Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words, and add one specific detail. Use a linking phrase to explain why people visit. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes. I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so there are many modern tall buildings near my apartment. For example, Landmark 81 is very high and visitors come for the views and restaurants at the top.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and grammar: state frequency clearly, avoid vague phrases like "see them in optimistic," and give a specific example with correct name. Use a linking word to show reason.

Example: Yes, I sometimes take photos of buildings when I travel around the city. For example, I have several pictures of Landmark 81 because its design and lighting look beautiful at night.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and specific reasons. Replace vague phrases ("catch my eyes", "have a dream in that") with precise reasons and link them coherently.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Landmark 81 because it is very tall and has an unusual shape that interests me. Also, I heard there are observation decks and cafes, so I would like to enjoy the view and try the restaurants there.

Suggestion: Be direct and avoid repetition: state your preference, give 1–2 concrete reasons (comfort, view, facilities), and finish with a concluding sentence. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because it feels modern and luxurious, and you usually get great city views. If I had the chance, I would choose a high-floor apartment with good amenities like a gym and security.

× Yes, they are, because I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so there are many, uh, tall buildings and landmark near my, uh, my apartment and umm, it's really high and tall and it's modern.

✓ Yes, there are, because I live in Ho Chi Minh City, so there are many tall buildings and landmarks near my apartment. They are very tall and modern.

Original uses 'they are' awkwardly and mixes singular/plural: 'landmark' should be plural 'landmarks' to match 'many'. Also sentence fragments and repetition were fixed. Suggestion: ensure nouns that follow 'many' are plural and keep subject-reference clear (use 'they' to refer clearly to plural noun).

× Many people like, uh, visiting these buildings because.

✓ Many people like visiting these buildings because they are interesting and architecturally impressive.

The original ends with an incomplete clause 'because.' This is a sentence structure error and missing adverbial or clause explaining why. Suggestion: complete the clause after 'because' and avoid filler words like 'uh' for clarity.

× Umm, yes, I do, but it just sometime because, uh, I always see them in optimistic.

✓ Yes, I do, but only sometimes, because I always see them optimistically.

Errors: 'just sometime' should be 'only sometimes' (quantifier and adverb form), and 'in optimistic' is incorrect; use adverb 'optimistically'. Suggestion: use correct adverb forms and place frequency adverbs ('sometimes') appropriately.

× Umm, and I have it's for example, I have a photograph of a landmark 81 electricity.

✓ For example, I have a photograph of Landmark 81 at night showing the lights.

Original 'I have it's' is incorrect pronoun/possessive usage; remove contraction. 'landmark 81 electricity' is ungrammatical — likely meant 'Landmark 81' and commentary about electricity or lights. Suggestion: use proper names capitalized and concise noun phrases (e.g., 'a photograph of Landmark 81').

× It's really a beautiful.

✓ It's really beautiful.

Extra article 'a' before adjective 'beautiful' is incorrect because 'beautiful' is an adjective that doesn't require 'a' unless followed by a noun. Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles before adjectives or use a noun (e.g., 'a beautiful building').

× Yes, I I really want to visit L81 because it's really tall and umm the, the building shape is really catch my eyes and I think there are many activities in there and I have a dream in that.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit Landmark 81 because it's very tall and the building's shape really catches my eye. I think there are many activities inside, and I have a dream of visiting it.

Errors: 'catch my eyes' should be 'catches my eye' (third person singular verb and singular idiom). 'I have a dream in that' is ungrammatical; use 'I have a dream of visiting it.' Also remove repeated words and use possessive 'building's'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct idiomatic expressions ('catch my eye').

× Yes, definitely it's like my dream because I I watch many films and I think living in tall building is really luxury and umm and rich.

✓ Yes, definitely. It's like my dream because I watch many films, and I think living in a tall building is really luxurious and makes you feel wealthy.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'tall building'. 'is really luxury and...rich' uses noun 'luxury' where adjective 'luxurious' is needed; 'rich' describes people, not living. Suggestion: use correct articles and adjective forms; revise sentence to be natural ('living in a tall building is luxurious').

× Uh, so maybe it's a dream, but if I have a chance, I really want to live in a an apartment or just or in a tall building to.

✓ So maybe it's a dream, but if I have the chance, I would really like to live in an apartment or in a tall building.

Errors: duplicate article 'a an' and awkward ending 'to.' Use 'the chance' (idiomatic) or 'a chance'; prefer conditional 'would like' for hypotheticals. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use correct conditional phrasing, and finish clauses clearly.