Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organize the answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation words (e.g., “uh”) and repetition. Use linking words to make it coherent (e.g., “because,” “for example,” “so”). Also correct minor grammar (e.g., tense and article use) and replace vague phrases like “see around the things” with specific descriptions.

Example: I usually sit by the window when I travel because I enjoy watching the scenery. For example, on long bus trips I like to observe changing landscapes such as fields and villages, which helps me relax.

Suggestion: Answer directly in present tense and avoid repetitive phrases. Explain briefly why you take photos and give one specific example. Correct grammar (use present simple: “I often take photos”) and use clearer vocabulary (e.g., “capture moments” instead of “pictures clicking”).

Example: Yes, I often take photos from the car window because I want to capture interesting scenes. For example, I like to photograph sunrises over the fields or colourful street scenes when we drive through small towns.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “so,” “for instance”). Fix grammar (e.g., “it gives me peace of mind”) and reduce redundancy like repeating “mountain scenes” and “landscape.”

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy peaceful natural landscapes and forest trails. For instance, hiking in the mountains helps me unwind and I like the fresh air and quiet environment.

× To be very honest, uh, I love to sit on the window side of the bus or car or train when I am traveling as I'm very fond of looking out looking the view outside the window and it gave me a comfort to see around the things.

✓ To be very honest, I love to sit on the window side of the bus, car, or train when I am traveling as I'm very fond of looking out at the view outside the window and it gives me comfort to look around.

Errors: incorrect verb+ -ing repetition and missing preposition 'at'; incorrect tense consistency ('gave' should be present 'gives') and awkward phrasing 'see around the things'. Suggestions: Remove filler words like 'uh', avoid repeating 'looking', use the preposition 'at' after 'look out', keep tense consistent with 'when I am traveling' by using present simple or present continuous for habitual actions (use 'gives'), and replace 'see around the things' with 'look around' to be natural.

× I definitely took photos of scenery outside the car window as I want to capture all the movement, all the good sceneries, all the good photos that I see as it gave me comfort.

✓ I definitely take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I want to capture all the movement and the nice scenes I see, as it gives me comfort.

Errors: inconsistent tense usage ('took' past vs 'want' present vs 'see' present vs 'gave' past). Use consistent present tense for habitual action: 'take', 'want', 'see', 'gives'. Also plural/word choice: use 'scenery' (uncountable) or 'scenes' instead of 'sceneries', and avoid 'good photos that I see' — use 'the nice scenes I see'.

× It give me the pictures clicking outside scenery.

✓ It gives me pictures of the scenery outside when I take photos.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('give' -> 'gives'), missing articles and preposition ('the pictures' and 'of the scenery'), and awkward noun phrase 'pictures clicking outside scenery'. Suggestions: Use 'gives', include 'of' before 'the scenery', and rephrase to 'when I take photos' or 'when I photograph the scenery'.

× In my opinion, I prefer the mountains as I would love the mountain scenes, the landscape, the forest view and it gave me a piece of mind.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer the mountains because I love mountain scenes, the landscape, and forest views, and they give me peace of mind.

Errors: tense inconsistency ('prefer' present vs 'would love' conditional vs 'gave' past). Use present tense for preferences: 'love' and 'give'. Article use: 'the mountain scenes' -> 'mountain scenes' or 'the mountains' both ok; 'a piece of mind' is incorrect idiom — correct is 'peace of mind'. Also plural agreement: 'they give' referring to scenes/views. Suggestions: Keep tense consistent, fix idiom to 'peace of mind', and ensure subject-verb agreement.