Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word choice, and limit to 3–4 concise sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "so", "and", "because"). Be specific about what you notice and what you do with the photos. For example, replace 'terrible beauty' with a precise adjective (e.g., 'stunning' or 'unexpected') and remove duplicated words.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy the roadside scenery. I usually notice striking landscapes and interesting everyday scenes, so I take photos since I work as a photographer. I then upload the best pictures to my social media to share my work.

Suggestion: Make sentences grammatical and concise, avoid repetition, and state reasons clearly. Begin with a direct answer, then add 1–2 supporting sentences with linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Clarify the meaning of 'childhood job'—perhaps 'hobby'. Use correct verb forms and remove duplicate words.

Example: Yes, I do. I always take photos when I'm travelling because photography has been my hobby since childhood. Even when I'm busy I try to capture interesting scenes around the city, and later I organize the best shots for my portfolio.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct preference and then explain briefly with specific reasons and coherent linking words. Use correct comparative structures and precise vocabulary (e.g., 'mountains feel peaceful' or 'the sea refreshes me'). Avoid vague phrases and repeated words.

Example: I prefer the mountains because they offer peaceful, unique landscapes that help me relax and think clearly. However, the sea is also refreshing and energizes me, so I sometimes choose it when I need to feel more productive.

× When I'm in the bus or car, I can see the natural beauty of the roadside and mostly I can watch watching a terrible beauty.

✓ When I'm in the bus or car, I can see the natural beauty of the roadside and mostly I can watch a terrible beauty.

The original contains the redundant phrase 'watch watching' which is incorrect: only one verb form is needed. Use either 'watch' + noun or 'be watching' + noun. Also 'a terrible beauty' is odd but may be intentional; if not, change to 'terrible scenes' or similar. Suggestion: use 'I can watch a terrible scene' or 'I can see terrible scenes' to be natural. Note: This entry corrects the verb -ing duplication by removing the extra 'watching'.

× And at the same time I capture capture photo because I'm a photographer and those pictures are uploaded in social media.

✓ And at the same time I capture photos because I'm a photographer and those pictures are uploaded on social media.

Duplicated verb 'capture capture' is an editing error; 'capture' is fine. 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' to match 'those pictures' and general usage (quantifier issue but here fixed as plurality). Use the preposition 'on' with 'social media' rather than no preposition. Suggestion: 'I capture photos...uploaded on social media.'

× I'm always taking photos when I'm visiting, visiting and traveling.

✓ I'm always taking photos when I'm visiting and traveling.

The word 'visiting' is duplicated redundantly. Keep one instance. Also 'visiting and traveling' is somewhat repetitive; consider 'visiting places and traveling' or simply 'traveling'. Suggestion: Remove duplication and choose clearer terms.

× It's give me a chance to capture something and it's it's was a childhood job for me and I can't miss the chance of chance when I'm busy the outside city or in my city.

✓ It gives me a chance to capture something, and it was a childhood job for me, so I don't miss the chance to take photos whether I'm out of town or in my city.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'It's give' should be 'It gives' (subject-verb agreement and present tense). 'it's it's was' is duplication and wrong tense; use 'it was' for past. 'can't miss the chance of chance' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'don't miss the chance to'. 'when I'm busy the outside city' is ungrammatical — intended meaning likely 'when I'm out of town' or 'when I'm outside the city'. Restructure to clear clauses and consistent verb forms. Suggestion: Use consistent tenses and remove repetitions; separate ideas into clauses.

× Well, I'm preferable because mountain gives me a chance to see unique or specific something.

✓ Well, I prefer the mountains because the mountains give me a chance to see unique things.

'I'm preferable' is incorrect; the speaker should say 'I prefer' (verb). 'Mountain' needs plural form 'mountains' and a definite article 'the' when speaking generally. 'Unique or specific something' is ungrammatical; use 'unique things' or 'specific sights'. Suggestion: Use 'I prefer the mountains' and 'unique things' or 'specific sights.'

× On the other hand in term of see which which gives me a refresh my mind and stay productive on work and focus me and encourage to go ahead.

✓ On the other hand, the sea refreshes my mind, helps me stay productive at work, helps me focus, and encourages me to move forward.

Original sentence has multiple pronoun and structure errors: 'in term of see' is incorrect; intended contrast likely 'the sea'. 'which which' is duplicated. 'gives me a refresh my mind' mixes noun and verb forms; use 'refreshes my mind'. 'stay productive on work' should be 'stay productive at work'. 'focus me' should be 'helps me focus'. 'encourage to go ahead' should be 'encourages me to move forward'. Rephrase into a clear, parallel list of effects of the sea. Suggestion: Identify the subject ('the sea') and use parallel verb phrases: 'refreshes my mind, helps me stay productive at work, helps me focus, and encourages me.'