Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is natural, relevant and well-structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. To improve further, vary your sentence beginnings and add one specific detail (for example, a particular scene you enjoy) to make it more vivid. Also, use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I often look out the window on long journeys because I get bored and need something to occupy me. For example, I enjoy watching golden wheat fields and old stone cottages pass by, which makes the time go by faster. Additionally, seeing different people and traffic adds variety to the trip.

Suggestion: This response is clear, coherent and directly answers the question with a good reason. To raise the score, shorten and tighten the opening (avoid extra fillers like “I'm afraid”) and include a linking word before the reason. You could also offer a brief alternative (e.g., taking photos when stationary) to enrich the answer.

Example: No, I rarely take photos of the scenery because I often get motion sickness, so I avoid using electronic devices. Instead, when I stop at viewpoints or rest areas, I sometimes take pictures of the landscape.

Suggestion: Your answer directly addresses the question and gives a clear personal reason, which is good. To improve, reduce repetition (avoid saying 'usually' twice) and add a brief positive detail about the sea (for example, activities you enjoy) using a linking word to contrast more smoothly.

Example: I prefer the sea because I have arthritis in my hips and ankles, which makes mountain climbing painful. Consequently, I find walking along coastal paths much more comfortable, and I also enjoy the fresh sea air and gentle waves.

× I usually look out the window on long bus or car journeys because I get bored and need something to occupy me.

✓ I usually look out of the window on long bus or car journeys because I get bored and need something to occupy me.

The verb phrase 'look out' when meaning to view from inside to outside commonly uses the preposition 'out of' with 'window' in British and standard English: 'look out of the window' or alternatively 'look out the window' can be used in informal American English. To be precise and consistent, 'look out of the window' is preferred. Suggestion: Use 'look out of the window' or keep 'look out the window' if using informal American style.

× I like watching the passing scenery, fields, buildings and people which helps the time go by more quickly.

✓ I like watching the passing scenery, fields, buildings and people, which helps the time go by more quickly.

The issue is punctuation affecting clause clarity and the relative pronoun clause refers back to the whole activity; adding a comma before 'which' makes the non-defining relative clause correct. Grammatically the structure is correct with 'watching' (verb + -ing), but punctuation was needed. Suggestion: Use a comma before 'which' when adding a non-restrictive clause.

× I'm afraid I seldom take photos of the scenery because I often tend to get motion sickness during car or bus journeys.

✓ I'm afraid I seldom take photos of the scenery because I often get motion sickness during car or bus journeys.

The phrase 'often tend to get' is redundant: 'tend to' already conveys frequency/likelihood, and combining it with 'often' is wordy. Use either 'often get' or 'tend to get'. Suggestion: Prefer 'often get motion sickness' for clarity and conciseness.

× To avoid feeling sick, I usually don't use electronic devices and just relax and enjoy the view instead.

✓ To avoid feeling sick, I usually do not use electronic devices and just relax and enjoy the view instead.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; the only change is expanding the contraction for formal clarity. The pronoun use is correct. Suggestion: In formal responses, avoid contractions: 'do not' rather than 'don't'.

× I definitely go for the sea because I have arthritis in my hips and ankles, so I usually suffer from severe pain when I climb the mountain.

✓ I definitely prefer the sea because I have arthritis in my hips and ankles, so I usually suffer severe pain when I climb mountains.

'Go for the sea' is idiomatic but 'prefer the sea' is more natural. 'Climb the mountain' implies a specific mountain; use plural 'mountains' for general statement. Also 'suffer from severe pain' can be 'suffer severe pain' (both correct); adjusted for natural phrasing. Suggestion: Use 'prefer the sea' and 'climb mountains' when speaking generally.

× In contrast, walking alongside the sea roads would be more comfortable for me.

✓ In contrast, walking along the coastal roads would be more comfortable for me.

The phrase 'sea roads' is unidiomatic; 'coastal roads' or 'roads along the sea' is natural. Also 'walking along' is the normal preposition for following a path or road. Suggestion: Use 'walking along the coastal roads' or 'walking along the seafront' depending on intended meaning.