Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise, correct grammar, and add a brief specific detail or example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. My hometown was developed as a new town, so most residences are high-rise apartment blocks and the nearby commercial district has several skyscrapers.

Suggestion: Clarify tense and reason, remove unclear phrase “when I was in trouble,” and give one specific example. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel. For example, in Europe I photographed medieval cathedrals because they are unique and historical, while in Japan I captured modern temples and minimalistic architecture because I found them very beautiful.

Suggestion: Use correct names and grammar, avoid fillers, and give one or two specific reasons why you want to visit. Mention when it was built correctly and describe a feature that attracted you.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit Azabudai Hills in Tokyo. It was completed last year, and when I saw videos on YouTube I was impressed by its modern design and rooftop gardens, so I want to see those features in person.

Suggestion: Be clear and grammatical: state your preference directly, give a concise reason, and provide a specific future plan. Remove repetitions and filler words.

Example: No, I would prefer not to live in a tall building. Currently I live in high-rise apartments and I find them noisy and crowded, so in the future I hope to move to a low-rise neighborhood with a small house and a garden.

× Yes, there are lots of tall buildings near my house because my hometown is the first new town of Korea, so the houses are all apartments and large commercial area has lots of tall buildings.

✓ Yes, there are lots of tall buildings near my house because my hometown is the first new town in Korea, so the houses are all apartments and the large commercial area has lots of tall buildings.

Use the correct preposition 'in Korea' rather than 'of Korea' when referring to location, and add the definite article 'the' before 'large commercial area' to specify that particular area. This clarifies meaning and follows English article and preposition use.

× Yes, I took a photo of buildings when I was in trouble, especially in Europe and Japan, because Europe's buildings are very unique and historical and buildings of Japan is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I took photos of buildings when I traveled, especially in Europe and Japan, because European buildings are very unique and historical and Japanese buildings are very beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'a photo of buildings' suggests one photo but plural 'buildings' better with 'photos' or rephrase; 'when I was in trouble' is illogical here so change to 'when I traveled'; 'Europe's buildings' is awkward—use adjective 'European'; 'buildings of Japan is' has subject-verb agreement error: plural 'buildings' requires 'are' and use adjective 'Japanese'. These changes fix agreement and improve naturalness.

× Yes, I want to go Ajabudai Hills in Tokyo. Uh, it is built in last year, so the type of building is very recent and when I see this in YouTube, it is very beautiful.

✓ Yes, I want to go to Azabudai Hills in Tokyo. It was built last year, so it is a very recent development, and when I saw it on YouTube it looked very beautiful.

Several tense and preposition issues: use 'go to' before a place; correct spelling 'Azabudai Hills'; use past tense 'was built last year' because construction happened in the past; 'the type of building is very recent' is awkward—'very recent development' is clearer; 'when I see this in YouTube' should be past 'saw it on YouTube' and use preposition 'on YouTube'. These changes correct tense and preposition usage.

× Actually no, this is because I Li I am living in two apartments now, but I think it is not that good. So someday I want to move to a place with lower lower lower houses which can be made me.

✓ Actually no. This is because I am currently living in two apartments, but I think it is not that good. Someday I want to move to a place with low-rise houses that suits me.

Fix redundancy and tense: remove repeated filler 'Li I' and use 'am currently living' for present continuous. 'Lower lower lower houses' should be 'low-rise houses' or 'lower houses'; 'which can be made me' is incorrect—use 'that suits me' or 'that will suit me'. These corrections fix sentence structure, word choice, and make the meaning clear.