Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện phát âm và ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và chính xác hơn. Cụ thể: (1) Sửa lỗi phát âm/từ vựng (ví dụ "burst/ bursting" → "bus" và "carsickness"). (2) Viết câu chủ đề rõ ràng ngay đầu (ví dụ: "Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or car."). (3) Giảm lặp từ và rút gọn thông tin thừa; dùng liên từ hợp lý như "because" và "so" để liên kết ý. (4) Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn (ví dụ: "I prefer a window seat so I can focus on the view and avoid feeling sick").

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel by bus or by car because I often get carsick. Therefore, I prefer a window seat so I can focus on the horizon and feel less nauseous. I also enjoy watching the changing landscape as it helps me relax.

Suggestion: Cải thiện vốn từ và cấu trúc để diễn đạt rõ ý. Cụ thể: (1) Thay các từ không chính xác (ví dụ "kayo" → "photography" or "a keen photographer"; "recapping" → "recapturing" hoặc "preserving"). (2) Dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng: "Yes/No, I usually take photos…". (3) Giảm lỗi ngữ pháp và trật từ; tránh lặp. (4) Thêm ví dụ cụ thể (ví dụ chụp bình minh, các ngôi nhà, hoặc cánh đồng) để làm phong phú nội dung.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I love preserving travel memories. For example, I usually photograph interesting landscapes like mountains, rivers or traditional houses to share with my family later.

Suggestion: Cải thiện độ trôi chảy, ngữ pháp và tính cụ thể. Cụ thể: (1) Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp: "I prefer the mountains to the sea." (2) Sửa cấu trúc sai ("my favorite mountains to the sea" → "I prefer the mountains to the sea"). (3) Hạn chế tiếng ợ/ừ, dùng liên từ giải thích ("because", "so"). (4) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể: mô tả hoạt động yêu thích (ví dụ: "hiking trails, fresh air, viewpoints") và tên một địa điểm nếu có.

Example: I prefer the mountains to the sea because I can't swim and I enjoy hiking. For instance, I like visiting towns near the mountains where there are many hiking trails and beautiful viewpoints for photography.

× Yes I do, because whenever I travel by burst or car, I face up to the sick car problem.

✓ Yes, I do, because whenever I travel by bus or car, I face the car-sickness problem.

The word 'burst' is a typo for 'bus' and 'sick car problem' is an incorrect noun phrase. Use the singular compound noun 'car-sickness' or 'motion sickness' to describe the condition. Also remove the unnecessary preposition 'up to'. Suggestions: replace 'burst' with 'bus', use 'car-sickness' or 'motion sickness', and write 'face the car-sickness problem'.

× I feel really tired and nervous uh, when I travel by bursting car.

✓ I feel really tired and nervous when I travel by car.

The form 'bursting' is incorrect here; 'burst' is a typo and '-ing' form is unnecessary. Use the simple noun 'car' with the verb 'travel by'. Also remove filler 'uh' in writing. Suggestions: write 'I feel really tired and nervous when I travel by car' or 'when I travel by bus or car'.

× So I often choose the window seat in order to observe the scenery outside.

✓ So I often choose the window seat to observe the scenery outside.

The phrase 'in order to' is correct but wordy; not a strict error. However it fits better to use the simpler infinitive 'to observe'. No prepositional error otherwise. Suggestion: prefer concise 'to observe'.

× I'm a kayo person, really enjoy recapping the memories outside me around me.

✓ I'm a keen person who really enjoys recalling the memories around me.

'kayo' is unclear; likely intended 'keen on' or 'a keen person'. The clause lacks a relative pronoun and correct verb form: use 'who' and third-person singular 'enjoys'. 'Recapping the memories outside me around me' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'recalling the memories around me'. Suggestions: replace 'kayo' with 'keen', add 'who', change 'enjoy' to 'enjoys', and use 'recalling'.

× That's why when I travel by car in bus, that's it a good way for me to record the goods memory during the trip.

✓ That's why when I travel by car or bus, it's a good way for me to record good memories during the trip.

Use 'car or bus' instead of 'car in bus'. 'That's it a good way' is ungrammatical; use 'it's a good way'. 'Goods memory' is incorrect; use plural 'good memories'. Suggestions: use 'car or bus', 'it's', and 'good memories'.

× Uh, my favorite mountains to the sea because I don't know how to swim and I like going hiking.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea because I don't know how to swim and I like hiking.

The original mixes structures. Use 'prefer X to Y' to compare. 'Going hiking' is wordy; use 'hiking'. Remove filler 'Uh'. Suggestions: 'I prefer the mountains to the sea' and 'I like hiking'.

× Umm yes. So that's why whenever I choose any place to travel, I often choose dialect city because there are many beautiful mountain and.

✓ Yes. So whenever I choose a place to travel, I often choose a mountain town because there are many beautiful mountains.

'Dialect city' is unclear; likely 'mountain town' or 'rural town'. 'Any place' is awkward; use 'a place'. 'Many beautiful mountain and' is incomplete and missing plural 'mountains'. Suggestions: replace 'dialect city' with 'a mountain town', use 'a place', and plural 'mountains'.