Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use correct tense and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because, such as). Avoid redundancy and keep to a maximum of five sentences. Also correct common grammar issues: use present simple for habits (I look), use ‘out of the window’ → ‘out the window’, and ensure nouns and verbs agree.

Example: Yes, I usually look out the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy watching the scenery pass by. For example, I like seeing small towns and rows of trees, and watching the sky change lightens the journey for me.

Suggestion: Use natural phrasing and correct article use (a/an/the). Give a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Remove irrelevant questions at the end. Use linking words (for example, so, because, like) to connect ideas and correct tense and plurality (views, landscapes, my family and friends).

Example: Yes, I often take photos out of the car window to capture interesting views and landscapes. For example, last month during a road trip I took many pictures of the mountains so I could share my favorite shots with my family and friends.

Suggestion: Give a direct preference sentence first, then one or two clear reasons with specific details. Use correct vocabulary (snowing → snow, rolling the trees is unclear), and avoid unclear fragments. Use linking words (however, because, when). Keep sentences grammatical and concise.

Example: I prefer the mountains in winter because I enjoy seeing the snow and the peaceful forests. However, I also like the sea in summer when my family goes to the beach for swimming and sunbathing.

× Absolutely, I already took out of the window when I'm traveling by a bus or a car because I love watching the scenery pass by for example, like I enjoy seeing a tree how and a small town and also love your other sky and because they make the journey and more relaxing interesting for me that I enjoy the most.

✓ Absolutely. I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I love watching the scenery pass by. For example, I enjoy seeing trees and small towns, and I also love the sky, because these things make the journey more relaxing and interesting for me.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: run-on sentences, incorrect word order, and unclear phrases ('I already took out of the window', 'seeing a tree how', 'love your other sky'). To fix this, split into shorter sentences, use the correct verb forms ('look' not 'took' or 'took out'), use plural nouns where appropriate ('trees'), and reorder words to form natural phrases ('travel by bus or car', 'make the journey more relaxing and interesting'). Suggestions: break long ideas into separate sentences, choose correct verb tense and form, and use parallel structure for lists of things you enjoy.

× Absolutely yes. I already take a photo of the scenery outside the car window.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window.

The phrase 'I already take' is incorrect for describing habitual action. Use present simple for habits ('I take' or 'I often take') and plural 'photos' for multiple images. 'Often' or 'usually' clarifies frequency. Also use 'photos' instead of singular 'a photo' when speaking generally.

× I like to capture interesting view and the landscape so I can remember the trip that shared the best shot with my family, my friends.

✓ I like to capture interesting views and landscapes so I can remember the trip and share the best shots with my family and friends.

Errors include incorrect singular/plural ('view' -> 'views', 'landscape' -> 'landscapes'), wrong verb form and clause structure ('that shared' -> 'and share'), and article use. Use plural nouns for general statements and coordinate verbs properly. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and use 'share' to show purpose.

× Last month I took many pictures of the mountain during a road trip.

✓ Last month I took many pictures of the mountains during a road trip.

'The mountain' suggests a specific single mountain; 'mountains' is more natural for general scenery unless a specific mountain was meant. Past tense 'took' is correct. If a specific mountain was intended, use 'the mountain' but clarify context. Suggestion: use plural when referring to mountainous scenery in general.

× Does this turn a great great picture?

✓ Did I get any great pictures?

Original is ungrammatical and unclear. Use past tense question 'Did I get...' to ask about results of past action, and correct noun phrase 'great pictures'. Suggestion: form yes/no question with auxiliary 'did' for past actions.

× I like both of the mountain and the sea but I actually prefer the mountain in the winter because I enjoy snowing, rolling the trees and people are to mature.

✓ I like both the mountains and the sea, but I actually prefer the mountains in winter because I enjoy the snow, the rolling hills, and the more relaxed atmosphere.

Problems: 'both of the mountain and the sea' should be 'both the mountains and the sea'; 'snowing' is the verb form, use noun 'snow'; 'rolling the trees' is incorrect—likely 'rolling hills' or 'tree-covered hills'; 'people are to mature' is unclear—perhaps 'more mature' or 'a more mature crowd' but context likely 'more relaxed atmosphere'. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and clearer descriptors.

× Like in summer my family and I go to the beach from a trip so I enjoy the sea then the mountain.

✓ In summer my family and I go on trips to the beach, so I enjoy the sea more than the mountains then.

Issues: 'go to the beach from a trip' is awkward; use 'go on trips to the beach'. Compare preferences using 'more than' for clarity. Maintain present simple for habitual actions ('we go'). Suggestion: use 'more than' to indicate preference and correct prepositional phrase 'go on trips to the beach'.

× Like just go to the explore in something or go to.

✓ I also like just going out to explore new places.

Original fragment is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use a gerund phrase 'going out to explore' to express general preference. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments and finish the idea with a clear verb and object.