓ No, because I don't. I live in a village, which is a small town, and generally there are only small buildings near me.

The original contains several sentence structure and article errors: 'No, because I am.' is incomplete and should be 'No, because I don't.' to answer negatively. 'I live in village' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'which is small city' requires an article and better word choice 'a small town'. 'very tiny buildings in my near' is ungrammatical; correct phrasing is 'only small buildings near me'. Suggestion: use complete clauses, include appropriate articles, and use natural collocations like 'near me'.

× Yes, I am keen on photographing the building because some buildings is can be very beautiful and magnificent for landscape.

✓ Yes, I'm keen on photographing buildings because some buildings can be very beautiful and magnificent in a landscape.

Errors include verb form and auxiliary/modal misuse: 'some buildings is can be' uses both incorrect subject-verb agreement and an extra modal. Use either 'can be' with plural subject: 'some buildings can be'. 'the building' is too specific; 'buildings' fits the general statement. 'for landscape' is better as 'in a landscape'. Suggestion: keep subject-verb agreement, avoid redundant auxiliaries, and choose correct prepositions.

× I would like to visit the Empire State Building. I am a big fan of the TV show Gossip Girls and I love the characters player and check who are often shown there so I'd like to see the iconic architecture and.

✓ I would like to visit the Empire State Building. I am a big fan of the TV show Gossip Girl and I love the characters and the actors who are often shown there, so I'd like to see the iconic architecture.

Multiple issues: the show's title is 'Gossip Girl' (not 'Gossip Girls'). 'characters player and check who' is confused; likely meant 'characters and the actors who'. The clause ended with 'and.' incomplete; finish with 'architecture.' Also 'actors' or 'cast' fits. Suggestion: use correct proper names, parallel structure 'characters and actors', and ensure sentences are complete.

× Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because these buildings have many advantages such as better security and convenience facilities like teams and shops.

✓ Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because such buildings have many advantages, such as better security and convenient facilities like gyms and shops.

'these buildings' is acceptable but 'such buildings' is more natural when referring generally. 'convenience facilities' is unidiomatic; use 'convenient facilities'. 'teams' is incorrect in this context; likely 'gyms' or 'cafes' — 'gyms' fits typical amenities. Suggestion: choose correct nouns for facilities and use appropriate adjectives (convenient) and articles.