Travelling— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific, coherent details using linking words. Avoid unclear words and repetitions (e.g., "UMM feel"). Use correct verb forms ("change" not "changes" with plural subject) and articles. Keep answers within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy looking out the window because watching the weather and landscape change can be very relaxing. For example, I like seeing open fields turn into wooded areas during a long drive, which helps me feel calm and interested in the journey.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and reduce hesitation/repetition. Begin with a direct topic sentence ("Not often"), then explain reason with clear linking words ("because"). Use singular/plural correctly and avoid filler words. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and give one specific detail.

Example: Not often. I rarely take photos from a moving car because the pictures usually come out blurry, and I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes. For instance, on long trips I focus on the scenery rather than taking photos so I can remember it clearly.

Suggestion: Provide a clear preference with concise reasons. Fix grammar ("waves move", "it seems to take away my anxiety"). Use linking words to connect ideas ("and", "because"). Replace vague or incorrect phrases ("some kind cow pressure me") with specific descriptions ("feel overwhelming"). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer the sea because watching the waves move helps me relax and reduces my anxiety. I don't like mountains as much because their scale can feel overwhelming and make me feel uneasy.

× Yes, I especially like looking out the window as we drive because I like to see how the changes of the weather and the landscape as we drive.

✓ Yes, I especially like looking out the window when we drive because I like to see how the weather and the landscape change as we travel.

The sentence mixes noun phrases and verb forms incorrectly. 'How the changes of the weather and the landscape as we drive' is ungrammatical. Use the present simple verb 'change' to describe habitual actions (present tense). Replace 'as we drive' with 'when we drive' or 'as we travel' for natural phrasing, and use 'weather and the landscape change' rather than 'the changes of the weather and the landscape'. Suggestion: Use present simple for habitual actions and keep parallel structure: 'see how the weather and landscape change.'

× For example, I often find it relaxing when I see the changes of the UMM feel to the land, to the forests in the countryside as we drive.

✓ For example, I often find it relaxing when I see how the land and the forests in the countryside change as we drive.

The phrase 'changes of the UMM feel to the land' is unclear and uses incorrect prepositions and word order. 'See how' introduces a clause describing change. Use 'land and the forests' as the subjects that 'change.' Remove unnecessary prepositions like 'to' after 'feel' and the unclear 'UMM feel.' Suggestion: Keep clauses clear and simple: 'see how the land and forests change.'

× I seldom took picture outside the scenery because as the car is moving and the the the the scenery just change often.

✓ I seldom take pictures of the scenery outside because the car is moving and the scenery changes so often.

The original mixes past 'took' with present progressive 'is moving' and base verb 'change.' For habitual action, use present simple: 'seldom take.' Also pluralize 'pictures' and use correct preposition 'of' for 'pictures of the scenery.' Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'scenery changes.' Remove repetition 'the the the the.' Suggestion: Use consistent tense (present simple for habits) and correct plural forms and prepositions.

× I would rather enjoy at the moment where I use my eyes to witness the beauty of the sceneries.

✓ I prefer to enjoy the moment and use my eyes to take in the beauty of the scenery.

'Enjoy at the moment where' is incorrect preposition and clause structure. Use 'enjoy the moment' or 'prefer to enjoy the moment.' 'Witness the beauty' is acceptable but 'take in the beauty' is more natural. 'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so not 'sceneries.' Suggestion: Use correct prepositions and uncountable nouns: 'enjoy the moment' and 'the scenery.'

× I prefer the sea because I like seeing how the sea wave move because as it's move it just seems like it brings away my anxiety and I don't really like the mountain because to me the mountain just stood there and it's so huge and it's some kind cow pressure me.

✓ I prefer the sea because I like watching how the sea waves move; as they move, it seems to wash away my anxiety. I don't really like the mountains because they just stand there, they're so huge, and they kind of make me feel pressured.

Multiple issues: use plural 'waves' and present simple 'move' for habitual action. 'Seeing' is acceptable but 'watching' is more natural here. 'It's move' is ungrammatical; use 'as they move.' 'Brings away my anxiety' is awkward; use 'wash away my anxiety.' 'Mountain' should be plural 'mountains' if speaking generally, and use present simple 'stand' not past 'stood.' 'It's some kind cow pressure me' is nonsensical; interpret as 'they kind of pressure me' and use correct phrasing 'kind of make me feel pressured.' Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general preferences and maintain present simple for habitual descriptions; choose natural verbs and correct pronouns ('they' for plural).