Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and natural but a little repetitive and slightly vague. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, trimming redundancy, and adding one specific detail or brief example. Use a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., because, and, so). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often look out the window when I travel by bus or car because the changing scenery helps me relax. For example, I enjoy watching small towns and farms pass by, which lets me imagine daily life in those places. This usually makes the journey feel shorter and more pleasant.

Suggestion: Your answer answers the question directly but is somewhat informal and contains repetition and fillers. Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, a reason, and one specific example. Avoid contractions like 'cause' and reduce fillers ('so', 'right').

Example: No, I usually don't take photos of scenery from a moving vehicle because I prefer to watch and relax. For instance, when I travel I focus on the landscape rather than my phone, so I can enjoy the moment without interruptions.

Suggestion: Good clear preference and reasons, but reduce hesitations and combine short sentences into a coherent response. Add one concrete detail (when or where you climbed) and use linking words (for example, because, therefore) to improve coherence and fluency.

Example: I prefer the mountains to the sea because hiking there gives me a strong sense of accomplishment and fantastic views. For example, after climbing Huangshan last year I felt proud and relaxed by the natural scenery, so I enjoy mountain trips more than seaside ones.

× Yes, I like looking out the window at the scenery when I travel by bus or car.

✓ Yes, I like looking out of the window at the scenery when I travel by a bus or a car.

Preposition choice: 'look out of the window' is more idiomatic than 'look out the window' in this context; also when referring to a nonspecific vehicle in general statements, using the articles 'a' before 'bus' and 'car' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'look out of' and include 'a' for clarity in general statements.

× It changes and it makes me feel relaxed and comfortable and I can imagine how they live.

✓ The scenery changes, and it makes me feel relaxed and comfortable, and I can imagine how people live.

Clarity and noun reference: 'It' is ambiguous and 'they' is incorrect to refer to 'people' when context is general. Use 'the scenery' as subject and 'people' instead of 'they'. Also add a comma to separate clauses. Suggestion: refer to the scenery explicitly and use 'people' for general reference.

× I usually don't take photos of scenery outside the car window 'cause I like watching the scenery and it makes me feel relaxed so I enjoy the time right so I don't need to.

✓ I usually don't take photos of the scenery outside the car window because I prefer watching it; it makes me feel relaxed, so I enjoy that time and don't feel the need to take photos.

Informal contraction and run-on sentence: 'cause' is colloquial; sentence is run-on and repetitive. Also missing article 'the' before 'scenery'. Suggestion: replace 'cause' with 'because', add 'the', split into clearer clauses, and remove redundant phrases like 'right'.

× I prefer the mountains to the sea.

✓ I prefer the mountains to the sea.

No correction needed: sentence is grammatically correct. It correctly uses plural 'mountains' and singular mass noun 'the sea'. Included for completeness.

× Umm, I have climbed the mountain.

✓ I have climbed mountains.

Article and number: 'the mountain' implies a specific mountain previously mentioned; in general statements about experience, plural 'mountains' or 'a mountain' is more natural. Using present perfect 'have climbed' is correct to express experience. Suggestion: say 'I have climbed mountains' or 'I have climbed a mountain' depending on meaning.

× I can feel accomplishments and the view is awesome.

✓ I can feel a sense of accomplishment, and the view is amazing.

Collocation and countability: 'accomplishments' is the wrong noun form here; the speaker means 'a sense of accomplishment' (uncountable feeling). 'Awesome' is informal; 'amazing' is a more natural adjective in this context. Suggestion: use 'a sense of accomplishment' and 'amazing'.

× So I like it.

✓ So I like it.

This sentence is grammatically correct but short and could be combined with the previous sentence for better flow. No grammatical change required.

× And I also like nature, it makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I also like nature because it makes me feel relaxed.

Comma splice: the original joins two independent clauses with a comma. Also starting with 'And' is conversational but acceptable; 'because' clarifies the relationship. Suggestion: connect clauses with 'because' or use a period.