Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix verb/preposition errors (e.g. “watch the scenery” → “look at the scenery”).

Example: Yes, I usually look at the scenery when I travel by bus or car because it relaxes me. For example, seeing trees and fields helps me feel calm, and I often use the time to think or listen to music.

Suggestion: Organise your response: give a direct answer, then one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague claims like “really good” and repetitive phrases. Use linking words (for example, so, because) and correct casual fillers.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of scenery from the window because I enjoy photography. For instance, I have a large gallery of coastal and mountain shots that I review when I’m bored, and I sometimes edit them on my phone.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific sensory details and one brief reason. Watch awkward phrases (e.g. “calms me from inside” → “calms me inside”) and avoid repeating “I love”. Use linking words for coherence.

Example: I prefer the sea to the mountains because it calms me inside. For example, the cool breeze on my face and the salty smell of the water make me feel refreshed, and listening to the waves helps me relax after a busy day.

× Yes, I watch at scenery while I travel by bus and car and bike and any other transportation because I love sceneries and I love how calm they make me feel.

✓ Yes, I look at scenery while I travel by bus, car, bike, or other forms of transportation because I love scenery and I love how calm it makes me feel.

The verb phrase 'watch at' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'look at' (verb + preposition). 'Scenery' is uncountable, so use 'scenery' not 'sceneries'. Also plural list punctuation and 'they make me feel' should agree with uncountable 'scenery' using 'it makes me feel'. Suggestion: use 'look at' for viewing, treat 'scenery' as uncountable and match pronouns accordingly.

× And yes, I definitely love it and.

✓ And yes, I definitely love it.

This fragment ends with an extra conjunction 'and' creating an incomplete sentence. Remove the trailing 'and' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: avoid leaving conjunctions without completing the clause.

× Yes, I love photography and I take really good pictures not only about the scenery, but yes, even pictures of my friends and all.

✓ Yes, I love photography and I take really good pictures not only of the scenery, but also of my friends.

Use the preposition 'of' with 'pictures' ('pictures of something'), not 'about'. 'and all' is informal and unnecessary; replace with 'also' for clarity and formality. Suggestion: use 'pictures of' and remove informal fillers.

× But I have a huge collection of scenery pictures in my gallery and I really love watching them whenever I feel bored and I feel so good that I click good pictures.

✓ But I have a huge collection of scenery pictures in my gallery and I really love looking at them whenever I feel bored, and I feel happy when I take good pictures.

Use 'looking at' rather than 'watching' for photos (verb + -ing correct choice). 'Click good pictures' is informal; 'take good pictures' is standard. 'Feel so good that I click good pictures' is unclear; better to say 'I feel happy when I take good pictures'. Suggestion: use 'look at' for viewing images and 'take pictures' for photographing.

× I personally prefer sea over mountains because sea calms me from inside.

✓ I personally prefer the sea to the mountains because the sea calms me from the inside.

Use articles with singular countable nouns when specific ('the sea', 'the mountains'). Use the comparative preposition 'prefer X to Y'. 'Calms me from inside' needs 'from the inside' or better 'calms me internally'; include 'the' for clarity. Suggestion: say 'prefer the sea to the mountains' and 'calms me from the inside'.

× I love the breeze that flows onto my face to my hair.

✓ I love the breeze that flows onto my face and through my hair.

Prepositions 'onto' and 'to' were misused and parallel structure wrong. Use 'onto my face' and 'through my hair' to describe movement. Suggestion: use parallel prepositions and natural collocations: 'flows onto my face and through my hair'.

× I love everything it is.

✓ I love everything about it.

Original sentence 'I love everything it is' is ungrammatical; use the phrase 'everything about it' to express liking all aspects. Suggestion: use 'everything about it' for clarity.