Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần cải thiện tính tự nhiên, ngữ pháp và sự mạch lạc. Trả lời nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “by the window”, “by car”) và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ thì, mạo từ). Thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết ngắn gọn giải thích lý do (với liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”) và giữ tối đa 5 câu. Ví dụ các điểm cần sửa: “my own car of my family” → “my family’s car” ; “it makes me feel headache” → “it gives me a headache” ; bỏ các từ rối như “But however that’s the thinner area 1.”

Example: Yes, I usually look out of the window when I travel in my family’s car because I enjoy watching the passing landscape. However, sometimes I close my eyes because long journeys give me a headache, so I try to rest until I feel better.

Suggestion: Cần sửa lỗi thì, từ vựng và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề hiện tại (do câu hỏi dùng hiện tại). Giải thích ngắn gọn và cụ thể lý do tại sao ít chụp, dùng liên từ như “because” hoặc “so”. Sửa các cụm sai: “I took photos” → “I sometimes take photos”; “my mother's habitants” → “my mother’s rule”; “we shouldn't up a lot of photos” → “we shouldn't upload many photos”; “it is can be dangerous” → “it can be dangerous”. Giữ tối đa 5 câu.

Example: I sometimes take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but not often because my mother has a rule about not sharing too many personal photos online. She thinks uploading private pictures can be risky, so I prefer to keep them for myself.

Suggestion: Trả lời khá tốt về nội dung nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp, thì và lựa chọn từ để tự nhiên hơn. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn gọn (“I prefer the sea”) rồi đưa ra 2–3 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ như “firstly/secondly/finally” hợp lý. Sửa các lỗi: “I born in” → “I was born in”; “playing with sands” → “playing in the sand”; “they are so delicious” → “it’s delicious” (seafood is uncountable/plural — better: “because the seafood is delicious”); “I often went to the sea once a year” → “I often go to the sea once a year” hoặc “I usually go once a year”. Giữ dưới 5 câu.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains. Firstly, I was born in Ho Chi Minh City where there are many beautiful beaches, so I grew up near the coast. Secondly, I enjoy swimming and playing in the sand, and finally, the seafood is delicious, so I usually visit the seaside once a year.

× Yes, I usually look out in the window at the scenery when travelling by by car my own car of my family but sometimes I have to close my eyes is because it makes me feel headache. But however that's the thinner area 1.

✓ Yes, I usually look out of the window at the scenery when travelling by car in my family's car, but sometimes I have to close my eyes because it gives me a headache.

Error: incorrect prepositions and awkward word order. Use 'look out of the window' (correct preposition for looking outside), 'travelling by car' (means of transport), and 'in my family's car' (correct noun phrase order). Also change 'it makes me feel headache' to 'it gives me a headache' for natural English. Suggestion: place prepositions directly after verbs ('look out of'), keep vehicle phrases concise ('by car' or 'in my family's car'), and use natural collocations for illnesses ('have/give a headache'). (grammar_problem_type_id:11)

× I took photos of the scenery outside the car window, but not usually because it is my mother's habitants and she taught me that we shouldn't up a lot of photos uh, related to our private life on social media because it is can be dangerous to us.

✓ I take photos of the scenery outside the car window, but not usually because it is my mother's habit and she taught me that we shouldn't upload a lot of photos related to our private life on social media because it can be dangerous.

Errors: tense inconsistency and word choice. 'I took' implies a single past event; context asks about habitual action, so use present simple 'I take'. 'Habitants' is incorrect; use 'habit'. 'Up a lot of photos' should be 'upload a lot of photos'. Remove extra words like 'uh' and fix 'it is can be' to 'it can be'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines, choose correct nouns ('habit') and verbs ('upload'), and avoid filler words. (grammar_problem_type_id:5)

× I prefer the sea to the mountains because first of all, I born in Ho Chi Minh City and there are many beautiful beaches. Secondly, I like swimming and playing with sands on the shore. Finally, I love seafood because they are so delicious and I often went to the sea once a year.

✓ I prefer the sea to the mountains because, first of all, I was born in Ho Chi Minh City and there are many beautiful beaches. Secondly, I like swimming and playing with sand on the shore. Finally, I love seafood because it is so delicious and I often go to the sea once a year.

Errors: incorrect past tense and noun number/agreement. 'I born' requires passive past 'I was born'. 'Playing with sands' should be 'playing with sand' (uncountable). 'They are so delicious' refers to seafood treated as singular collective; better 'it is so delicious' or 'they are so delicious' depending on focus—use 'it is' for 'seafood' as an uncountable general noun. 'I often went' is past; for habitual action use present simple 'I often go'. Suggestion: use correct past passive for birth, treat 'sand' and 'seafood' as uncountable nouns in these contexts, and use present simple for habitual actions. (grammar_problem_type_id:5)