Building— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use precise vocabulary. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., ‘convenient’ and ‘so close’ together are redundant). Use a linking word if you add another point.

Example: Yes. There is a tall mixed-use building near my house that houses shops such as a pharmacy and several convenience stores. Because it is within a two-minute walk, it makes daily errands very easy.

Suggestion: Good clear response with reasons. Improve natural phrasing and vocabulary: say ‘architecture’ (uncountable) and use a linking word like ‘instead’. Keep it to two sentences maximum and give a brief specific example of what you photograph.

Example: No, I don't usually photograph architecture. Instead, I prefer taking pictures of flowers and the sky—for example, I often photograph cherry blossoms in spring because they make me feel inspired and relaxed.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct grammar and be specific. Start with a direct topic sentence naming the building, then give one or two precise reasons. Avoid filler and incomplete phrases. Use linking words such as ‘because’ or ‘since’.

Example: Yes. I would like to visit Changdeokgung Palace in Jongno, Seoul because it is an important example of traditional Korean architecture and has well-preserved royal gardens. I am especially interested in seeing the back garden, which I have read is famous for its harmony with nature.

Suggestion: Be direct and avoid hesitations and unclear terms. Use a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give one specific reason and, if helpful, a brief example. Correct vocabulary: use ‘low-rise building’ (not ‘known rise’). Remove fillers like ‘umm’.

Example: No, I wouldn't want to live in a tall building. I prefer a low-rise building because they feel safer and quieter—for example, elevators are less crowded and it's easier to evacuate in an emergency.

× Yes, there is a tall building near my house that includes many amenities like drug stores and convenience stores.

✓ Yes, there are tall buildings near my house that include many amenities like drugstores and convenience stores.

Original sentence uses 'there is' with plural noun phrase 'tall building' followed by plural 'many amenities'; context later implies multiple buildings/amenities. Use 'there are' for plural subjects (subject-verb agreement). Also match noun plural: 'drugstores' and 'convenience stores' (or 'drugstores and convenience stores'). Suggestion: decide singular or plural and make verb and nouns agree: 'There is a tall building' or 'There are tall buildings'.

× It's very convenient because it's so close to my home.

✓ It's very convenient because it's so close to my home.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no article or grammar change is needed. Included here to confirm no change required.

× No, I don't really like taking photos of architectures.

✓ No, I don't really like taking photos of architecture.

'Architecture' is an uncountable noun when referring to the field or style, not 'architectures'. Using the singular uncountable form is correct. Suggestion: use 'architecture' or specify 'architectural buildings' if you mean types of buildings.

× Rather, I really enjoy photographing the flowers and the sky because nature sometimes makes me feel inspired and relaxed.

✓ Rather, I really enjoy photographing flowers and the sky because nature sometimes makes me feel inspired and relaxed.

Sentence is correct but article 'the' before 'flowers' is unnecessary unless referring to specific flowers. Use 'photographing flowers' for general preference. The -ing form 'photographing' is correctly used after 'enjoy'.

× Yes, it is. There is a palace called the Changyongung in Jongno, Seoul I would like to visit because I've heard that the palace is so important for a Korean traditional architecture and they are and.

✓ Yes. There is a palace called Changdeokgung in Jongno, Seoul that I would like to visit because I've heard that the palace is very important for Korean traditional architecture.

Multiple problems: unnecessary 'it is' after 'Yes' and run-on sentence. 'Changyongung' seems to be a mistaken name; likely 'Changdeokgung' (correct proper noun). Use 'that I would like' to connect clause. 'Important for Korean traditional architecture' treats 'architecture' as uncountable; drop 'a'. Remove 'and they are and' which is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use clear relative clause and uncountable 'architecture'.

× That's a good great question, but I think I wouldn't because I prefer known rise building rather than tall buildings because umm I think there are safer and easier to live in.

✓ That's a great question, but I don't think I would because I prefer low-rise buildings to tall buildings, as I think they are safer and easier to live in.

Problems fixed: 'good great' is redundant—choose one adjective. Modal and conditional: 'I wouldn't' without context is incomplete; use 'I don't think I would' or 'I wouldn't want to' for intention. 'known rise building' is incorrect word order and wording; correct term is 'low-rise buildings'. Use plural agreement 'buildings' and comparison 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X rather than Y'. 'There are safer' incorrect; use 'they are safer'. Suggestion: reorder sentence for clarity and correct comparative structures.