Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, use correct verb forms and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar: use present tense (look/take) and say ‘I look out of the window’ or ‘I enjoy the view.’

Example: Yes, I often look out of the window when I travel by bus or car because I enjoy the changing scenery. For example, I like to watch the countryside and city skylines, and I sometimes take a quick photo to share on social media.

Suggestion: Use a clear main sentence and follow with a specific reason. Avoid filler words and correct article and noun forms (e.g., ‘those pictures’). Use linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’ and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because they help me store memories of my trips. Later, when I look at those pictures, I can vividly recall the places and moments I experienced.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a topic sentence stating your overall preference or that it depends, then give clear, specific reasons using correct vocabulary (e.g., ‘beach’ not ‘beaches area’, ‘snowfall’ vs climate). Avoid incorrect verbs like ‘waste’. Use linking words (‘in winter’, ‘in summer’).

Example: It depends on the season: in winter I prefer the mountains because I enjoy snowy landscapes and winter activities, while in summer I prefer the beach because I like swimming and relaxing by the sea.

× When I travel by bus or car, uh, I took out of the window because, uh, uh, I find that scenery is very beautiful and uh, I see something, uh, uh, beautiful at that time.

✓ When I travel by bus or car, I take out my phone at the window because I find the scenery very beautiful and I see something beautiful at that time.

The original mixes present and past tenses (e.g., 'When I travel' present, then 'I took' past). Keep tense consistent: use present simple for habitual actions ('When I travel... I take'). Also added 'my phone' for clarity and removed filler words. Use 'the scenery' (definite article) when referring to specific scenery seen while traveling.

× I captured that uh, moment.

✓ I capture that moment.

The surrounding context describes habitual or immediate actions, so present simple 'capture' is appropriate rather than past 'captured'. If the speaker meant a past single event, use past consistently. Also removed filler words.

× And after that I share umm, through post on my social media.

✓ After that, I share it by posting on my social media.

Use present simple for habitual actions ('I share'). The phrase 'through post' is incorrect; use 'by posting'. Include the object 'it' to show what is shared. Commas and fillers removed for clarity.

× I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because capturing a beautiful scene, uh, it helped me, uh, store as a memory and, uh, when I, and later when I see that, uh, memories, umm, I can recall of my trip journey with the help of that pictures.

✓ I often take photos of the scenery outside the car window because capturing a beautiful scene helps me store it as a memory, and later when I see those photos I can recall my trip.

Original mixes tenses ('helped' past among present descriptions) and uses incorrect phrases ('store as a memory' missing object, 'recall of my trip journey', and 'that pictures' number mismatch). Use present simple 'helps' for habitual action, 'store it as a memory' for clarity, 'those photos' (plural) and 'recall my trip' (no 'of'). Removed redundant words.

× Well, it's depend on situation.

✓ Well, it depends on the situation.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'it depends' (third person singular) not 'it's depend'. Also include the article 'the' before 'situation' when referring to a specific context.

× Like in winter season, I prefer, uh, beaches area because, uh, at that time it's a snowfall and the, in summer season, uh, I like to waste the mountain area because the summer view of a mountain is beautiful as compared to winter season.

✓ In the winter, I prefer beach areas because it snows then; in summer, I prefer the mountains because the summer view of the mountains is more beautiful than in winter.

Many issues: incorrect prepositions and articles ('in winter season' -> 'in the winter', 'beaches area' -> 'beach areas', 'it's a snowfall' -> 'it snows'), wrong verb 'waste' should be 'visit' or 'prefer', comparison phrasing improved ('more beautiful than in winter'), and consistency in plural forms ('mountains'). The corrected sentence uses proper prepositions, articles, verbs, and comparative structure.