Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời tự nhiên nhưng có một vài lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt lặp ý. Hãy tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “look out the window” và “enjoy the scenery” lặp ý), sửa lỗi thì (tenses) và thứ tự từ để câu mượt hơn. Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi dùng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ: màu sắc, hoạt động ở làng quê) và một liên từ để kết nối ý. Giới hạn độ dài ở tối đa 4 câu để phù hợp yêu cầu Part 1.

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy seeing the changing landscape. I especially like watching small villages with colorful houses and farmers working in the fields, as these scenes make the journey more interesting. For example, last month I saw bright yellow rapeseed fields that lifted my mood.

Suggestion: Ý tốt nhưng có lỗi thì và cấu trúc câu không chính xác (ví dụ “whenever I move” nên là “when I travel to a new city”; “it helped” nên là “they help”; “sometime” → “sometimes”; thiếu liên từ hợp lý). Nên tách thành hai câu: một câu khẳng định ngắn và một câu giải thích với ví dụ cụ thể. Dùng từ vựng chính xác (remember the trip, preserve memories) và chú ý số nhiều/đơn.

Example: Yes, I often take photos and videos from the car window when I travel to a new city. They help me remember the trip—for instance, I recorded a sunset over an old bridge last summer, and watching the video brings back vivid memories.

Suggestion: Ý rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và lựa chọn từ (ví dụ “wind that blow my hair” → “wind that blows my hair”; “salty meal” → “salty smell”; “sea wave” → “sea waves”; câu thừa từ “I occasionally I”). Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn, sau đó nêu 2–3 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc và giữ tổng cộng không quá 4 câu.

Example: I prefer the sea because I love the feeling of the breeze on my face and the salty smell in the air. The sound of the waves and the sight of seabirds make me feel relaxed, so I often visit the coast to recharge—last spring I spent a weekend by the sea and returned feeling much calmer.

× Yes, whenever I move to a new city I take a lot of photos and often shoot videos of the scenery outside the car window because it helped me to remember the trip and sometime it remind me about the beautiful memory in the past.

✓ Yes, whenever I move to a new city I take a lot of photos and often shoot videos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me to remember the trip and sometimes they remind me of the beautiful memories from the past.

The sentence contains several problems: incorrect use of past tense 'helped' where present tense 'help' is needed to match 'I take' and 'shoot' (Present tense issue - ID 6), 'sometime' should be plural 'sometimes' (Incorrect use of quantifiers/word form - ID 14), and 'it remind me' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun number errors; use 'they remind' to agree with plural 'photos and videos' (Subject-verb agreement / Incorrect use of pronouns - IDs 27 and 12). Also 'about the beautiful memory in the past' is awkward; use 'of the beautiful memories from the past'. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same present tense when describing habitual actions, make pronouns agree in number with their antecedents, and use plural/pluralized time words correctly.

× Yes, I usually look out the window of the bus or car when I travel to enjoy the scenery. I particularly like watching the countryside and small villages pass by because the changing landscape makes me make the journey more interesting.

✓ Yes, I usually look out the window of the bus or car when I travel to enjoy the scenery. I particularly like watching the countryside and small villages pass by because the changing landscape makes the journey more interesting.

The phrase 'makes me make the journey more interesting' is awkward and contains an unnecessary pronoun and verb combination. The correct structure is 'makes the journey more interesting' where 'makes' agrees with singular noun 'landscape' (Subject-verb agreement - ID 27) and the extra 'me make' should be omitted. Suggestion: remove unnecessary pronouns and use clear subject-action-object structures.

× I particularly love the sea, I enjoy the wind that blow my hair, the salty meal in the air and the sound of the sea wave and also seabird.

✓ I particularly love the sea; I enjoy the wind that blows my hair, the salty smell in the air, the sound of the sea waves, and the seabirds.

Multiple issues: 'wind that blow' needs third person singular 'blows' (Third person singular issue - ID 2), 'salty meal' is a wrong word choice; use 'salty smell' (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns - ID 13), 'sea wave' should be plural 'sea waves' and 'seabird' should be plural 'seabirds' to list things generally (Singular and plural issue - ID 1). Also punctuation should separate clauses. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects, choose correct nouns, and use plurals for general references.

× I occasionally I go to the coast to relax and it help me to feel calm and restart my energies.

✓ I occasionally go to the coast to relax, and it helps me feel calm and recharge my energy.

Problems: extra 'I' creates a sentence structure error (Sentence structure errors - ID 26), 'it help' should be 'it helps' for third person singular (Third person singular issue - ID 2), and 'restart my energies' is unnatural; use 'recharge my energy' or 'refresh my energy' (Incorrect use of adjectives or nouns / word choice - ID 13). Suggestion: remove duplicate words, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use natural collocations like 'recharge my energy'.