Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, correct word choice (e.g., “look” not “browse”), and fix grammar (singular/plural and prepositions). Use one linking phrase to explain the reason and keep it within 2–3 sentences. For example, say who you travel with and why your behaviour changes, using specific detail (e.g., enjoy chatting versus enjoying views).

Example: I usually look out the window, but it depends on who I’m with. When I travel with friends or family I prefer to talk with them, so I mostly chat instead of watching the scenery; when I travel alone I like to look outside because it helps me relax and think.

Suggestion: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Use a clear reason with better phrasing: “I prefer not to take photos because I want to enjoy the view with my own eyes.” Add a brief supporting detail (e.g., photos are often blurry from a moving vehicle). Keep to 1–2 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “so.”

Example: I usually don’t take photos from the car because I prefer to enjoy the view with my own eyes; besides, photos taken from a moving vehicle often turn out blurry.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer then a concise, coherent reason. Avoid awkward phrasing and repetition; say “I prefer the mountains” then explain briefly, using linking words like “because” or “since.” Use correct past tense and clear wording when describing past experiences and avoid the word “trauma” casually — explain briefly instead (e.g., “a frightening experience”).

Example: I prefer the mountains because I don’t enjoy the sea. When I was a child I nearly drowned once, so the sea makes me anxious and I feel safer in the mountains.

× When I travel with my friend, family and friend I prefer to browse in the car but travel by myself I prefer to bus because.

✓ When I travel with my friends or my family, I prefer to look around in the car, but when I travel by myself I prefer to take the bus.

Errors: incorrect coordination and missing articles, singular/plural and verb choice. 'friend, family and friend' is unclear and should be 'friends or my family' (singular/plural and clarity). 'browse in the car' is wrong verb for looking at scenery; use 'look around'. 'prefer to bus' lacks verb and article; use 'prefer to take the bus'. Also missing 'when' before 'travel by myself' to parallel the clause. Suggestion: break into two clauses with parallel structure, ensure correct articles and verb forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I don't like, take a picture on my trip because, uh, I think it's, uh, important to look out on my eyes. Umm.

✓ I don't like to take pictures on my trips because I think it's important to look with my own eyes.

Errors: incorrect infinitive phrase and pluralization: 'don't like, take a picture' should be 'don't like to take pictures'. 'on my trip' pluralized to 'on my trips' for general habit. 'look out on my eyes' is ungrammatical; correct is 'look with my own eyes' or 'see with my own eyes'. Remove filler commas. Suggestion: use correct infinitive 'to take', plural 'pictures' for general habits, and correct prepositional phrase 'with my own eyes'. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I prefer to travel to the mountain because I don't like sea.

✓ I prefer to travel to the mountains because I don't like the sea.

Errors: 'to the mountain' vs idiomatic 'to the mountains' or 'to the mountain' if singular destination; plural is more natural when speaking generally. 'don't like sea' requires the definite article 'the sea' when speaking about the sea in general. Suggestion: use plural 'mountains' for general preference and include 'the' before 'sea'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Umm when I was young I once a time I almost drowning in the sea so it's a trauma.

✓ When I was young I once almost drowned in the sea, so it is a traumatic experience for me.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'almost drowning' should be past tense 'almost drowned'. 'I once a time' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'once' or 'one time' but here 'once' is sufficient. 'it's a trauma' is better expressed as 'it is a traumatic experience for me' for clarity and correctness. Suggestion: use simple past 'drowned' for completed past events, remove redundant words, and use appropriate noun/adjective collocation ('traumatic experience'). Grammar problem type ID:5