Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid fillers (uh, and). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct prepositions and article forms (e.g., 'on a train', 'the Bernina Express'). Limit to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'for example' or 'so' sparingly and correctly.

Example: Yes, I usually choose a window seat when I travel. For example, on the Bernina Express in Switzerland I always sit by the window because the alpine views are spectacular, so I can enjoy and photograph the scenery.

Suggestion: Correct tense and grammar (e.g., 'I take photos', 'I used to watch' vs 'I watch', 'the best views I have ever seen'). Remove repeated words and fillers. Provide one clear reason and one specific detail about how you store or use photos. Keep within 2–4 sentences and use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I often take photos of the scenery from a window seat because I want to remember the view. I save the best pictures in a photo album on my phone so I can look back at them years later.

Suggestion: Start with a concise topic sentence stating preference, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words (because, so). Avoid short fragmented sentences and fillers like 'uh' and single-word sentences like 'Always.' Use correct phrasing ('I go hiking and camping', 'I am not a sea person').

Example: I prefer the mountains because I enjoy hiking and camping. The panoramic views from a summit are always breathtaking, so I feel more relaxed and energized there than by the sea.

× I allowed to take pictures of the best views that I ever seen.

✓ I am allowed to take pictures of the best views that I have ever seen.

The original sentence uses the past participle 'seen' without the auxiliary 'have.' In present perfect tense, use 'have/has' + past participle: 'have seen.' Also 'allowed' needs appropriate auxiliary 'am' to form passive or permission: 'I am allowed' or better to express habit 'I am allowed' fits context. Alternatively, if meaning was past habit, use 'I was allowed.' Suggested improvement: decide whether you mean present permission (use 'I am allowed') or past habit (use 'I was allowed') and use 'have seen' for experiences up to now.

× I used to, uh, watch the scenery sitting on the window seat and I allowed to take pictures of the best views that I ever seen.

✓ I usually watch the scenery while sitting in the window seat and I am allowed to take pictures of the best views that I have ever seen.

The phrase 'used to' implies a past habit; the context describes a present routine, so use 'usually' or 'tend to.' 'Sitting on the window seat' should be 'sitting in the window seat.' 'Allowed to' needs 'am' for present permission. 'Ever seen' requires present perfect 'have seen.' Suggested improvement: use adverbs like 'usually' for present routines and ensure correct preposition ('in' for seats) and present perfect with 'have.'

× I always prefer the window seat when I'm traveling uh, for example, when I'm on a flight, I ask the, the ground staff to please give me the window seat.

✓ I always prefer the window seat when I'm traveling; for example, when I'm on a flight, I ask the ground staff to please give me the window seat.

Original contains redundant commas and 'the, the' repetition. Also 'on a flight' is correct; main issue is punctuation and redundancy rather than preposition. Correction removes repetition and fixes punctuation to improve clarity. Suggested improvement: avoid repeated words and use punctuation to separate clauses.

× And also, uh, when I'm at train, for example, the Birmingham Bernina Express in Switzerland, of course you have to take the windowed seat to look out and, and.

✓ Also, when I'm on a train, for example on the Bernina Express in Switzerland, of course you have to take the window seat to look out.

Use 'on a train' not 'at train.' 'Windowed seat' is unnatural; use 'window seat.' Removed filler repetition and corrected the name to 'Bernina Express' and preposition 'on.' Suggested improvement: use 'on' with modes of transport like trains and say 'window seat.' Avoid filler words.

× I do take the photos of the scenery outside the car window, uh, when I'm traveling, I used to, uh, watch the scenery sitting on the window seat and I allowed to take pictures of the best views that I ever seen.

✓ I do take photos of the scenery outside the car window when I'm traveling. I usually watch the scenery while sitting in the window seat, and I am allowed to take pictures of the best views that I have ever seen.

Split run-on sentence into two for clarity. Replace 'used to' with 'usually' for present habit. 'Allowed' needs auxiliary 'am.' 'Seen' requires 'have' for present perfect. Preposition 'in' is used for 'window seat.' Suggested improvement: avoid long run-on sentences; choose correct tense for habits and use present perfect for life experiences.

× I used to collect it in my memory collections and it's happy to see that again after a few years.

✓ I collect these memories and I'm happy to see them again after a few years.

'Used to collect' suggests past habit; context refers to an ongoing habit so 'collect' is better. 'Memory collections' is awkward; use 'memories.' 'It's happy' incorrectly uses 'it' for people’s feelings; use 'I'm happy' and 'them' to refer to memories. Suggested improvement: use correct pronouns for the subject and concise nouns ('memories') and present tense for current habits.

× I always prefer the mountains. I believe I'm a mountain person because most of the vacations I go for hiking and camping in the mountains.

✓ I always prefer the mountains. I believe I'm a mountain person because most of the vacations I take are for hiking and camping in the mountains.

'Go for hiking' is incorrect collocation; use 'are for hiking' or 'I go hiking.' Also 'most of the vacations I go' should be 'most of the vacations I take' or 'most of my vacations.' Suggested improvement: use natural collocations like 'take a vacation,' 'go hiking,' or 'vacations are for' depending on structure.

× The best view that you see from the top of the mountain is mesmerizing. Always.

✓ The best view you see from the top of a mountain is always mesmerizing.

'Always' placed as a separate sentence is awkward. Move 'always' before the adjective to modify 'mesmerizing' and use 'a mountain' for general statement. Also combine into one sentence for fluency. Suggested improvement: place adverbs close to the words they modify and avoid sentence fragments.

× Uh, I'm not a sea person. I don't usually prefer sea.

✓ I'm not a sea person. I don't usually prefer the sea.

'Prefer sea' lacks the article 'the.' Use 'the sea' when speaking generally about that environment. 'Not a sea person' is informal but acceptable; keep consistent article usage. Suggested improvement: include 'the' with 'sea' in general statements and maintain consistent noun forms.