Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Speak more directly and concisely: begin with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitation words (uh), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct small preposition and article errors (e.g., "in a bus or car" -> "in a bus or a car" or simply "by bus or car").

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car. For example, I like to listen to music while watching passing buildings and landscapes, because it helps me remember where I am and relax.

Suggestion: Avoid tense inconsistency and filler words. Start with a clear present-tense statement, use a linking phrase (for example, when...) and give a brief specific example. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes, I sometimes take photos or short videos of the scenery outside the window. For example, when the sky is dramatic at sunset or the roadside scenes are particularly striking, I capture them to remember the trip.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence expressing difficulty choosing, then compare with specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "in summer"/"in winter"). Reduce hesitations and fix grammar ("I prefer the sea in summer"; "I prefer the mountains in winter"). Limit to three short sentences.

Example: I find it hard to choose because both are beautiful. However, in summer I prefer the sea since I enjoy swimming and sunbathing; in winter I prefer the mountains because I like hiking and the cool air.

× Yes, mostly I look outside of the window whenever I am travelling in bus or car, uh, when I'm listening to music and enjoying the road view, uh, and knowing the exact address where I am at now.

✓ Yes, mostly I look out of the window whenever I am travelling by bus or car, when I'm listening to music and enjoying the road view, and noting the exact address where I am.

Use of prepositions: use 'out of' or simply 'out' with 'window' and 'by bus/car' is correct for transport. 'In bus or car' is incorrect; say 'by bus or car'. 'Knowing the exact address where I am at now' is awkward and uses wrong verb; 'noting' or 'checking the address' fits the context. Also remove filler 'uh' and redundant 'at now'. Suggestions: use 'look out (of) the window' or 'look out the window', 'travelling by bus/car', and use 'noting' or 'checking' instead of 'knowing... at now'.

× Yes, uh, sometimes when the sky looks, uh, beautiful or the, uh, roadside or the outside scenery is looking mesmerizing, that's when I took some photos or videos to keep it as a memory.

✓ Yes, sometimes when the sky looks beautiful or the roadside scenery is mesmerizing, I take photos or videos to keep as a memory.

Tense inconsistency: the sentence mixes present ('looks', 'is looking') with past ('took'). Because the question asks about habitual action, use present simple 'I take'. Also simplify 'outside scenery is looking mesmerizing' to 'scenery is mesmerizing'. Remove fillers 'uh' and redundant articles. Suggestion: use present simple for habits and keep verbs consistent.

× I exactly can't make a choice because it's a really tough one.

✓ I really can't make a choice because it's a really tough one.

Pronoun/word choice: 'exactly can't' is unidiomatic. Use 'really can't' or 'exactly' in different construction ('I can't decide exactly'). Suggestion: say 'I really can't make a choice' or 'I can't decide' for clarity.

× Uh, I think both mountains and sea are equally beautiful.

✓ I think both the mountains and the sea are equally beautiful.

Article and sentence structure: when referring to general natural features like mountains and sea, include 'the' before both nouns ('the mountains and the sea'). This improves grammar and clarity. Suggestion: use 'the mountains and the sea' for parallel structure.

× Uh, so especially in summertime, I prefer sea go and so I can roam around the beach and take the sun bath or in an in winter, I prefer going to mountains to.

✓ Especially in summer, I prefer to go to the sea so I can walk along the beach and sunbathe, and in winter I prefer going to the mountains.

Multiple preposition and verb errors: use 'in summer' or 'in the summertime' (not 'in summertime'). 'Prefer sea go' is incorrect — use 'prefer to go to the sea'. 'Roam around the beach' is better as 'walk along the beach'. 'Take the sun bath' should be 'sunbathe'. Remove duplicate 'in' before winter and change 'going to mountains to' to 'going to the mountains'. Suggestion: use 'prefer to + verb' and include 'the' with 'sea' and 'mountains'.