Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar (e.g., "traveling" vs. "travelling" depending on variety) and avoid repeating the same idea twice.

Example: Yes. I usually look out the window when I travel, especially in new places, because I find the changing landscape relaxing and interesting. For example, on a recent trip I enjoyed watching countryside farms and old villages pass by, which helped me unwind and notice local life.

Suggestion: Provide a clearer structure: one topic sentence, one reason, and one concrete example. Improve word choice (use "remember" or "look back on" instead of "memorize") and correct collocations ("record my life" is fine but say "record memories" or "document my trips").

Example: Yes. I often take photos through the car window to document my travels because photos help me remember details I might forget. For instance, on a recent journey I photographed an unusual roadside market and later used those pictures to plan a return visit.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct statement, then give two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., "because", "and"). Fix grammar and phrasing ("I love exploring forests", "it's quieter"). Avoid redundancy and keep it within four sentences.

Example: I prefer the mountains. I enjoy exploring forests because the fresh air and peaceful atmosphere help me relax, and the scenery is more tranquil than the busy beach. For example, hiking in nearby hills lets me disconnect from city noise and recharge.

× Yeah, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I'm traveling, especially if I'm in a new place.

✓ Yeah, I usually look out the window at the scenery when I travel, especially if I am in a new place.

Use simple present 'travel' for habitual actions instead of present continuous 'I'm traveling'. 'I am in a new place' is acceptable but using simple present 'I am' matches habitual context; ensure tense consistency for habitual routines.

× It will make me feel curious and I think it's a good way for me to relax and pass time.

✓ It makes me feel curious and I think it's a good way for me to relax and pass the time.

For general truths or habitual reactions use simple present 'makes' rather than 'will make'. Also include the definite article 'the' in the fixed expression 'pass the time'.

× So I will look out the window and the scenery when I'm traveling.

✓ So I will look out at the scenery from the window when I am traveling.

The original repeats 'look out the window and the scenery', which is ungrammatical. Use the verb phrase 'look out at' and clarify 'from the window'. This preserves future intention 'will' while fixing object and preposition use.

× Yes, I really love taking photos of the scenery outside and I think it's the way to record my life especially.

✓ Yes, I really love taking photos of the scenery outside, and I think it is a way to record my life, especially.

The sentence needed a comma for clarity and 'it's the way to record my life especially' was awkward; replace with 'it is a way' and move 'especially' to the end. The gerund 'taking' is correct.

× It's a new place for me and maybe I will check out in the future to memorize the special moment.

✓ It's a new place for me, and maybe I will look back at the photos in the future to remember the special moments.

Use 'look back at the photos' rather than 'check out' to convey reviewing memories. 'Memorize' is incorrect for recalling memories; use 'remember'. Match plural 'moments' to general experiences. 'Will' is acceptable for future action.

× Well, I definitely prefer the mountains 'cause there's no sea around my hometown and I really love the exploring in the forest and I can breathe fresh air and relax myself and it's more quieter than the beach.

✓ Well, I definitely prefer the mountains because there is no sea near my hometown, and I really love exploring the forest where I can breathe fresh air and relax; it is quieter than the beach.

Replace informal ' 'cause' with 'because'. Remove unnecessary definite article before 'exploring' and use 'near' instead of 'around'. Use 'relax' not 'relax myself'. 'More quieter' is redundant; use 'quieter'. Improve sentence flow with connectors and punctuation.

× So This is why I prefer the mountains.

✓ So this is why I prefer the mountains.

Capitalization error: 'This' should be lowercase 'this' because it continues the sentence. The structure is otherwise fine; fix capitalization to follow standard sentence case.