Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (verb forms, articles, word order) and conciseness. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. Focus on correct simple present tense (e.g. “I always look”), use articles (a/the), and reduce redundant phrases.

Example: Yes, I always look out of the window when I travel by bus or train. I find it very relaxing, because I enjoy watching houses and people walking along the street. For example, I often notice small shops and children playing, which makes the journey more interesting.

Suggestion: Fix tense and word form errors and make sentences more coherent. Start with a clear statement, then give a specific reason and one concrete example. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas, and avoid repeating words.

Example: Yes, I often take photos during road trips because I enjoy capturing everyday scenes. For example, I like photographing people walking dogs and the small shops along the road, as these images remind me of local life.

Suggestion: Correct pronunciation and grammar, and structure the answer: give a direct preference, a clear reason, and a specific example. Use correct articles and plural forms, and avoid hesitation. Replace unclear words (e.g. “queues”) with correct terms (e.g. “quays” or “seaside walks”).

Example: I personally prefer the sea because it is very relaxing. For instance, when I walk along the seaside or the quays, I can watch marine life such as crabs, fish and octopus, which I find calming and interesting.

× Yeah, I always looking out of the window and what a seating in the a bus or a train because I quiet very relaxes every time I look outside.

✓ Yeah, I always look out of the window and find a seat on the bus or train because I feel very relaxed every time I look outside.

Original used 'always looking' instead of simple present 'always look' for habitual action (rule: use base verb with adverbials of frequency). 'what a seating in the a bus or a train' is unclear and incorrect; 'find a seat on the bus or train' is natural. 'quiet very relaxes' mixes adverb/adjective and wrong verb form; use 'feel very relaxed'. Suggestion: use simple present for habits and correct adjective forms (relaxed) and collocations ('find a seat', 'on the bus').

× I love seeing houses and people walking and walking and stuff.

✓ I love seeing houses and people walking and so on.

Repeated 'walking and walking' is redundant. Present participle 'seeing' and 'walking' are okay, but use a concise phrase like 'and so on' or 'and other things' for clarity. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use appropriate connectors.

× So it I really enjoy, I really enjoy watching that kind of things.

✓ So I really enjoy watching those kinds of things.

Sentence has extra filler 'it' and repetition. Use 'those kinds of things' (plural) after 'watching'. Suggestion: remove unnecessary words and match noun number.

× Yes, I always take the photos when I sitting in the car for a road trip.

✓ Yes, I always take photos when I am sitting in the car on a road trip.

After 'when' use full verb form 'I am sitting' (present continuous) to describe an action occurring during the trip. Use 'take photos' (no article) and 'on a road trip' is the correct preposition. Suggestion: use correct tense for ongoing actions and correct prepositions.

× I find it very interesting when watching people walking in the shop and people walking the dog on the street and see how how houses and the shop along the road really it really interesting.

✓ I find it very interesting to watch people walking in shops, people walking their dogs on the street, and to see how houses and shops are arranged along the road.

Use infinitive 'to watch' after 'find it interesting' rather than 'when watching'. 'People walking the dog' should be 'people walking their dogs'. Remove duplicate 'how how' and fix word order: 'houses and shops are arranged along the road' is clearer. Also remove extra 'really it really interesting'. Suggestion: use correct verb forms after 'find', correct possessive for 'their dogs', and clear clause structure.

× I person I personally prefer the sea.

✓ Personally, I prefer the sea.

Redundant 'I person I personally' is incorrect. Use 'Personally, I prefer...' or 'I personally prefer...'. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use a single adverbial modifier.

× I really enjoy going on a queues 'cause it when I have a opportunity to watch all the marine life such that crab, fish and octopus and I I see it very relaxing and I enjoy it.

✓ I really enjoy going to the coast because when I have an opportunity to watch marine life such as crabs, fish, and octopuses, I find it very relaxing.

Several errors: 'going on a queues' is meaningless—likely 'going to the coast' or 'the sea'. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause' and correct article 'an opportunity'. 'All the marine life such that' should be 'marine life such as'. Use plural nouns 'crabs' and 'octopuses' and simpler clause 'I find it very relaxing' instead of 'I see it very relaxing'. Remove duplicated 'I I'. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary ('coast' or 'sea'), use 'such as' for examples, pluralize animals, and proper articles.