Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (umm, like) and correct grammar (e.g., "when I travel" not "when I traveling"). Mention a concrete example of what you see and how it makes you feel to add specificity.

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car. I find the changing scenery relaxing because I can see parks, shops and factories passing by, which helps me unwind after a busy day. For example, I like watching tree-lined streets and colorful markets because they make the journey more interesting.

Suggestion: Answer directly and clarify meaning: begin with a clear yes/no and then give a specific reason. Avoid unclear words and incorrect phrases ("attainment", "Thai happy to sell a memory"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" and give one concrete example of a photo you took and why it mattered.

Example: Yes, I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window because it makes me happy and helps me remember special places. For instance, I once photographed a sunset over a river from the highway, and later I looked at that picture to recall the peaceful moment.

Suggestion: Start with a clear preference sentence, then support it with two specific reasons connected by linking words (e.g., "because", "also"). Correct grammar ("I prefer the mountains" not "I refer the Martins") and avoid fillers. Give a short personal example to make the answer more vivid.

Example: I prefer the mountains because they have many trees and the air is fresh and clean. Also, the peaceful environment helps me relax; for example, I enjoy hiking in the hills and listening to birds, which calms me after a busy week.

× Well, I think I say yes because when I look out, umm when I traveling by bus or car, I may feel interesting and make me feel relaxed and this air feel nice and you can see a lot of interesting industry.

✓ Well, I think I would say yes because when I look out, umm when I am traveling by bus or car, I may feel interested and relaxed; the air feels nice and you can see a lot of interesting scenery.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'I say' (awkward for habitual/polite response), missing auxiliary 'am' with present continuous 'traveling', misuse of adjective 'interesting' instead of adjective 'interested' to describe feelings, incorrect phrase 'make me feel relaxed' (awkward repetition), subject-verb agreement 'this air feel' should be 'the air feels', wrong noun 'industry' intended as 'scenery'. Suggestions: use 'would say' for a tentative answer, use present continuous with 'am' for 'when I am traveling', use 'interested' to describe a person's feeling, ensure subject and verb agree ('air feels'), and choose appropriate vocabulary ('scenery').

× Uh, attainment. I say yes because when I take a photos umm, of the scenery outside the car window, umm, I feel happy.

✓ Uh, yes. I would say yes because when I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, I feel happy.

Errors: unnecessary word 'attainment' and singular/plural mismatch 'a photos' should be 'photos' or 'a photo'. Suggestions: remove unrelated word, use plural 'photos' without 'a' or use 'a photo' if singular, and 'would say' is more natural for this context.

× And this is the Thai happy to sell a memory.

✓ And it makes me happy because it helps me save memories.

Errors: incorrect pronoun and structure 'this is the Thai happy to sell a memory' is unintelligible; likely intended meaning is 'it makes me happy' and 'save a memory' => 'save memories'. Suggestions: use clear subject 'it' referring to taking photos, use 'makes me happy', and use 'save memories' or 'preserve memories' for correct collocation.

× So I think I refer the Martins because it mountains how many trees and the air in this in fresh and clean.

✓ So I think I prefer the mountains because there are many trees and the air here is fresh and clean.

Errors: 'refer' used incorrectly instead of 'prefer', wrong proper noun 'Martins' instead of 'mountains', missing existential 'there are' for plural 'many trees', awkward phrase 'the air in this in fresh and clean' should be 'the air here is fresh and clean'. Suggestions: use 'prefer', spell 'mountains' correctly, use 'there are' for existence of plural nouns, and 'the air here is' for location and proper adjective use.

× Umm and in this I feel relaxed, yeah, because it's a very kind quiet.

✓ Umm and I feel relaxed, yeah, because it is very quiet and calm.

Errors: unnecessary 'in this', incorrect phrase 'a very kind quiet'—'kind' misplaced and 'quiet' used as noun. Suggestions: remove 'in this', use adjectives 'quiet' and 'calm' to describe the environment, and say 'it is very quiet and calm'.