Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), fix verb agreement and tense, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so). Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. I always choose a window seat when I travel by bus, train or plane because I find the scenery calming. For example, I like watching changing landscapes and small villages pass by, which helps me relax and enjoy the journey.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer, remove fillers and correct tense and word choice. Explain briefly why you often fail and provide one specific example. Use linking words like because or however to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often try to take photos of scenery outside the window, but I usually fail because the vehicle is moving and the glass can be dirty or reflective. For instance, last month I tried to photograph a dramatic sunset from a bus, but the motion blurred the picture.

Suggestion: Answer directly (e.g., "I prefer the sea."), avoid unnecessary phrases like “Thank you for the question,” and correct phrasing (use present perfect or simple present). Add a specific reason and one brief example, using linking words such as because or since.

Example: I prefer the sea because the sound of waves and fresh air help me relax. For example, when I visit the coast I enjoy walking along the beach at sunset, which calms me and reduces stress.

× Yeah, I love to take a window seat when I'm traveling, uh, from bus, train or even aeroplane.

✓ Yeah, I love to take a window seat when I'm traveling by bus, train, or even airplane.

Use of preposition: 'from bus, train' is incorrect; we use 'by' to indicate means of transport. Also add articles or commas for clarity and use standard spelling 'airplane'. Improve: say 'by bus, train, or even airplane.'

× Also because it make me more relaxed and enjoying scenic beauty when I was travelling by a vehicle.

✓ Also, because it makes me more relaxed and lets me enjoy the scenic beauty when I'm traveling by vehicle.

Subject-verb agreement and verb form: 'it make' should be 'it makes' to agree with singular subject. 'enjoying' is wrong in this structure; use 'lets me enjoy' or 'and I enjoy'. Also tense consistency: sentence mixes present and past ('was travelling'); change to present progressive 'I'm traveling' to match general preference.

× Yeah, when I, uh, got up, very much expressive, uh, scenery.

✓ Yeah, when I see a very expressive scenery, I want to take a photo.

Sentence structure and clarity: 'when I, uh, got up' is unclear and incorrect contextually; likely intended 'when I see'. 'Very much expressive, uh, scenery' is awkward; rephrase as 'a very expressive scenery' or better 'a particularly striking scene'. Ensure subject and verb present.

× I want to take a snap of it, but most of the time I failed to do it.

✓ I want to take a snap of it, but most of the time I fail to do so.

Tense consistency: 'I want' is present; 'I failed' is past and inconsistent. Use present simple 'I fail' to express habitual failure. Also use 'do so' instead of 'do it' for idiomatic phrasing.

× I especially love to travel on the sea and I had a fascination about sea as it makes me relax my nervous system.

✓ I especially love to travel on the sea, and I am fascinated by the sea because it helps relax my nervous system.

Tense and verb choice: 'I had a fascination about sea' mixes past with present preference; use present 'I am fascinated by the sea'. Preposition: 'fascinated about' is incorrect; use 'fascinated by'. Also 'it makes me relax my nervous system' is unidiomatic; use 'it helps relax my nervous system' or 'it relaxes me.'